The inner child as influence

[CharleyH]

I have just been reminded of a novel I am working on, but I have been hesitant to post chapters on lit because of a conundrum about rules.

The story is of a female dominatrix protag. The first chapter is her memory created her as a dominating woman, and influenced her as a professional dom (I use this spelling exceptionally purposefully )

The chapter, in itself, is a recounting of one event, however, there is one part that I am not concerned about off of lit, but am curious about whether I can post it on lit?

Don't know if I will get bashed for this since it is 1976 and corporeal punishment was not thrashed with lawsuits, but . . . the norm.

Part lead up to the event:

“Geraldine. You can serve dinner now.” Then she turned to my Dad. “You can spank her until she cries or screams, which ever comes first.” She never raised her voice, not once. She said the words with such composure that I wondered if she was even real.

I stared at her and did not break a tear. I stared at her and held my head high.

Before she sat down, she again turned around to my Dad. “And use the belt.”

She formed the words from her lips like a work of art. I remember that. I remember her lips moving, and her face as expressionless as Mona Lisa’s. Somehow, I admired the way she was, the way she moved. Somehow, I wanted to please her and I wanted to be like her.

I could tell my sister was on the verge of tears. She looked at me. She had the same eyes as our Mother, but there was tenderness in hers. I shook my head and she knew, even at six, that she shouldn’t dare shed them, not at that moment, and not in front of our Mother.

My Mother poured herself a glass of Pinot Noir, and Geraldine brought out the Tournedos. I could smell the brandy glazed beef tenderloin and the porcini duc sel. Before eating, my Dad abided my Mother’s wishes and marched me to my room.

With each proud step I took, I told myself, ‘I’m not going to cry. There’s nothing to cry over.’ As I lay over his knee, and the thick, tan barber belt clapped my small cheeks, I convinced myself, ‘I will not cry,’ and as I flinched from the slap and the smack and the strike of the leather, I ‘did’ not cry.


End of portion, but is this too much for Lit?

 

[ABSTRUSE]

I think if it's an essential part of the story, to go back into her memory, and these images are produced it should be okay. However some people might take it out of context and jump on the child abuse wagon.
There are many novels in the public domain that use the same idea to set up the stage for understanding the character, so I'm sure it should be okay for Lit.

See what others have to say.

Just my thoughts.

~A~

 

[rgraham666]

The passage made me snarl like a Klingon.

Not because it was badly written, or that I think such things shouldn't be written, but because I find people who abuse children somewhere between pond slime and that white stuff that forms at the edge of your mouth when you sleep.

OK, having gotten naked emotionalism out of the way, no, I don't think it's to much for Lit.
It sets up the character, who she is and how she became that way.

And what's a story without characters? Not much.

 

[CharleyH]

oh there is much more - it isn't so much abusive, forgot to write the next few lines about the Dad crying because he couldn't really do it . . . and the Mother practically grinning at the childs stoicism, but divorcing the Dad a few months later . . . hmmm. Just a question and I thank you both profusely, for answering . . .

 

[Guest]

Charlie, that's a very intriguing excerpt, but I have no idea whether it's fit for Lit. Just want to say you've got something there re. character development, all five of them.

Perdita

 

[CharleyH]

LOL P . p. p.pueta or peuta I can yell it not spell it . . . hey did I mention that aside from your doorway stocking pic - glasses turn me on? Do you think some of the guys, maybe Joe, night give me a pic with specs around the cock - um nose? LOL

 

[Guest]

Hey, you smartypants semiotical gal, you came pretty close to spelling my name as puta .

I have two cool pair of specs and dark shades too, hint, hint... Phildo might have a spectacled dick pic.

P-e-r-d-i-t-a

 

[Weird Harold]

The chapter, in itself, is a recounting of one event, however, there is one part that I am not concerned about off of lit, but am curious about whether I can post it on lit?

I don't think you'll have any problems with the corporal punishment aspect as long as you don't get graphic about any sexual implications.

 

[angela146]

Charley,

I have some similar stories that I would like to tell. Please PM me. I would like to maybe trade stories if you're open to it.

I posted "Michelle's Last Spanking" (see my sig below) as a mild example but the receipient in that story is 18. The rest of the stories I could tell involve those under 18 and, hence, I won't be posting them here.

My guess is that the kind of thing you describe would not be within the acceptable standards at Lit. However, you might want to submit a chapter and put something in the "notes" field.

Tell Laurel that you aren't sure if this is within the boundaries and give her a summary of the content that might be "over the line".

 

[ABSTRUSE]

Charley,

I have some similar stories that I would like to tell. Please PM me. I would like to maybe trade stories if you're open to it.

I posted "Michelle's Last Spanking" (see my sig below) as a mild example but the receipient in that story is 18. The rest of the stories I could tell involve those under 18 and, hence, I won't be posting them here.

My guess is that the kind of thing you describe would not be within the acceptable standards at Lit. However, you might want to submit a chapter and put something in the "notes" field.

Tell Laurel that you aren't sure if this is within the boundaries and give her a summary of the content that might be "over the line".

That's a good suggestion. Then let us know what she says, Charley. It could be helpful to all.