The Cabin and The Fantasy

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

To all the readers of Literotica! Please check out my stories, I would love to hear some feedback from you! I think you will be pleasantly surprized! Third one to come soon! Dezerae Remembers..Sequel to The Cabin.. Happy reading..Katerina

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Both stories can be found under (NEW) Thank you!

 

[DCL]

I read The Cabin and would recommend it to anyone looking for something more than the usual Wham Bam. It was romantic, and written in a lovely prose style.

Since you want feedback, and since you're obviously interested in writing well, I can say that you can further develop your use of metaphor and prose, and work on paragraphing (leading with a single thought).

Please continue to write, and I hope others have a chance to read your stories.

Dixon

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Both stories can now be found under Romance in the T section. Thank you Kat

 

[Bob Peale]

Kat,

Got a chance to read both stories this weekend. I think that they were both well written, and good representations of the romantic genre.

By way of feedback, I offer the following:

It seemed at times that you pursued two discordant styles; sometimes, you seemed wrapped up in a scene, and wrote the way you wuld want to read. The sights, the emotions, even the physi8cal feelings were very tangible, and as a reader, I got drawn in the action. I got the impression that I was reading what turned you on.

Other times, you seemed to adopt the role of narrator, describing actions, scenes, etc. from a more detached stance. While descriptive, it wasn't engaging.

This is my rather long winded way of saying, stick to what turns you on, and let the reader take care of him/herself. I really liked the more personal style better, partially because you made me feel like I was really there.

Leave something to the reader's imagination; two thirds of a story takes place in the mind, not on (virtual) paper.

Keep up the good work! You may help some of the rest of us look classy yet

Peace,
Bob

 

[Phallux]

Hey Katerina, finally got a chance to read your highly descriptive stories. Your second, The Fantasy, was a great improvement upon your first in that it seemed to flow better. I enjoyed the blow-job scene in The Cabin, and the oral sex scenes in The Fantasy very much; you are quite the master of oral sex descriptive writing.
One suggestion when your characters speak: it's important that their speech, what they say and how they say it, correlates to the scenario at hand. Try adding some color to how they speak; for example, I find that simply using italicized lettering can add a lot to the mood of the speech, especially when thoughts are expressed, or the characters are amidst their passion.

I look forward to your next one, although I haven't found it yet on literotica. Please tell me more about making some $. Thanks!

Phallux