The Alpha and Omega comment game

[lovecraft68]

The Alpha and Omega...the first and the last.

Post the first comment on the first story you published here-I know for people with long story files this might take a few minutes

Then post the last comment you've received on the last story you published

Include title...and dates if you want.

Almost Perfect 5/13/10

by Pistolpackinpete
05/13/10
Was O.K. but by the end....
she was just wasting a chance to get a truly devoted slave by trying to break him.

Tales of My Slutty Sister- 6/8/20

by Anonymous
06/08/20
Awesome
This is the best fuckiing story i have read in a long long time. Amazing start, amazing buildup, perfect ending. Loved every part of it. Keep writing!

 

[LoquiSordidaAdMe]

My very first comment is my favorite of all time.

My Niece and Her Roommate; Aug 19, 2017

spra-HOOOOON!
by Anonymous user on 08/19/2017
freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep
​

And my most recent is also quite flattering in a very different way.

Man of the Hour; Dec 27, 2019

by lex8508 on 04/29/2020
I love how he's not a total super stud.. Sure he pounds the hell out of her, but I love that he's pretty shy. As a really shy guy myself, I wish there were more stories about guys like me that aren't studs, even better if the dude isn't able to pound the girl's brains out either and has to rely on toys or her doing the work.. because yes that's how it is with me thanks to being on the autism spectrum and having back/hip issues... or at least how it will be.. I'm still a virgin.

I think you'd do great at writing a story like that, or one of some slutty chick (maybe even a stripper with big fake tits?) falling for and teaching an older virgin guy.​

 

[Ginlover]

What is power exchange?

Loved this

by*Anonymous user**on*08/28/2019

Really enjoyed this story. Well written.

A nice mug of tea

Nicely done

by*Anonymous user**on*05/23/2020

Nicely done good girl...........ducks.....smiles

 

[SimonDoom]

Fun idea.

Here goes:

The alpha: First comment on The Holiday Party, published Dec. 8, 2016:

Anonymous over 3 years ago
so, who is Janna?
who is Janna in the middle of the story?

I had accidentally used the name "Janna," a name from another story I was writing, in place of the character's actual name, Anon pointed this out.

Omega: Last comment on my last story, I Know What You Want, published February 13, 2020:

holliday1960 4 months ago
Great Job, SD!
Especially for a 750 word story! Excellent writing.

I was very pleased to get that, especially from holliday1960, whose judgment I value.

 

[NotWise]

My very first comment is my favorite of all time.

My Niece and Her Roommate; Aug 19, 2017

spra-HOOOOON!
by Anonymous user on 08/19/2017
freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep*freep
​

I wish I could have gotten anywhere near this for a first comment. Mine was boring. The Omega comment? I'm still writing.

 

[Damoiselle]

First comment:

On Imperius Ch. 01, posted 06/21/17

by desj: Love the story hope she brings up the fact she did save his life


Last Comment:

On Imperius Ch. 07, posted on 06/05/20

by anon: Yaaaaaaaas!
OMG what a perfect chapter! Absolutely love the way you have written the interactions between all the characters, and the scene is perfect. I was worried that you would make Magnus too angry and totally lose Lilah in the process, but it felt perfectly pitched. I’m so curious about how Magnus is going to deal with her out and about without showing his attachment or turning her further against him. I’m also super interested to find out wtf is with Saphir! Great plot twists so far and the scenes are so hot!

 

[sr71plt]

Alpha:
On chapter 1 of “Ranger Guided,” posted 24 July 2006 (Gay Male)
By Sachs: “You've captured the narrator's confusion and uncertainty perfectly. The scene where he watched Trent was really hot, as was the one with the Ranger. I like how gentle the Ranger was and how he made sure the guy wanted it instead of plowing ahead. Too often there are stories where the guy's first time is not only painful but their partner is also incredibly derogatory and then the virgin comes out of it thinking that it was ok to be treated like that (sorry, it's a pet peeve of mine). Anyway, this was perfect. Suitably awkward for someone's first time, sexy, well-written and edited. I hope that you're going to continue this story. I'd love to see what happens with Trent (although if he has a bf it may be a bit of trouble). Cheers, Sachs.”

Omega:
On “Stranger on the Chiang Mai Train,” posted 13 February 2020 (Erotic Coupling—entry for the 750-word contest, first posting in two years)
Bay AlinaX: “Loved it.”

 

[KeithD]

Alpha
“The Mural,” posted 18 January 2012 (Gay Male)
No comments

Omega
“A Bit Too Clever,” posted 29 May 2020 (Gay Male)
No comments

 

[mynameisben]

First comments on my stories are not very memorable, but here they are for the record.

Alpha
The Last Minute Gift 12/22/2010

"I hate you" by Anonymous

I'm crying.

That was such a beautiful story.


Omega
A Happy Little Romance 8/29/2019

Loved that story~ Please continue to create such vivid words.

 

[Rustyoznail]

Bec and Sammy - that was a slip-up

Fantastic!
by Anonymous user on 06/01/2019
Wow what a fantastic start for your first story, had me hard from the start and all the way through. Hope you write a chapter 2!

This is from the Lockdown competition

Twin Times - Quarantined with mum

The makings of a 5 star story but ended as 4
by Anonymous user on 06/03/2020
I was really getting into the story until the last bit. Was disappointed that Adam did not fuck his Mom. I felt like it ended on an off note. Although that was better than the group action you foreshadowed with Carol and his friends. Leave the friends out and let Adam take care of this Mom's needs.

All in all - not too bad.

 

[shabbu]

Alpha
“Storm Connection,” posted 22 June 2007 (Gay Male)
good
by Anonymous user on 06/22/2007
Great start to this story. Looking forward to reading more chapters.


Omega
“A Season in Galicia,” 21 August 2019 (Gay Male)
So GREAT to have you back!
by whiteasianlvr on 08/25/2019
This is your first story in quite a while and it has all the qualities of your previous ones. Thanks for your writing for us again!

 

[Emmeline]

Alpha:

On Carnal Knowledge CH. 01-02, submitted 04/15/2014

Awesome continue please

by ******** on 04/15/2014

"More"

Omega:

On Hardwired for Love, submitted 01/30/2018

by ******** on 04/22/2020

"I clicked on your signature in the forum. The story title caught my attention, and wow. You pulled off an erotic, sultry story with a minimum of sexual contact, throwing in several dashes of humor and even tension when Eli and Stella's mom showed up! Simply amazing."

 

[VermillionVenusian]

from my first story, I-40 E:
by Anonymous user on 09/10/2016
Good start. Keep it going!

from my most recent story, Outplayed (part of the Geek Pride Event 2020)
by yowser on 05/26/2020
Clever story, gaming worked into arousal, interesting 3-D characters and thoughtful pacing. Geek enough.
Well written.



I have 8 stories total. Three with 0 comments (despite good ratings). Four with 1-2 comments. And then one with 16 comments (my singular foray into LW). It it my understanding that this level of feedback is common.

 

[BiscuitHammer]

*Anonymous (almost 5 years ago)

"great story please keep the nice long chapters coming."

- from Alex & Alexa, chapter 1



********- 5 days ago

Quantum Cryptography-- how romantic!

"Another fine effort. Since you mentioned that everyone's going to class on Monday then I'm gonna assume that there is no pandemic in the Alexaverse. Great job and keep it coming"

- from Mike & Karen, chapter 18

Jayzoz, hard to believe I've been here almost 5 years. :/

 

[LexxRuthless]

by samsays  on 05/25/2018
Great Story...
Keep writing!!!


Symmonsabout 10 hours ago
We Need Another
Very hot! Exciting how Greg impregnated Gloria and Catherine 'maybe too old' to get pregnant. I would love to see Catherine become pregnant or have a scare of being pregnant. More please!!!

Unfortunate timing, perhaps. I rarely utilize pregnancy in my writing in this way, but it clearly struck a nerve with this reader.

 

[ElectricBlue]

First story:
Amazing! I definitely want to see more!
https://www.literotica.com/s/in-the-library-ch-01

Most recent:
Its enticing. The way you tell your stories. Alwys that slight distance. Expertly told. What now??
https://www.literotica.com/beta/s/a-girl-on-the-bus-pt-08

 

[oggbashan]

First (one of four posted on the same day 7/7/2002):

Lisa Trains Thomas

Some nice situations
by Anonymous user on 06/17/2007
but I would have preferred some more struggling from him. His friend betrays and rapes him and he isn't even mildly concerned? Has no problem with the blackmail? Immediately enjoys it? I know that that's what happens in most stories but just once I'd like to see something slightly more realistic.

Last (05/14/2020):

Vilja and Nadine

by [Name removed]
on 05/17/2020
Gentle, intelligent and beautifully written as always - Thank you Mr O

Note: Many of my earlier stories were posted long before the comment facility was introduced on Literotica.

 

[Kojak01]

The first comment on the first story
"The Monster Within Ch. 01" published 05/19/2017

Interesting start
by rightbank
on 05/20/2017
You have my curiosity.

Your language skills are excellent. As far as dealing with location and colloquial verbage be true to yourself. Don't try writing as if you are in a setting with which you are not familiar.
I'm looking forward to the next section.

The last comment on the newest story
"The It-Bitch" published 12/18/2019
Nice
by Tarloso
on 04/25/2020
Well done. I really enjoyed it. Nicely incorporated messages and not be preachy. Right sexual level as well. Thks

The last comment I received
"Beacon of Humanity" published 07/09/2019 (half a year before the whole COVID-mess started)

Kojak01 has a crystal ball
by Anonymous user on 06/02/2020

had read the story when it was just released, rereading it and finding the similarities uncanny in regards to the pandemic in your story and the current situation in the world. Especially the March 2020 bit... Let's hope the figures aren't going to be as bad and that it's not going to last as long... And I now wonder if the cure is going to be found on the African continent..

 

[SolarRay]

06/11/16 by bbare
"Both Beautiful and Erotic"
Great submission for your first story. Hopefully you'll submit many more in the near future. Definitely worthy of a 5!

05/17/20 by Jjonest
"This has been a fantasy of mine for years"
Great job on a wonderfully written tale. I’ve imagined scenarios like that in my head for years and you did it justice in your story!
Thanks for sharing.

 

[Candy_Kane54]

Your Silver Nights and Golden Days Pt. 01

Erotic, intense
by Anonymous user on 02/02/2020
Brilliant first effort! More please! It kept me stiff the whole time. Great build-up, satisfactory sex scenes.

Your Silver Nights and Golden Days Pt. 05

Such A Great Story
by gnome_man
on 05/10/2020
But, so sad, in the end. So very, very sad. It was hard to keep from weeping. Bonnie and Virginia. Grace, Matt, and Mark. They all seemed so real. Of course, Virginia was the most real person, but only in this story.

Such a strong feeling of "reality" to it.

I loved your story. You know what you write about when you locate it in So. California. Those places have the feeling of being real, or of having been real back then. I read "Saving Grace," before this story series and I kept expecting Kathy to be incorporated into the story more.

You certainly know your military and vintage aerospace "world." Having lived in a similar world, though it was as an enlisted man in the Army in the early to mid-seventies, I could identify with it.

These days, so many are so quick to "Thank You For Your Service," I have no real feeling for their honesty. My military time was accompanied by no lack of disdain by and in the civilian world, that I take any such "thanks" with a huge amount of salt.

But, if Virginia is real, as you imply, I want to profoundly thank her for her efforts to guide some extremely important and complex projects to fruition.

When I think of the Sergeant York weapons system (or whatever they called that $5 billion piece of shit) and compare it to the quality that the weapons systems you mention actually attained... Thank you, Virginia.

Candy, you are a superb storyteller. I have read this entire series in one gulp, mostly going past the sex (because) and have really enjoyed it.

 

[MelissaBaby]

First:

My Fall and Rise Ch. 01

Great beginning!
by Anonymous user on 07/09/2017
Well written. Hope you continue this story.

Latest:

Mary and Alvin Ch. 33

SAV1224 days ago
WHAT CAN BE SAID
THAT HASN'T BEEN SAID BEFORE. FORGET THE FIVE STAR RATING, THIS STORY IS A BEST 10 OUT OF 10 STAR. TO THE AUTHOR, I HOPE THAT SHE PLANS TO CONTINUE THIS STORY AND MAYBE CONSIDER WRITING A SERIES OF STORIES THAT FOLLOW THE FAMILY ACTERS, CHARLOTTE, JENNIFER, DANI, HANNA, AND BONITA THROUGH THEIR LIVES.