Thanks for all the great feedback!

[clownboy]

I want to thank everyone that has read more story and more importantly everyone that hs sent me some great feed back. This story was my second attempt here (the first wasn't what I intended it to be so I removed it). I'm having great fun with it and have a ton planned in the near future. So thanks again!

If you haven't checked it out, please do and let me know what you think. It's rough around the edges I know, but I'm new at the writing game.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=24389

Later,
the Clownboy

 

[Marxist]

Good descriptions and action. I would like to see more resistance out of Britney though. Why is OK to fuck the hologram? Is this part of the program? There's no tension, just some guys playing with a new toy. Maybe the ability to touch and fuck the hologram aren't in it, but get hacked into by the duo. Just a thought.

 

[clownboy]

Good point, one that willbe touched on as the story develops. My plan was to have an actual story unfold as each episode is written, so, we'll see why things are the way they are as we go on. Thanks for the reply.

Later.