Seeking feedback on The Moon's Daughter

[NuclearFairy]

The Moon's Daughter is about a young woman who travels into the forest to follow in her mother's footsteps. There's naked moonlit dancing, and a wolfman, but no knot.

Specifically, I'm wondering; How well did I weave in back story? Should I have described anything in more detail? Was the transition from ceremony to sex too jarring? And well, just lemme know your thoughts?

 

[ElectricBlue]

It's a nice little story, you capture a mood that works.

The only thing I found a little jarring was " completely unfazed", which seems anachronistic to me. You'd made the tale fairytale timeless, but that expression is too contemporary, I think. But that's a very minor quibble.

 

[NuclearFairy]

It's a nice little story, you capture a mood that works.

The only thing I found a little jarring was " completely unfazed", which seems anachronistic to me. You'd made the tale fairytale timeless, but that expression is too contemporary, I think. But that's a very minor quibble.

I hadn't given that line much thought. Thanks.

 

[NuclearFairy]

Oh dear, I think someone is going to be disappointed... I just checked the favorite list of someone that favorited this story, and it's full of nothing but incest. Is the title misleading?