Tell me...

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I'm still new at this...and haven't recieved a lot of feedback. Any suggestions?


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[Rybka]

I'm still new at this...and haven't recieved a lot of feedback. Any suggestions?

Make Love To Me by freehawk

Make love to me
Touch me ever so softly
Caress me slowly
Leave me wanting

Make love to me
Kiss me all over
Make me tingle
Make me shiver

Make love to me
My own passion growing
Every sensation so intense
To the edge I'm barely holding

Make love to me
Help me let go
Feel my ecstasy
Only then you will know

It is a nice plea to a lover, but what makes you think it is a poem? What makes other, uninvolved people, want to read it and give it value as a work of art?

Regards,                       Rybka