tell me whats wrong. I cant fix it. If I dont know whats broken.

[outlawitokiri]

next one is

work of fiction. all persons above 18. Im new all feedback is welome. I ignore proper grammar for pacing were not here for an English lesson.

College is a bitch. Girls are....yeah. Spent my time studying and exercising. I wanted to do my single Mom proud....I,,,,,,dont know who my dad is but who cares when I have her.

I called mom I was on vacation coming up and I missed her.

" heyyyy mom how are you whats up!"

" Is that how you speak to your mom?"

" Im sorry. I wanted to come see you, Ill be off on vacation"

".....go see your girlfriend or such im busy. "

"...mom...."

" i am single"

 

[StillStunned]

Ive never lost my erection because something wasn't capitalized.

Clearly you're not a professional editor...

 

[outlawitokiri]

A lotttt of the " misspelling" is intentional as a vocabulary tool. Was a bit rough on first one ill admit. I do admit I ignore capitalization a lot because its flat out meaningless unless its a name or place. Even then in my opinion its meaningless. It doesnt make a single difference. If they just suck and you dont want them, say so. Thats 100% fine. Just give me tips, tell me why. Ive read a lot on here. An the sht Ive read is so....wrong. Not in terms of content, just sheer what the fck is going on. One minute theyre on a bed next its here next its in a different room the peoples names change, it makes 0 sense.

 

[outlawitokiri]

Clearly you're not a professional editor...

no shit. clearly youre not a professional anything. Or youd of had an actual response of meaning.

 

[outlawitokiri]

no shit. clearly youre not a professional anything. Or youd of had an actual response of meaning.

What an abs. dumb response. It doesnt apply, matter or address anything.

 

[BobbyBrandt]

Not everything is about you and what you find acceptable.

The administrator of this site has a right to expect a writer to submit works that represent a degree of editing effort. If that is beyond your skill, seek assistance. If you feel it cramps your style or inhibits your artistic flow, you might need to find a different venue to display your work.

 

[mildlyaroused]

I get I dont go nuts on grammar because its a for entertainment style. Ive never lost my erection because something wasn't capitalized. Plus the recommended* system is terribly inaccurate anyway. It's not always "you're" and i don't even know what, "cummings" is.

I think the problem is quite clear, and the problem is this:

You don't have to care about grammar, and for your own fantasies by all means enjoy them in your anarchist style... but readers most likely will not. We need grammar to enjoy things and, more fundamentally, we need grammar to make sense of what we are reading.

Frankly speaking [and perhaps more bluntly than usual, considering your response to StillStunned], this passage you shared is incoherent. For someone who has no window into the author's mind, I can't make sense of... anything! It's gibberish. The plot is paper thin and unintelligable, the characters don't exist, the prose is a mess.

You are at liberty to write whatever you want (and by all means, write! I love to think there is another writer in the world somewhere!) but if you are sharing things to readers, then be aware that they expect coherence. Your personal vendetta against proper grammar will not be shared by the rest of the people on this planet.

It's also amusing that you call the "recommended system" (basic grammar) inaccurate, because of things you personally are not familiar with or understanding of.

 

[onehitwanda]

I try not to wade into this sort of thread any more, but hey ho, it's Friday and I'm bored.
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A lotttt of the " misspelling" is intentional as a vocabulary tool.

No. A lot of the misspelling is sheer laziness, and then you've hitched it to a childish and wilful rejection of the rules.

I cant fix it. If I dont know whats broken.​

We've all heard of the million monkeys and a million typewriters taking a million years to produce the works of Shakespeare.

This, however, is one-monkey-one-typewriter-five-minutes stuff

There are those that honestly try, and then there are those who seek to substitute their reality for reality. Sadly, you're one of the latter and we can't help you.

An the sht Ive read is so....wrong. Not in terms of content, just sheer what the fck is going on.

As the proverb goes - Those who live in grass houses shouldn't own stone thrones.

 

[outlawitokiri]

I think the problem is quite clear, and the problem is this:

You don't have to care about grammar, and for your own fantasies by all means enjoy them in your anarchist style... but readers most likely will not. We need grammar to enjoy things and, more fundamentally, we need grammar to make sense of what we are reading.

Frankly speaking [and perhaps more bluntly than usual, considering your response to StillStunned], this passage you shared is incoherent. For someone who has no window into the author's mind, I can't make sense of... anything! It's gibberish. The plot is paper thin and unintelligable, the characters don't exist, the prose is a mess.

You are at liberty to write whatever you want (and by all means, write! I love to think there is another writer in the world somewhere!) but if you are sharing things to readers, then be aware that they expect coherence. Your personal vendetta against proper grammar will not be shared by the rest of the people on this planet.

It's also amusing that you call the "recommended system" (basic grammar) inaccurate, because of things you personally are not familiar with or understanding of.

cummings isnt a word. youre isnt always the proper usage, yet it perma suggests it. theyre* <- actual usage. I wasnt trying to write a novel. I mean unless you're referring* ( which is ALSO suggested wrong) to the diesel motor.......

 

[mildlyaroused]

cummings isnt a word. youre isnt always the proper usage, yet it perma suggests it. theyre* <- actual usage. I wasnt trying to write a novel. I mean unless you're referring* ( which is ALSO suggested wrong) to the diesel motor.......

So the fact "cummings" isn't a word invalidates all the other fundamental pillars of English grammar? The fact that there is more than one "you're" in the dictionary means you shouldn't bother picking out the right one? Your iPhone is not the Grammar God: it recommends and corrects things into what it thinks you want to say. This is a separate issue from accurate writing. If you know its correction is wrong, why would you leave it as it is?

 

[outlawitokiri]

lol No I understand. Obv. you dont. Or would you like to explain cummings. Out of context, "you"re" constantly. Using verbal language differentiation during XXX is normal. Youd know if you've had it.

 

[outlawitokiri]

So the fact "cummings" isn't a word invalidates all the other fundamental pillars of English grammar? The fact that there is more than one "you're" in the dictionary means you shouldn't bother picking out the right one? Your iPhone is not the Grammar God: it recommends and corrects things into what it thinks you want to say. This is a separate issue from accurate writing. If you know its correction is wrong, why would you leave it as it is?

its the sites grammar suggestions not mines

 

[outlawitokiri]

simple. I didnt

 

[outlawitokiri]

also recommends wrong spelling of reference.

 

[outlawitokiri]

Its not a phone this is the site

 

[mildlyaroused]

Imagine bitching about the site accepting "cummings" or "reference" as words when you can't even string together a single competent sentence.

 

[onehitwanda]

 

[StillStunned]

I reckon we're being trolled by e.e. cummings.

 

[onehitwanda]

I reckon we're being trolled by e.e. cummings.

e.e. cummings has style and grace, this is a dictionary that got hit by a kinetic impactor.

 

[lovecraft68]

As someone who's grammar isn't always the best, I agree in principle that a kit of people are here with their dicks in their hands and not their red pens. My success here is the biggest example of that you'll find on this site. I get comments about needing a proof reader, but they're usually mixed with a compliment on the story.

Having said that, the site does have some basic requirements for punctuation, especially dialogue tags so even if grammar isn't your priority you do need to make an effort to not be flat out atrocious.

 

[mildlyaroused]

cummings.

THAT'S NOT A WORD.

 

[outlawitokiri]

and yes the characters are thin theyre short stories. Im not being paid. Im not going to spend 40 hours developing characters and evolving a narrative. Its meant for short fun not a lord of the rings novel

 

[onehitwanda]

THAT'S NOT A WORD.

careful, nobody cares about your capitals.

 

[outlawitokiri]

As someone who's grammar isn't always the best, I agree in principle that a kit of people are here with their dicks in their hands and not their red pens. My success here is the biggest example of that you'll find on this site. I get comments about needing a proof reader, but they're usually mixed with a compliment on the story.

Having said that, the site does have some basic requirements for punctuation, especially dialogue tags so even if grammar isn't your priority you do need to make an effort to not be flat out atrocious.

fine, example of where i was. I use * * for inner thought " for talking .....where was I horrible

 

[outlawitokiri]

careful, nobody cares about your capitals.

Nor do you.....this is the dmbest shit I've ever seen.