Team Haiku

[perks]

*haiku exercise, pick a partner, send him/her a haiku, then reply back and forth keeping the same first line.
*rules for this haiku exercise
include season, 5-7-5, last line twist and what the hell....go erotic<this is a perky thread after all>.

Thanks to a haiku buddy for giving me the idea and helping me provide the example.



*swirling winter kiss
licked upon uncertain lips
belated wishes

^swirling winter kiss
welcomed lips a day later--
or a year early?

*swirling winter kiss
enjoyed thoroughly by both
parting lips find depth

^swirling winter kiss
warm tongue thrusting against tongue
now separated

*swirling winter kiss
leaving lips pink heated swollen
from "Love's Distresses"

^swirling winter kiss
leaving lips pink heated swollen
yet icy winds chill

*swirling winter kiss
sparking first love memories
fast replacing them

*=perky ^=partner

have fun everyone, perks

 

[Blue Dolphin]

Haiku

Hi perky,
Now my understanding of Haiku is
4 lines
consisting of
two syllables
dour syllables
6 syllables
8 syllables.
is that right love?

 

[Maid of Marvels]

What a great idea, perky!

I'll be back later to play this one... (and hope you don't mind me butting in here)

pleasureu, you have described a cinquain (almost).

A cinquain is five lines of 2, 4, 6, 8 and 2 syllables respectively (a total of 22 syllables).
The first line is usually one word, a noun, that will be the "title".
The second line, two adjectives describing the first.
The third line, action words or verbs describing the first.
The fourth line is a phrase.
The fifth line is one word... a synonym for the first word.

Solstice
Wintry, festive
Dreaming, Planning, Changing
Out of the darkness light is born
Rebirth.

A haiku is three lines of 5, 7 and 5 syllables respectively (17 syllables total).

Fog descends about
My head as I struggle for
Inspiration... Help!

The smell of coffee
Tantalizes my senses
I need caffeine now

Dirty dishes piled
Whose turn is it to wash them?
I hope it's not me.

Both formats are easy and fun. If you can count, you can write one of these.

Imagine... You can become a poetic legend in your own mind. (Just like me )

 

[LadyGaladriel]

Hope you don't mind me butting in here, but I really like the idea. Here I go:

Kisses in darkness
Stars sparkle with divine light
soft skin carressing soft skin

 

[Blue Dolphin]

haiku

Many thanks Maid of Marvels.
Am a poet of sorts, just write what I feel in verse.Dont really know about all the technical terms.
Apologies to Perky for the misunderstandins.
Unfortunately feel I lack the ability to participate.
Hope all goes well.
P

 

[perks]

Hope you don't mind me butting in here, but I really like the idea. Here I go:

Kisses in darkness
Stars sparkle with divine light
soft skin carressing soft skin

not sure if you have a partner yet, but if you don't I'd love to haiku with you....<grin>......so here I go

Kisses in darkness
soft skin glimmering with stars
reflected passion

 

[Blue Dolphin]

I am tryinmg to learn here

So, how is this, btw, gonna play with Marvel,at haiku that is ,LOL

Kisses in darkness
soft skin glimmering with stars
Sepulchral nebulae

hope not messin you two up, just wanted to see

 

[daughter]

perky_baby

Gurlfriend, afraid this is a bust.


FYI, there is a traditional japanese form called renga. Basically, it is a chain of tanka. tanka is haiku with two (2) additional lines with (7) syllables in each of the remaining lines.

Royal court poets would create these poems(renga) while waiting to entertain the court. Each poet would create an addition of haiku and then the extra 2 lines. These works were created over long periods of time sometimes years.

If Drake doesn't, I'll look for some links about these asian forms. I'm chopping up the history of the renga pretty badly since I am going purely on memory while I write this.

Let's try another collaboration exercise again later. Thanks for the effort.

Peace,

daughter

 

[perks]

fucking damnit all to hell...haahahahah

gurl, sigh.......

I'm afraid you are correct.....why am I even posting

haiku threads suck ass
they completely torment me
but I love them so


I forgot the freakin' season.....but damnit my syllable scheme is on target.

as for zen observation....I'm way too heated.....

someone fire me from writing haiku
pleeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaase

perky

 

[Blue Dolphin]

so what

Hey perky,
So what, this aint Haiku, the purists are unhappy.
Does that mean you have to stop the one you started.
No way it does.
Co ahead, have fun, am damn sure that me and Marvel wont stop.
ya can eveb give it a name I guess.
Experiment.
Nothing ventured, nothing gained my love
Go 4 it

 

[perks]

Re: so what

Hey perky,
So what, this aint Haiku, the purists are unhappy.
Does that mean you have to stop the one you started.
No way it does.
Co ahead, have fun, am damn sure that me and Marvel wont stop.
ya can eveb give it a name I guess.
Experiment.
Nothing ventured, nothing gained my love
Go 4 it

lol, pleasure.....wouldn't you like to learn the basics before you go off willie nillie?

I know I would.....it's like learning basic recipes then tweaking them after you learn how to cook.

got to have the prerequisites down..in order to tweak with some success...otherwise it's just a hit or miss thing....I will endeavor to keep plugging along in search of the elusive haiku until it becomes part of my blood.

hibernating haiku
poetry buried in ice
awaiting springtime

 

[Blue Dolphin]

re-so what

So!
I need to learn the basics.
Ok
Forget it, iwill walk away quietly.
no more poems form me
Bye

 

[perks]

Re: re-so what

So!
I need to learn the basics.
Ok
Forget it, iwill walk away quietly.
no more poems form me
Bye

I didn't tell you to walk away sugah, I told you to learn...open your mind let some structure in....it will help your style I assure you.

it's an exercise, play with it...work that brain and enjoy.

 

[Blue Dolphin]

Haiku,or is it

Play and have fun you say.
thought I was, and then the intellectuals come along.
you cant do this,and you must do that.
Why?
We are expressing ourselves.
Not particularly interested in the "finer points", and what is and isnt.
Only the words that come from deep inside.

 

[garyblue]

hibernating haiku
poetry buried in ice
awaiting springtime

Very nice, Perky. Somehow I know exactly your state of mind.

Combining haiku (freely translated as fun or pleasure verse) with the idea of a continuing theme is a fun exercise. In fact, MIT's web site has a sub-domain devoted to this very idea. There are more than 18,500 haikus on a single theme. (Mine is #18,534.)

Many Japanese traditions have put great emphasis on strict observance of form. Whether it is judo katas, the cha kata, wood joinery, or poetic form, striving for perfection and delicacy within a strict style lets the master exhibit his abilities.

The haiku's general form of 5,7 and 5 syllable lines, the reference to a season, and having 2 independent images lends itself well to the English language. English has borrowed and stolen from languages worldwide, ancient and modern. We have an amazing choice of words, making the haiku a relatively easy form to work with. The challenge is to pick the right words. I cannot count the times that I have tried different words, only to realize that each choice created a very different poem on the same theme.

Awaiting springtime--
Words thaw and rise to the tongue
Haiku awakened

g

 

[perks]

Awaiting springtime--
Words thaw and rise to the tongue
Haiku awakened

g

you always know the perfect thing to say to lift my haiku spirit.


tasting imagery
icy winter words on my tongue
tip dripping haiku

 

[garyblue]

tasting imagery
icy winter words on my tongue
tip dripping haiku

Icy words muffled
Warmed against winter spite
Not dripping acid

g

 

[perks]

Icy words muffled
Warmed against winter spite
Not dripping acid

g

tongue tip flat against teeth
licking frozen vocabulary
thoughts bud there like Spring

p

 

[TheDR4KE]

poetry response

I think the evolution of this thread into a play of response without the starting line is more true to the interaction of poets in Japan, and also in the West. Many poets responded to each other's works, either playfully or sometimes to deep ideological works with satire or just philosophical replies.

In this arena it becomes a bit of flirting too, obviously.

Fun to watch

Drake

 

[TheDR4KE]

LadyGaladriel

Kisses in darkness
Stars sparkle with divine light
soft skin carressing soft skin


perky

Kisses in darkness
soft skin glimmering with stars
reflected passion


pleasureu

Kisses in darkness
soft skin glimmering with stars
Sepulchral nebulae

kisses in darkness
not even one star's glimmer -
beneath your blindfold


Drake

 

[TheDR4KE]

Re: fucking damnit all to hell...haahahahah

perky_baby

haiku threads suck ass
they completely torment me
but I love them so

her tormented cheeks
(love them so) show as she sucks -
her threads: a haiku



Drake