Swapping story….

[ShandyLeer]

…..would like to work up a story based on semi real life experience.

Two couples, the guys (let’s say Jack+Natalie and Ben+Jane)have been best friends since school, go to watch football and gigs together. Their other halves have become friends too and hangout together often.

Jack and Ben have seen each others partner topless on the beach on vacation, so know their bodies are as hot as their faces are pretty.

Jack also knows, direct from the horses mouth, that Bens fantasy is to watch another guy fuck his g/f…….and unknown to Ben, Jack would like to be the one to do it since he’s been hot for Jane from the beginning…..and Ben has more than noticed Natalie.

……….Would like to build on this, and needs the right location and mood, and I think theres a story where the guys might think theyve secretly “planned” something only to find the girls are intuitively ahead of them……….any thoughts ?

 

[Buffy47]

…..would like to work up a story based on semi real life experience.

Two couples, the guys (let’s say Jack+Natalie and Ben+Jane)have been best friends since school, go to watch football and gigs together. Their other halves have become friends too and hangout together often.

Jack and Ben have seen each others partner topless on the beach on vacation, so know their bodies are as hot as their faces are pretty.

Jack also knows, direct from the horses mouth, that Bens fantasy is to watch another guy fuck his g/f…….and unknown to Ben, Jack would like to be the one to do it since he’s been hot for Jane from the beginning…..and Ben has more than noticed Natalie.

……….Would like to build on this, and needs the right location and mood, and I think theres a story where the guys might think theyve secretly “planned” something only to find the girls are intuitively ahead of them……….any thoughts ?

I like it, there are plenty of directions the story can move in or even further new stories based on the 4.


I've been thinking how the girls have got the jump on the guys and beat them at their own game. This could simply be an accidental over hearing the guys talking, or just the girls ended up having the same idea coincidencently.

I'm thinking holiday is a great place for couples to be adventurous as often one loses their normalised life when away from home.

I'm happy to talk more with you on this if you want you can drop me a PM

 

[AchtungNight]

Remember to address the exhibitionist and voyeur aspects of the story. Does one character like these aspects and another dislike them? What about the same gender attraction aspects? Could we see the wives together? What about the husbands? If the husbands aren’t into gay male relationships, can they at least enjoy watching their wives be lesbian or enjoy being with another man? Well?

Lot more to swapping than just swapping partners. Remember, as an author you are watching the game, controlling it… I don’t see you guys ranging the kind of thing I’m contemplating. I bet you’d watch, I would invite you, but the pieces I play may not excite you… [strolls away humming more Murray Head]

 

[Rob_Royale]

Yeah, this is sexy. Jack and Jane are former roommates, they are good friends but both know they aren't a good match. But that didn't stop them from hooking up during the Covid quarantine. Later she meets his best friend Ben and they hit it off big time. Jack is overjoyed for them and meets Natalie shortly there after.

A couple years go by and the relationships are solid, and they guys have just graduated from college. One is stying local, they other is moving away. So they plan a huge bucket-list Hawiian vacation. Cabana on the beach, catered, clothing optional, the works.

One evening as the girls are getting dressed for dinner out, Natalie says, "It's kind of unfair. You got to fuck bith of them". Jane can see shes sort half serious, half joking.

Jane smiles. "You want him? I'll give you both a one-time-only free pass to hook up some night while we're here. If Jack agrees."

Natalie shakes her head. "No, this is supposed to be a bucket list trip. I want them both. At the same time."

Jane is a bit of a voyeur and thinks it might be fun to watch her get double teamed, and they make a plan.

That night the guys are chilling with a cold one in the cabana and Natalie walks into the room completely naked. She steps up to Jack and says, "You two have shared everything all your lives. How about tonight you share one last thing?" Both men are down for it and Jane gives a smiling approval to Ben.

Jane sits back to watch the fun, but can only stand about twenty minutes before joining in the debauchery.

 

[sirhugs]

Yeah, this is sexy. Jack and Jane are former roommates, they are good friends but both know they aren't a good match. But that didn't stop them from hooking up during the Covid quarantine. Later she meets his best friend Ben and they hit it off big time. Jack is overjoyed for them and meets Natalie shortly there after.

A couple years go by and the relationships are solid, and they guys have just graduated from college. One is stying local, they other is moving away. So they plan a huge bucket-list Hawiian vacation. Cabana on the beach, catered, clothing optional, the works.

One evening as the girls are getting dressed for dinner out, Natalie says, "It's kind of unfair. You got to fuck bith of them". Jane can see shes sort half serious, half joking.

Jane smiles. "You want him? I'll give you both a one-time-only free pass to hook up some night while we're here. If Jack agrees."

Natalie shakes her head. "No, this is supposed to be a bucket list trip. I want them both. At the same time."

Jane is a bit of a voyeur and thinks it might be fun to watch her get double teamed, and they make a plan.

That night the guys are chilling with a cold one in the cabana and Natalie walks into the room completely naked. She steps up to Jack and says, "You two have shared everything all your lives. How about tonight you share one last thing?" Both men are down for it and Jane gives a smiling approval to Ben.

Jane sits back to watch the fun, but can only stand about twenty minutes before joining in the debauchery.

be interesting to investigate how they feel after the "hall pass".

 

[ShandyLeer]

Yeah, this is sexy. Jack and Jane are former roommates, they are good friends but both know they aren't a good match. But that didn't stop them from hooking up during the Covid quarantine. Later she meets his best friend Ben and they hit it off big time. Jack is overjoyed for them and meets Natalie shortly there after.

A couple years go by and the relationships are solid, and they guys have just graduated from college. One is stying local, they other is moving away. So they plan a huge bucket-list Hawiian vacation. Cabana on the beach, catered, clothing optional, the works.

One evening as the girls are getting dressed for dinner out, Natalie says, "It's kind of unfair. You got to fuck bith of them". Jane can see shes sort half serious, half joking.

Jane smiles. "You want him? I'll give you both a one-time-only free pass to hook up some night while we're here. If Jack agrees."

Natalie shakes her head. "No, this is supposed to be a bucket list trip. I want them both. At the same time."

Jane is a bit of a voyeur and thinks it might be fun to watch her get double teamed, and they make a plan.

That night the guys are chilling with a cold one in the cabana and Natalie walks into the room completely naked. She steps up to Jack and says, "You two have shared everything all your lives. How about tonight you share one last thing?" Both men are down for it and Jane gives a smiling approval to Ben.

Jane sits back to watch the fun, but can only stand about twenty minutes before joining in the debauchery.

Good work, really like where you took this

 

[SteelPoint]

…..would like to work up a story based on semi real life experience.

Two couples, the guys (let’s say Jack+Natalie and Ben+Jane)have been best friends since school, go to watch football and gigs together. Their other halves have become friends too and hangout together often.

Jack and Ben have seen each others partner topless on the beach on vacation, so know their bodies are as hot as their faces are pretty.

Jack also knows, direct from the horses mouth, that Bens fantasy is to watch another guy fuck his g/f…….and unknown to Ben, Jack would like to be the one to do it since he’s been hot for Jane from the beginning…..and Ben has more than noticed Natalie.

……….Would like to build on this, and needs the right location and mood, and I think theres a story where the guys might think theyve secretly “planned” something only to find the girls are intuitively ahead of them……….any thoughts ?

I'd like to say this is good but, for me, the background setting you've outlined is stereotypical to the point of being yawn-provoking... you know: complete with the usual, predictable hunks and bimbos. The word 'hot' on these forums has got to the point of being eye-rollingly hackneyed.

I'm probably unique, I guess, in being interested in having it made more relevant to me as a reader, ideally with plain and interesting Joes and Janes and some believable, down-to-earth, everyday situation which draws them into the swapping. Down with vapid, colourless cartoon characters and next-to-no-plot plots.

Perhaps I should renew my membership of Realism Freaks Anonymous...

 

[ShandyLeer]

I'd like to say this is good but, for me, the background setting you've outlined is stereotypical to the point of being yawn-provoking... you know: complete with the usual, predictable hunks and bimbos. The word 'hot' on these forums has got to the point of being eye-rollingly hackneyed.

I'm probably unique, I guess, in being interested in having it made more relevant to me as a reader, ideally with plain and interesting Joes and Janes and some believable, down-to-earth, everyday situation which draws them into the swapping. Down with vapid, colourless cartoon characters and next-to-no-plot plots.

Perhaps I should renew my membership of Realism Freaks Anonymous...

I‘m guilty of using the terms “hot” - to describe both girls bodies - which means whatever you want it to mean.

And “pretty” to describe their faces. Again, it’s open to fairly wide interpretation on the part of the reader.

The “hunks and bimbos” thing is noises in your head.

 

[Buffy47]

I think they normal every day people they live normal modest lives that you can character build on so the reader believes in their lives.

Stay away from the love island style 6 pack guy and boob job girls

 

[Carnevil9]

My story "The Swap" is very similar to the OP's suggestion. See signature if interested.

 

[Buffy47]

I've read your story its very good well done, it's a tough topic to get right because easy to spoil the story with a rushed effort to get all 4 people to agree to swapping if it's not something they have done before.

If I wanted to wife swap I'd have no idea how to approach the idea with fear of wife going mad at me.

 

[AchtungNight]

I recommend any inexperienced erotica writer check out my story “The Rendezvous” available on Lit. Four person femslash featuring fictional characters based on four popular actresses each with various resentments creating problems. Including but not limited to reluctant swinging, schizophrenia, misunderstood religious practices, age differences, nicknaming, typecasting, general bad attitudes, impatience, bisexual virginity, group sex virginity, a dedicated bisexual swinger attracted to her seemingly straight best friend but willing to let her be while holding out hope, a workplace that may not desire its employees getting into a lesbian swap foursome that is also creating a movie with many blatant sexual jokes and several characters with a history of similar humor, various idiot interlopers, and other issues. Need I add the four leads have all never had sex with each other before the story and they must work up to a committed friendship with benefits in one day at most?

This was my fourth fanfic in the smut genre. It was a mess of a story. I am always pleased when I hear readers call it a masterpiece today.

 

[ShandyLeer]

be interesting to investigate how they feel after the "hall pass".

Where would you go with that aspect ‘Hugs ?

 

[Buffy47]

How's the story idea's going @ShandyLeer Have you worked out the basic concept yet

 

[ShandyLeer]

How's the story idea's going @ShandyLeer Have you worked out the basic concept yet

I’m thinking the angle should be the wiling gf conspires with the two willing guys - a scheme to get Jane “up” for a night of swapping/sharing.

Maybe we could find out Jane turns out to have done it all before - gangbanged, bukkake’d, who knows ?

 

[Buffy47]

So adding a slight reluctance into the story based on her past, was she a wildchild as a early 20s girl and now years later she promised herself she would live a better life.

 

[Carnevil9]

If I wanted to wife swap I'd have no idea how to approach the idea with fear of wife going mad at me.

The way to approach it is the same as approaching your wife with anything new: make her think it was HER idea in the first place.*

* “The one charm of marriage is that it makes a life of deception absolutely necessary for both parties.” - Oscar Wilde

 

[Buffy47]

The way to approach it is the same as approaching your wife with anything new: make her think it was HER idea in the first place.*

* “The one charm of marriage is that it makes a life of deception absolutely necessary for both parties.” - Oscar Wilde

There is alot of logic in that

 

[sirhugs]

Where would you go with that aspect ‘Hugs ?

I would need to write part one to know that, inhabit the characters' world a while.
Obvious option is too have one couple upset, the other anxious for more fun.

 

[000zing]

I'd like to say this is good but, for me, the background setting you've outlined is stereotypical to the point of being yawn-provoking... you know: complete with the usual, predictable hunks and bimbos. The word 'hot' on these forums has got to the point of being eye-rollingly hackneyed.

I'm probably unique, I guess, in being interested in having it made more relevant to me as a reader, ideally with plain and interesting Joes and Janes and some believable, down-to-earth, everyday situation which draws them into the swapping. Down with vapid, colourless cartoon characters and next-to-no-plot plots.

Perhaps I should renew my membership of Realism Freaks Anonymous...

No, you're not unique. I'll second that. So many non-story, wank fodder merchants out there masquerading as "writers". In fairness to the OP, he's only halfway to what you're talking about - but I feel the same exasperation as you. Most of the stories on here just rate as porn in text form, peopled by toothy, botox dummies and aimed at RL dummies with their tongues hanging out... that kind of readership.

Maybe any one story idea thread is not the place to air this, though?

 

[ShandyLeer]

No, you're not unique. I'll second that. So many non-story, wank fodder merchants out there masquerading as "writers". In fairness to the OP, he's only halfway to what you're talking about - but I feel the same exasperation as you. Most of the stories on here just rate as porn in text form, peopled by toothy, botox dummies and aimed at RL dummies with their tongues hanging out... that kind of readership.

Maybe any one story idea thread is not the place to air this, though?

Well, as I said, the idea only required the reader to accept that the girls had “pretty” faces, and that their bodies were “hot’. It’s hardly demanding that the women are Baywatch types and the guys gymbots with teeth worth more than their houses.

I know the scenario is entirely believable because - as mentioned - it’s based on personal experience. I can vouch that both my gf and my friends wife both easily fit the “pretty face” and “hot body” description even if they aren’t regularly modelling for Victorias Secret.

I get the anti glamour movement, but since I haven’t even gone there this seems an odd story idea to have a rant over

 

[Buffy47]

You will never please every person that reads the story. Some want Tinseltown beauty and others want to believe it could be their neighbour next door. All you can do is write your story and accept both positives and critic

 

[CuttingEdge]

…..would like to work up a story based on semi real life experience.

Two couples, the guys (let’s say Jack+Natalie and Ben+Jane)have been best friends since school, go to watch football and gigs together. Their other halves have become friends too and hangout together often.

Jack and Ben have seen each others partner topless on the beach on vacation, so know their bodies are as hot as their faces are pretty.

Jack also knows, direct from the horses mouth, that Bens fantasy is to watch another guy fuck his g/f…….and unknown to Ben, Jack would like to be the one to do it since he’s been hot for Jane from the beginning…..and Ben has more than noticed Natalie.

……….Would like to build on this, and needs the right location and mood, and I think theres a story where the guys might think theyve secretly “planned” something only to find the girls are intuitively ahead of them……….any thoughts ?

I wrote one like this, but in it, the two had a competition. I LOVE guns, with my interest in being long-range shooting (mile long shots) so I had my male characters doing a long shooting game where every time one of them missed the target, their wife had to take off an article of clothing. After being naked, banter emerges on what should be the punishment of losing besides just being fully-naked. In my story I had the losing wife, "forced" to bring the other man's wife to orgasm, only to find out the losing man's wife always wanted to taste her husbands best friend's wife, and that woman always wanted to be tasted by her.

However, it could be any completion that was set up, from a football or soccer team winning or losing, or something as simple as a spun wine bottle. Italmost happened to us one night when some married friends were in our hot tub naked with us. Inappropriate things were said, but never got to the point of actually swapping. And of course the winning "loot" could be sex with the other man's wife and not woman-upon-woman sex.

As for realism, I fully understand. On a different sub-forum on this site there is a thread started where people talk about a wife getting ready for her other lover. I have wife-shared before, but it was never that arranged for us. It was a matter of convenience, as in, "yeah, my wife will do that", and she did, which was give my best friend a blowjob. Other times it was by text, "I'm going to spend the night at our friends house", and she did. None of that means what it looked like for me, is not what others experience, but I think a lot of times, things depicted on here are more fantasy then reality. But wife-sharing? In real life it happens all the time.