Surpise Visit

[SexualAdventure]

Flew down to surprise her, my online love, After spending hours chatting about thing I want to do to her,
I made the trip. I arrived at her house and found she was out, surprisingly the door was unlocked. I decided
to enter the house and while waiting deicided to get in the shower. As I turn the water on, think about her
thinking what I would do to her I suddenly heard the garage open. Wanting to surprise her I left the water on
and hid behind the door, my body dripping wet. I heard her call out hello, is that Tara "her roomate" I kept silent
and as she turned off the water I slowly snuck up behind her and kissed her neck gently. She immeditaly turned
around and when she found it to be me she had a huge grin on her face. " she told me that she was surprised to se
me but was glad I was there, then she ask bluntly now what?" I then lifted her onto the marble bathroom counter, and
slowly removed her pants.

With just her painties remaing I gently rubed my hand up and down both her legs, and then
moved up to take her shirt off. Her nipples were erect like my cock was and I started sucking and liking her nipples.
She then wispered in my ear " take them off", I grabbed and lifter her legs up and removed her now soaked panties.
I then had her sit back down on the counter and kissed her thighs making my way up her now swollen pussy.

I genlty
licked her pussy and sucked on her clit, I begain to rub and pinch her breasts and began to finger her. As she
moan, a moan to wake the neighbors she reached down and with her hand started rubing hard cock. She demanded I
Stand up and she then took my pants off, with her had she moved my cock to her mouth and gave me a BJ.

I begain to rub and pinch her breasts and began to finger her. As she
moan, a moan to wake the neighbors she reached down and with her hand started rubing hard cock. She demanded I
Stand up and she then took my pants off, with her had she moved my cock to her mouth and gave me a BJ. With
the bathroom mirror, just watching ourselfs was quite erotic. As I continued My throbbing cock was slipping in
and out...finally I told I can;t take it I am about to cum.

She said not yet and removed my cock and turned around
and placed it in her mouth, with her lucious lips surrounding my cock I couldn;t take it any more I finally cam.
Respectfully

I wanted to finish her off but to my amazment her reply was "you already have" then after we got in the
and carresed and washed each other off. After the shower I had a flight to catch, kissed her good bye.

 

[mjl2010]

I'm not sure why you posted this. Maybe you wanted someone to comment on it.

I do have one question, why did he get in the shower with his pants on?

MJL

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Flash fic, even with orgasms, isn't quite what this site is about.

Sorry, Elle

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Ok... Let's take a look at your first (run-on) sentence...
"Flew down to surprise her, my online love, After spending hours chatting about thing I want to do to her,
I made the trip."

I'm not sure if there should be a period after love or the captial After is incorrect. In anycase, the fucker reads like a tractor magazine. Try -
"I few down to surprise my online love, after spending hours chatting about the things I wanted to do to her." I made the trip is redundant - chop it out. You tense is flopping back and forth between past and present. Good God!

Your second (run-on) sentence isn't any better...
"I arrived at her house and found she was out, surprisingly the door was unlocked. I decided
to enter the house and while waiting deicided to get in the shower. "

The comma after out should be a period. Surprisingly should be capitalized and end with a comma. Decided? Why did you decide? You just fucking entered. Get rid of that word. Then you "deicided" (misspelled) to get in the shower? Why? Did you shit yourself or something? This actually seems pretty rude. You break into someone's house and use their shower without asking. You will never be invited to vist me, Mister!

The rest doesn't really get any better. If you want your stories read, you need to (a) think about what you are writing and (b) learn grammar, punctuation and spelling.

Frankly, this was just a boring waste of my time.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

I echo Jenny's sentiments as well.

 

[marsorian]

Please describe the difference between cumming in someone's mouth respectfully and disrespectfully.

 

[sr71plt]

I'm sure someone on the thread hung around for seven years just waiting for this question.

 

[Hypoxia]

I'm sure someone on the thread hung around for seven years just waiting for this question.

OP(SexualAdventure)'s last post was last year. Their previous posts were over five years ago. Methinks they might not be much interested in this anymore.

 

[robertreams]

ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ wake me when it's over. No characters, no description, in and out, how original. Cock Pussy OH! Cum. Done.