Summer's Secrets (thank you BigTexan)

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

Thanks BigTexan for your editing and advice on ths story. I did quite a few revisions in areas you had mentioned. I hope you all enjoy this story.
Wicked

Summer's Secrets

 

[the_bragis]

Hello

Hello Wicked,

Mmm, this is one wicked and powerful little story you have created.

It drew me right in, and on more than one occasion it took twist I wasn't expecting, and I like that. I've noticed you often enjoy giving your stories little unexpected turns don't you? I'm not going to talk about them here, because it would be silly to give too much away to those who haven't read your work.

I believe this is a story had at real potential to become something extremely crass, however, you've managed to create something beautiful and shocking here. Well done!

You know when I had finished reading, I felt a little like Amber did - emotionally drained. It left me with an odd mixture of feelings - lust, anger, frustration, I could go on.

'Enjoyable' isn't quite the right word here, but this sure shocked and thrilled, and that was enough to gain a full five from me.

I could be very wrong here, and it wouldn't be the first time, but unfortunately as well done as this story is, I have feeling it isn't going to have as wide an appeal as some of your other work. Egotistical males, and those expecting the pure passion and romance usually associated with 'erotic couplings', simply aren't going to appreciate your latest effort in my opinion. Well, that's life isn't it?

I wish you well with your future writing,

Have a great day,

Alex (fem).

 

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

Bragis,
Thank you so much for your feedback and the five. Yes I do enjoy putting the little twist into my stories, kinda like real life, always a twist somewhere. Yes I too feel it won't have the same appeal, I was hesitant about even submitting it. It just doesn't sit with me as a real "erotic" story, yes it has sex and yes it is hot in a sense, but something about it just isn't right. Perhaps it's because of all the different emotions that are in it. Maybe it's me and maybe because it's so different than the others I've written, I don't know, hard to put my finger on it. Anyway, thank you again for your time and the feedback.
Wicked

 

[PaulX35]

Well done!

Hi W&E

Thanks for the courage to post this. I think we should have more stories like these, interesting explorations of the less "obvious" sides of erotica. So much of what is written is about being happy and having no problems, and life is about more than just that.

I agree with Alex that you should prepare for a story like this not making top votes; it just doesn't fit within the instant-satisfaction most "5's" are based on. But you got one from me for a well written piece, that dared to tackle something less obvious in a well-conceived way: your writing triggered real emotion and literary erotica should not show reluctance to go there.
So please, be encouraged by feedback, rather than discouraged by possible low votes.

Good luck with your writing

Paul

 

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

Thanks Paul, yes I'm prepared for low, if any, votes on this one. It didn't start out as such an emotional piece but my own moods when I'm writing tend to bleed through. Guess I was having a bad day when I did this one, LOL. Thanks for your feedback and time in reading, it's much appreciated.
Wicked