Suicide cheating wife gangster girl thing

[loquere]

-At 17 Sam comes home to find his dad hanging from the dinning room lights, he killed himself
-His suicide note says it's because he found his wife cheating with his brother
-Tom ends up going into therapy and facility to cope
-A year later he's pulled out of therapy, to move with his mom who he ignores completely
-She's gotten job being principal of an inner-city school
-Tom is 18 now and he talks to no one, people start to think he can't speak
-His locker mate is a ruff pretty gangster girl Isabel
-One day he gets a head up by going through his moms stuff that the police is organizing a raid that includes Isabel's locker.
-He leaves her an anonymous note warning her
-She figures out it's him that saved her from going to prison, she had a lot of weed in her locker
-She confronts Tom in the boyswahroom isolating him for privacy, she wants to know why he saved her, he still won't speak to her. But he awnsers her by trying to kiss her.
-She punches himgiving him a black eye.
-She gets pissed when she sees Tom just smiling
-The next monring she apologizes to Tom for punching him. Suprising her he speaks to her and apologizes
-They start hanging out and Tom starts talking agin. His mom is happy by this, but she hates that hes dating Isabel.

 

[LadyVer]

What cagegory would this go in.? Do you ever write mature stories? The story sounds good but the ages annoy me.Nothing personal. I'm not trying to criticize.

 

[Tmmldr]

-At 17 Sam comes home to find his dad hanging from the dinning room lights, he killed himself
-His suicide note says it's because he found his wife cheating with his brother
-Tom ends up going into therapy and facility to cope
-A year later he's pulled out of therapy, to move with his mom who he ignores completely
-She's gotten job being principal of an inner-city school
-Tom is 18 now and he talks to no one, people start to think he can't speak
-His locker mate is a ruff pretty gangster girl Isabel
-One day he gets a head up by going through his moms stuff that the police is organizing a raid that includes Isabel's locker.
-He leaves her an anonymous note warning her
-She figures out it's him that saved her from going to prison, she had a lot of weed in her locker
-She confronts Tom in the boyswahroom isolating him for privacy, she wants to know why he saved her, he still won't speak to her. But he awnsers her by trying to kiss her.
-She punches himgiving him a black eye.
-She gets pissed when she sees Tom just smiling
-The next monring she apologizes to Tom for punching him. Suprising her he speaks to her and apologizes
-They start hanging out and Tom starts talking agin. His mom is happy by this, but she hates that hes dating Isabel.

Not bad. The girl obviously has a lot of pent up hate. Could it be that she went to a certain inner city school, where there was this total bitch principal? One who liked to rope in little girls (first checking their ID to be sure they were 18) and take advantage of them on trumped up charges?

 

[loquere]

Not bad. The girl obviously has a lot of pent up hate. Could it be that she went to a certain inner city school, where there was this total bitch principal? One who liked to rope in little girls (first checking their ID to be sure they were 18) and take advantage of them on trumped up charges?

-That's a whole different animal. Not so much pent up hate as much as shes a tough girl, she leads a gang of girls that sells weed. She takes care of her family, with the proceeds. Sam is not going to civilize her she's a strong Independant woman that's who she is. Her general surroundings and life crafted her armor it's both a positive and a negative.
-She does hate Sams mom the principal. But because she's a bitch toward her. Down the line I think that can change to Sams mom, instead of trying to send Isabel to prison helping her with her future.
-Sam hates his mom without relent blaming her for his dads suicide, Isabel soon finds that Sam is more fucked up than her. After he starts talking to her, she gets talking to others. They have a wild sex adventure together.

 

[loquere]

What cagegory would this go in.? Do you ever write mature stories? The story sounds good but the ages annoy me.Nothing personal. I'm not trying to criticize.

I think the first part could cover the cheating Sams mom does. Shes 46, at the time. She cheats with an athletic younger 42 year old phased teacher and Sas dad catches them. and strings himself up Sam finding his dads body and locking out the world.

-So loving wives for that part

 

[LadyVer]

I think the first part could cover the cheating Sams mom does. Shes 46, at the time. She cheats with an athletic younger 42 year old phased teacher and Sas dad catches them. and strings himself up Sam finding his dads body and locking out the world.

-So loving wives for that part

Sounds weird for a loving wives story..I thought loving wives was where the hub was just as involved? You mention a Tom. That's Sam, right?

 

[loquere]

Sounds weird for a loving wives story..I thought loving wives was where the hub was just as involved? You mention a Tom. That's Sam, right?

Sam is Tom and Tom is Sam(Sam &Tom are my Story idea guy names). I'm also thinking Isabel will be a Latina

-loving wives, is where the wife is cheating or something.

((I think the first part could cover the cheating Sams mom does. Shes 46, at the time. She cheats with an athletic younger 42 year old phased teacher and Sas dad catches them. and strings himself up Sam finding his dads body and locking out the world.

-So loving wives for that part)) Loving wives for this part because the first chapter will just be this and Sams dad catching his wife and killing himself and Sams reaction. All these chapters are open for interpretation the wife is involved and husband is involved just enough.

 

[wheelchair27]

What about this Sam is a cop, and he has to take the gang girl Isabel into what is know as protective custody because she witnessed a crime, and they clash in the beginning but over time they get to know each other and Sam opens up about his life and he talks about all of the pain and misery he has experienced in his life. Isabel opens up about her life and all the bad things she has done has seen and has done.

 

[Tmmldr]

-That's a whole different animal. Not so much pent up hate as much as shes a tough girl, she leads a gang of girls that sells weed. She takes care of her family, with the proceeds. Sam is not going to civilize her she's a strong Independant woman that's who she is. Her general surroundings and life crafted her armor it's both a positive and a negative.....

Who said civilize her?

She owes Sam, and gets an idea she finds amusing. She'll tell one of the many girl customers she has, that owe money, to give Sam a blowjob. The girl is grateful to get the debt fixed, and shows up and immediately gets on her knees in front of Sam. Isabel finds this oddly exciting, and watches the action as the girl unzips Sam and starts to do him. But he's looking in her eyes all the time, and she finds her self looking in his. Suddenly she's overcome with an emotion, and grabs the girl by the hair and ass kicks her out in the street.

Now she and Sam are standing looking at each other, he with his pants down and a raging problem.

 

[loquere]

What about this Sam is a cop, and he has to take the gang girl Isabel into what is know as protective custody because she witnessed a crime, and they clash in the beginning but over time they get to know each other and Sam opens up about his life and he talks about all of the pain and misery he has experienced in his life. Isabel opens up about her life and all the bad things she has done has seen and has done.

So what happens to the first part?

 

[loquere]

Who said civilize her?

She owes Sam, and gets an idea she finds amusing. She'll tell one of the many girl customers she has, that owe money, to give Sam a blowjob. The girl is grateful to get the debt fixed, and shows up and immediately gets on her knees in front of Sam. Isabel finds this oddly exciting, and watches the action as the girl unzips Sam and starts to do him. But he's looking in her eyes all the time, and she finds her self looking in his. Suddenly she's overcome with an emotion, and grabs the girl by the hair and ass kicks her out in the street.

Now she and Sam are standing looking at each other, he with his pants down and a raging problem.

Okay, this is actually doable. It would make sense if she organizes a date with someone Sam likes and then has regrets. She's not going to watch him in a sex act.

 

[loquere]

Who said civilize her?

She owes Sam, and gets an idea she finds amusing. She'll tell one of the many girl customers she has, that owe money, to give Sam a blowjob. The girl is grateful to get the debt fixed, and shows up and immediately gets on her knees in front of Sam. Isabel finds this oddly exciting, and watches the action as the girl unzips Sam and starts to do him. But he's looking in her eyes all the time, and she finds her self looking in his. Suddenly she's overcome with an emotion, and grabs the girl by the hair and ass kicks her out in the street.

Now she and Sam are standing looking at each other, he with his pants down and a raging problem.

Lets make Isabel a transsexual

 

[Kim_vegas]

-At 17 Sam comes home to find his dad hanging from the dinning room lights, he killed himself
-His suicide note says it's because he found his wife cheating with his brother
-Tom ends up going into therapy and facility to cope
-A year later he's pulled out of therapy, to move with his mom who he ignores completely
-She's gotten job being principal of an inner-city school
-Tom is 18 now and he talks to no one, people start to think he can't speak
-His locker mate is a ruff pretty gangster girl Isabel
-One day he gets a head up by going through his moms stuff that the police is organizing a raid that includes Isabel's locker.
-He leaves her an anonymous note warning her
-She figures out it's him that saved her from going to prison, she had a lot of weed in her locker
-She confronts Tom in the boyswahroom isolating him for privacy, she wants to know why he saved her, he still won't speak to her. But he awnsers her by trying to kiss her.
-She punches himgiving him a black eye.
-She gets pissed when she sees Tom just smiling
-The next monring she apologizes to Tom for punching him. Suprising her he speaks to her and apologizes
-They start hanging out and Tom starts talking agin. His mom is happy by this, but she hates that hes dating Isabel.

Its weird and I love it. The aggression that would develop in Tom every-time he remembers his father's death, and the hatred for his mom to be the cause of the damage .. seems unbalanced. Don't know where and how but it feels this way.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

The whole deal is fucked up and not dramatic. Its the kind of bullshit youd expect from nutty, loser, day treatment patients.

IRL Tom's conflict would be his ambivalence for both parents. He cant do shit about dad, so the resolution is letting the anger go, which translates to NO STORY. Mom seems okay with things and sends Tom to therapy to do what, exactly? Be cool, too? Again, NO STORY.

And what does the gangsta slut have to do with any of it?

What you have is a feel-good PC cluster-fuck.

IRL Tom would be working to make momma change her evil ways, and there is where the story is.

 

[Tmmldr]

Okay, this is actually doable. It would make sense if she organizes a date with someone Sam likes and then has regrets. She's not going to watch him in a sex act.

Have it one way or the other. She's a nice girl or a sociopathic gangster bitch.

The latter is of course way more interesting...

 

[loquere]

The whole deal is fucked up and not dramatic. Its the kind of bullshit youd expect from nutty, loser, day treatment patients.

IRL Tom's conflict would be his ambivalence for both parents. He cant do shit about dad, so the resolution is letting the anger go, which translates to NO STORY. Mom seems okay with things and sends Tom to therapy to do what, exactly? Be cool, too? Again, NO STORY.

And what does the gangsta slut have to do with any of it?

What you have is a feel-good PC cluster-fuck.

IRL Tom would be working to make momma change her evil ways, and there is where the story is.

What does IRL mean?

 

[loquere]

What does IRL mean?

-SERIOUS I'M NOT A TECH GUY

 

[Tmmldr]

The whole deal is fucked up and not dramatic. Its the kind of bullshit youd expect from nutty, loser, day treatment patients.

IRL Tom's conflict would be his ambivalence for both parents. He cant do shit about dad, so the resolution is letting the anger go, which translates to NO STORY. Mom seems okay with things and sends Tom to therapy to do what, exactly? Be cool, too? Again, NO STORY.

And what does the gangsta slut have to do with any of it?

What you have is a feel-good PC cluster-fuck.

IRL Tom would be working to make momma change her evil ways, and there is where the story is.

not necessarily - Tom's anger toward his mom could easily cause him to do things that'd hurt her, taking up with a gangster girlfriend and then flouting that would be one way to get at her.

destructive behavior, yes, but totally plausible.

 

[LadyVer]

What does IRL mean?

-SERIOUS I'M NOT A TECH GUY

In Real Life

 

[loquere]

-LET THE RECORD SHOW, THIS WILL BE A LONG STORY, IF WRITTEN.


-So the first chapter will be loving wives, for that part,. It will just be the long letter that Tom/Sams dad leaves for his wife but Tom/Sam finds instead when he discovers his dads body. It will be a single page of his dad describing things.

-Sam/Tom now lives to hurt his mom. His mom only cares about her career. That's how his not talking starts.

-Helping out Isabel is first about hurting his Mom.

-I'm thinking Isabel become friends with no sex

-I'm thinking of having Isabel get pregnant by someone else

-Isabel then has sex with Sam/Tom to have him believe the kid is his

-Isabel then breaks down and confesses to Sam/Tom that the kids isn't his. Sam/Tom surprises her and decides to say Isabel's kid is his.

-He mainly does it again to hurt his mom, an tangled web of Isabel emotions then ensues.

-

 

[LadyVer]

-LET THE RECORD SHOW, THIS WILL BE A LONG STORY, IF WRITTEN.


-So the first chapter will be loving wives, for that part,. It will just be the long letter that Tom/Sams dad leaves for his wife but Tom/Sam finds instead when he discovers his dads body. It will be a single page of his dad describing things.

-Sam/Tom now lives to hurt his mom. His mom only cares about her career. That's how his not talking starts.

-Helping out Isabel is first about hurting his Mom.

-I'm thinking Isabel become friends with no sex

-I'm thinking of having Isabel get pregnant by someone else

-Isabel then has sex with Sam/Tom to have him believe the kid is his

-Isabel then breaks down and confesses to Sam/Tom that the kids isn't his. Sam/Tom surprises her and decides to say Isabel's kid is his.

-He mainly does it again to hurt his mom, an tangled web of Isabel emotions then ensues.

-

The part about Isabel trying to make Sam believe the kid is his is unrealistic, even more so when he decides to go along with it. He should have kicked her sorry ass to the curb.

 

[loquere]

The part about Isabel trying to make Sam believe the kid is his is unrealistic, even more so when he decides to go along with it. He should have kicked her sorry ass to the curb.

A normal person is, b ut i want him to have sething hatred for his mom. I want him to be near to the point of wanting to kill his own mom. HE WANTS THE BITCH TO BLEED!

 

[LadyVer]

A normal person is, b ut i want him to have sething hatred for his mom. I want him to be near to the point of wanting to kill his own mom. HE WANTS THE BITCH TO BLEED!

ok. Do you have issues with your own mother? Just curious.

 

[loquere]

ok. Do you have issues with your own mother? Just curious.

-LOL! I've been killing everyone in my stories lately. Plus I'm complying with the LW theme of revenge on women.

-You also know I have no time to write this shit.

 

[LadyVer]

-LOL! I've been killing everyone in my stories lately. Plus I'm complying with the LW theme of revenge on women.

Could you clarify what the LW theme of revenge on women is?

-You also know I have no time to write this shit.

Ok. So you're just throwing ideas around.

PS Somehow I wrote within your quote..I'm on my droid so....