Story: The Runaway Aristocrat

[moonlight84]

Hello everyone,
After enjoying to read all these stories I´ve start to write my first story in CHYOO2. I would really like to get some feedback as it is my first attemp to write erotica. Also the story is quite dark imo and far from finished.

The Storytitel is: The Runaway Aristocrat

http://www.chyoo.com/index.php/main.story.cover/8340


PS: It is better to have a deep thread or many branches?

 

[whizzper]

I think a nice long thread is good, but with areas for going a different route built in.

 

[moonlight84]

Hello,
I`ve noticed that I enjoyed stories with a closure. So I will try to implement endings before I start to add branches.

I`ve posted the first part on literotica and hope go get some feedbacks now:

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-runaway-aristocrat

 

[moonlight84]

Hello again,
I have opened this story for everyone to add new posts. I hope there is someone interessted to contribute something, too. Thanks in advance

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I still haven`t decided how this story will develop in the future. There are a few suggestions:

1. She will get rescued

2. She stays as a whore on this ship

3. They sell her as planned

4. ???

Tell me what you like to read. As always feedback and ratings are more than welcome.