Story idea about ex-special forces officer who stalks his prey

Alanna208

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I'd love to see a story/book/movie written by a military man about an ex-special forces guy who uses all his training to find his perfect prey. He very slowly and thoroughly stalks her, abducts her, and then plays mind games on her, lets her escape in a controlled manner so he can recapture her, uses brainwashing techniques (including drugs) on her to make her fall in love with him. He rapes her several times as part of the brainwashing and uses his physical training to subdue her for this. Of course there's evidence throughout the story of his extensive training in weapons, the intense physical and psychological conditioning he went through, and how he uses this knowledge in analyzing his prey's responses to every element introduced into the "exercise."

The vet is 35 years old, 6 foot 3 in. tall, better than average build, well muscled. Clear gray eyes, nicely tanned, dark hair, either clean shaven or wears a goatee/mustache. He is from Montana or Wyoming. His mindset is ruthlessly military/predatory. He is intense and thorough in everything he does, and has removed every shred of trackable identity to himself. Uses computers, gadgets; can fashion his own tech traps and gadgets. He is incredibly intelligent, but has gone over the edge, in a predatory, very competent way.

He wants to find HER, but his mind is twisted from the norm. He wants to "possess" her. Invade her mind, body and soul with the essense of his domination. He wants her to live, breathe, and think, but with every atom of her being, to know that she is his and cannot change that. To recognize there is no escape and to surrender to him, so he can make her his mate--psychologically, physically, mentally, and for all eternity. Problem is, he is a hunter/killer type of guy who likes "the game of the hunt" and at the same time he wants her to surrender to him, he wants her to fight him with every thing she has.

She is 28, 5 feet 7 inches tall, lithe and willowy of build. She's tanned and toned, long beautiful blonde hair, green eyes, loves gardening and outdoor activities like hiking and backpacking. She's from northern Arizona.

I don't want the man to beat the woman ever. (Maybe a slap or two.) But he would use military holds and use force. He really does love her, but in his own way. I don't have an ending for the story, but I know I don't want the man or the woman to die, and I don't want the man to be captured by the authorities.
 
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Interesting, however i think it would be hard to write if you didnt know a bit about special forces and their skills and tactics and stuff. Good luck finding someone like that.
 
Spec ops vet stalks/captures woman

I know the chances of a guy like that seeing my idea and having the talent to write it out are pretty slim, but I can't write the story myself, either, being as I'm not a guy, had any military training, haven't any writing experience, etc. But being a soldier's wife all my adult life, and seeing these guys everywhere I look, can you blame me for my fantasy?

With all the ideas that Hollywood writers do over and over again, you'd think they'd look at bulletin boards like the one in Literotica for fresh ideas. Oh well, I can still dream.......

Thanks for responding, by the way; I was feeling like my idea had no merit until you did.
 
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I think your idea is interesting. Yet i woundlt know exactly how to go about writing it, and even if i did it would take me ages. I have written military stuff before however its always science fiction where you can just make shit up without it needed to be accurate lol. (non errotic science fiction, i do have a life outside of this website lol).
How badly do you want this story???
 
spec ops vet stalks his prey

Hi lovetowrite:
Regarding how badly I want it, I've lived without it being written for several years. I'm always looking for it in books and movies, though. The hunt itself is some consolation, but I'd treasure the find, for sure.

This consumate male hunting me--I mean her--down. What a thrill!

And to be slowly, meticulously, won over without knowing it as part of an "ops" plan is a big turn on for me. Being the target of a "real man's" mind is, well, really arousing.

Why does how badly I want it matter anyway?

And yes, it has to be accurate.
 
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Because i might have considered writing it, but i wont be responseable for the accuracy so never mind.
 
spec ops vet who stalks his prey

Thanks anyway, and feel free to use the idea in your own stuff.
 
hello alanna

it sounds like you have quite the specific request here. I don't think i'm qualified to help you but it's certainly a viable idea. It just needs the right writer. A looooooooooooong story called The Walkterton Institute (or something very close to that) at literotica is something like that, except that the main female character is already trained . If you check it out you'll see what i mean.

Anyway, i had to drop you a line when i read your original post because reading about people named "alana" (spelled differently, i know) from arizona sends the fantasies tumbling through my head. Alas, i'm not sure i'll ever get anyone to write those stories for me, either. And i'm a little afraid to tackle it myself, so i'll just have to do without until i can overcome that fear.

Good luck to you in your quest.

:rose: :rose: :rose:
 
you're welcome alanna!

it's the wilkerson institute, actually. i looked it up.

That story shows the effects of the kind of thing you are talking about, whereas i think you're looking for the actual process.

If you've already been through everything at lit, try the kristen archives.

Anyway, here is a link the wilkerson institute. I hope you like it!

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=5353&page=1
 
spec ops vet stalks prey

Hello Fanzee,

The Wilkerson Institute was in the Erotic Couplings category. Where are the Kristen Archives?

The Wilkerson Institute was about women who aspired to be used in this way, but my fantasy is about a woman who must be broken (ranch jargon), and is kept a prisoner.

Thanks for looking that up for me, too....
 
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Alanna208 said:
Hello Fanzee,

The Wilkerson Institute was in the Erotic Couplings category. Where are the Kristen Archives?

The Wilkerson Institute was about women who aspired to be used in this way, but my fantasy is about a woman who must be broken (ranch jargon), and is kept a prisoner.

Thanks for looking that up for me, too....

No problem on the link alanna. I knew TWI wasn't exactly what you were looking for but i couldn't think of anything exactly on point.

Here is the link to the Kristen Archives. Some great stories here, if you are unfamiliar with the place. Just scroll down this page to you see a bunch of black horizontal bars with white writing in the center of the page. One will say "Just Nonconsensual Stories" Another will say "Just Mind Control Stories."

Again, lots of cool stuff here, whether you find precisely what you are looking for or not. Have fun!

http://www.asstr.org/~Kristen/main.htm
 
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The basic situation you describe was written back in the 1970's. The title is "The Collector" by John Fowles. It was a bestseller at the time. It may still be in print or available through a used book dealer.

Although I have a fairly extensive military background, I do not care to write non-consent stories.

Hope this helps.
 
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Axeltheswede said:
The basic situation you describe was written back in the 1970's. The title is "The Collector" by John Fowles. It was a bestseller at the time. It may still be in print or available through a used book dealer.

Although I have a fairly extensive military background, I do not care to write non-consent stories.

Hope this helps.
Thanks, Mr. Swede--I looked it up at Barnes and Noble, but it's not what I want. No military guy, and some gender confusion. But thanks, anyway.
 
stalker

I can offer one other way you might get your story written. Find an author specializing in "Non-consent" stories. Approach that author in a feedback email or PM. Lay out the specifics of your story and ask nicely.

It may take a few tries. It may be worth a shot if you don't get any takers on this BB.

Good luck.
 
Does anyone know of any studio in Hollywood I could pitch this to? Or any well-known author who might be interested?
 
Hmm, you've got me thinking now Alana. I like your idea and I think I'll give it a whirl and at least see how it sounds to me.
I've got some military experience, not special forces but I can probably fake it well enough for anybody but Rambo. I'm new at the whole erotic fiction game so I can't promise anything great. If it don't think it turns out good though I can just trash it.
 
I'm glad you're interested enough to do this. Hope it goes well. I'm already looking forward to reading it!
 
I'm running this by you again, hoping someone new will see it and take up the gauntlet........
 
Hoping someone takes this up

Just re-posting this hoping someone takes it up and writes it.
 
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Alanna208 said:
Just re-posting this hoping someone takes it up and writes it.

Can't promise anything Alanna, but I'll have a look and write a few lines to see how it sounds to me.
I'm new to non-consent myself and quite new to pure fiction, I do have a military background, though not special forces I did a lot of work with the para's, and they're all nut cases, hehe, anyone who jumps out of a perfectly serviceable aircraft in flight is nuts.


pops...........;)
 
Seeing as how I've been stalked several times in real life, it's not something I fantasize about. Sorry.
 
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