Hey hey - looking for some constructive crit on "Rachelle's Fundamental Treatment," here is part 1 of 2 ...
http://www.literotica.com/s/rachelles-fundamental-treatment-01
Such as, dialogue, realism, action, character. Do you want to keep reading or does it leave you yawning. Stuff like that. It is funny? Do you want more/less?
Thanks guys n gals,
Thal
http://www.literotica.com/s/rachelles-fundamental-treatment-01
Such as, dialogue, realism, action, character. Do you want to keep reading or does it leave you yawning. Stuff like that. It is funny? Do you want more/less?
Thanks guys n gals,
Thal