Stolen

[MissJNadin]

Hi there, I have an idea that I'd love to see turned into a story.

My idea involves a woman being stolen completely and utterly off her husband - even though they have a good relationship. The overriding theme is lust conquering love - the bad boy vs. the shy nice guy.

However, the story begins at the aftermath; after she has already left her husband for her lover. It cuts back and forth between the wife in the throes of ecstasy with her new lover, and the husband alone in her former home, wondering where things went wrong.

The story would occur over a single night - cutting back and forth between the jilted ex-husband and the wife with her new man. It would basically be a straight sex story, but with the husband parts breaking up the 'action'.

I think this could be challenging to write, but it will also be unique and intriguing. The story will sea-saw between erotic sex and heartbroken misery; showing both sides of the 'cheating' coin.

Does anyone feel up to the challenge?

 

[Carnevil9]

Wow, that sounds like a serious character study! Not sure it would fly round these parts.

Here's a twist, though: you might want to include sex in both halves of the equation. Show the throes of ecstasy with the new lover, but intercut it with flashbacks of the prosaic, vanilla, but loving sex with the husband. Yes, it is a bit more cumbersome, time-wise, but I think the contrast would be more relevant to the theme.

Just a thought!.......Carney

 

[MissJNadin]

Ooh, I like that idea! If anyone's interested in writing the story, PM me.

 

[jeninflorida]

I’ve seen this happen in real life. Where the husband is a great guy but is very vanilla. When there is no ups and downs, no excitement, sometimes one’s mind can drift. A bad boy enters the picture and the excitement can be intriguing, a walk on the other side of the tracks, something that is so out of character for her, something that she has never done in her life and before she takes that first step she starts to think, “I’ve never had any adventures, I’ve always done what’s expected of me; and I never do anything just for myself.”

Hi there, I have an idea that I'd love to see turned into a story.

My idea involves a woman being stolen completely and utterly off her husband - even though they have a good relationship. The overriding theme is lust conquering love - the bad boy vs. the shy nice guy.

However, the story begins at the aftermath; after she has already left her husband for her lover. It cuts back and forth between the wife in the throes of ecstasy with her new lover, and the husband alone in her former home, wondering where things went wrong.

The story would occur over a single night - cutting back and forth between the jilted ex-husband and the wife with her new man. It would basically be a straight sex story, but with the husband parts breaking up the 'action'.

I think this could be challenging to write, but it will also be unique and intriguing. The story will sea-saw between erotic sex and heartbroken misery; showing both sides of the 'cheating' coin.

Does anyone feel up to the challenge?

 

[JustaSCOUNDREL]

MissJNadin an author called "creamer" wrote a generally similar story called Bean Counter or The Bean Counter. That story was more about payback though. He also wrote a follow up I don't remember the name but now the wife has come back begging him to take her back so this is mostly about pay back with inputs from the wife and how she feels.

I may not be your cup o' tea but it was well written and both had multiple chapters. Honestly I seldom read submissions with lots of chapters but both of these got my attention.

Mike

 

[Great_Brit]

MissJNadin an author called "creamer" wrote a generally similar story called Bean Counter or The Bean Counter. ...

Ceramer is at http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=255904&page=submissions but be warned, there are only the first 16 chapters there. It is a complete let down to find the last few paragraphs of chapter 16 read:

And for those of you who wanted to see that, I hope you were satisfied with the outcome. I know I was. You folks will probably be content to see the story end there, and for you, it does.

But not for me. I finished up writing my thoughts down (which you are now almost finished reading) and considered taking my father-in-law's advice. I'm making this into a book, available at lulu dot com, for cheap. Contact me through the 'author' for the exact address, if you can't find it, but you'll get the whole story at bargain basement prices. Because it isn't about the money, of course.

If you are interested in what happened to Mary, the baby, Susan, why I bribed the priest, as well as what happened, ultimately, to Mary and I, well, that's where it is, in one final chapter. I didn't want to mess up an otherwise perfectly good revenge story with soap operatic details. But just to tease you a little, I will tell you that Mary was not, as I had thought, completely out of my life.

I'd hint at more, but my cell is ringing and it's Susan's number.

Cruel, I know, to deny you the closure that you feel you're entitled to after bearing with me through these long chapters. Why? Because I want to know just how many people felt that the story was compelling enough to cough up a nominal fee to see how it ends. I'm a bean counter, and those are some important beans to me. Cruel, but practical. But that's just the way I am.

After all, I'm the smartest fucking bean counter on the planet.

 

[Lynn_MXX]

I'm always searching for this type of story Jen, the skilful, charismatic seducer, breaking down the will of a reluctant wife, whose alarmfully attracted to the seducer but is determent not to give in to him

You may be interested in "The Makings of Ellen" by DSoul. It is 6 chapters long but unfortunately peters out after the third. Chapters 1-3 are VERY well written, though.

Tagged: Interracial, drama, seduction, temptation, cheating, cuckold, black domination. And in later chapters: Sex toys, Group Sex, Gang Bang

 

[want2_watchwife]

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[MissJNadin]

I don't understand either side of the coin of these stories. I can't see how anyone is aroused by complete betrayal or by vengeance. The LW category is currently awash with vengeance stories. Have the wife die of AIDS, have the jilted husband cave in the lovers skull, and you're almost sure of a big red H. (Average rating above 4.5 out of 5). It makes me sick. But, I find the wife tears out the husband's heart stories just as heinous.

My own desires are twisted, I fully understand that. But, I simply can't understand those who are aroused by misery.

I'm not a fan of vengeance stories either - but I do like realism in stories, and the simple fact is, people DO cheat and break up. It might be horrible in real life, but infidelity provides plenty of great opportunity for conflict and emotion in a story, which is why I like it.

So is anyone willing to try their hand at my story idea? Pleeeease?

 

[want2_watchwife]

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[jeninflorida]

I'm always searching for this type of story Jen, the skilful, charismatic seducer, breaking down the will of a reluctant wife, whose alarmfully attracted to the seducer but is determent not to give in to him

You may be interested in "The Makings of Ellen" by DSoul. It is 6 chapters long but unfortunately peters out after the third. Chapters 1-3 are VERY well written, though.

Tagged: Interracial, drama, seduction, temptation, cheating, cuckold, black domination. And in later chapters: Sex toys, Group Sex, Gang Bang

well I do have a story that is almost ready for a editor. where a guy goes back to his home town to deal with a family death. he was always the bad boy, rocker and he left town when his bad made it big.

course he rides his bike from CA to his home town. once in town he meets a couple ole flames and guy friends. should I tell you more or wait till its ready to be published? Spoiler alert – he let one woman get away that he knew she was the one, but she thought he was just interested in sex.

thanks for the author's name, I'll check him out

 

[MissJNadin]

Yes, but the site is Literotica. I fail to see what's erotic about these stories. If it's conflict and emotion you're looking for, you'll get a far better experience at your local library.

When I want to see a bunch of kids having fun, I'll take in my local high school's baseball games. When I want to watch real baseball, I turn on the TV or head to the stadium.

But I think the notion of lust conquering everything else *can* be erotic. The primal, irresistible urge to fuck - no matter what the consequences - is definitely arousing.

Maybe not in real life, but when you're dealing with FICTIONAL CHARACTERS it can be very sexy. Plus, naughty sex is always more fun to read. lol

 

[want2_watchwife]

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[Carnevil9]

Originally Posted by creamer
And for those of you who wanted to see that, I hope you were satisfied with the outcome. I know I was. You folks will probably be content to see the story end there, and for you, it does.

But not for me. I finished up writing my thoughts down (which you are now almost finished reading) and considered taking my father-in-law's advice. I'm making this into a book, available at lulu dot com, for cheap. Contact me through the 'author' for the exact address, if you can't find it, but you'll get the whole story at bargain basement prices. Because it isn't about the money, of course.

If you are interested in what happened to Mary, the baby, Susan, why I bribed the priest, as well as what happened, ultimately, to Mary and I, well, that's where it is, in one final chapter. I didn't want to mess up an otherwise perfectly good revenge story with soap operatic details. But just to tease you a little, I will tell you that Mary was not, as I had thought, completely out of my life.

I'd hint at more, but my cell is ringing and it's Susan's number.

Cruel, I know, to deny you the closure that you feel you're entitled to after bearing with me through these long chapters. Why? Because I want to know just how many people felt that the story was compelling enough to cough up a nominal fee to see how it ends. I'm a bean counter, and those are some important beans to me. Cruel, but practical. But that's just the way I am.

After all, I'm the smartest fucking bean counter on the planet.

I love it! Somebody finding a way to make the internet pay. And using the old dope dealer gambit ("first one's free, kid!") I hope Creamer makes a bundle......Carney