Starting a New Chapter

[LunarKitten]

Hi all,

I'm starting Chapter 2 for my Initation of a New Submissive and wondered if I could get some feedback on the first chapter, to make the second read better:

http://english.literotica.com:81/stories/showstory.php?id=131300

Any and all comments - good and bad - are greatly appreciated.

 

[Bacteriophage68]

Re:

Maybe you should give descriptions for Brad, Ann, and Katherine. Unless you did already and I missed it.