Sorority Boy Toy

[SillyBilly1993]

A cute but shy and submissive 18-year-old boy with a extraordinary large penis meets three beautiful 20 something Sorority girls named Carly, Amber, & Jessica.

The 3 girls invite him to a private party at their sorority house To meet their headmaster Heather a 22 year old who's an expert on taking a young man's virginity.

By the end of the night before Sorority sisters make the 18-year-old their personal boy toy as the young man thrusts his banana sack covered cock in each of the girls faces, And each girl gets a huge shot of cum in their faces!

 

[VladHarkonnen]

this story is screaming for a bondage angle...

 

[Sean Renaud]

I'm not just feeling the virgin angle here. I think you'd be worlds better off with if not an established stud at least a guy who could plausibly be more than a joke in this situation. I can tell you that the number of males who START off life in three girls on one boy that end with the ladies doing anything other than giggling is probably so low that the man should have a fucking shrine.

 

[SillyBilly1993]

Whatever works!

 

[Sean Renaud]

I see it more like this.

You have a guy, we'll call him Jack because every fictional male is named Jack. Or it sure as fuck feels that way somedays.

Jack was big man on campus at his High School. There wasn't anything particularly bad about him, he's not really a villain just a guy who had "it" and knew it and got around his fair share. So he knows a lot of ladies.

He shows up at college though and he either lacks the clout that he once had and the ladies invite him over playing a joke on him, but he turns out to impress them or one of the girls is the older sister, friend whatever of a girl that he knew in High School. She can either be a girl who liked him a lot o ra girl who was hurt by him. It's just important to make it as clear as possible that any pain he caused ladies in High School was at worst because he didn't realize that some of them were taking things a lot more seriously than he was.

From there we've got the ladies and happy bondage time as they tease him but ultimately come to like him. He's a nice guy after all.

I'd probably cut the ladies from 4 to a maximum of three while recommending one or two. Trust me, repeating their names over and over again gets repetitive (not to mention at least 50% of authors and 75% of readers eventually lose track of who's where exactly) and pronouns start getting messy quick for the same reason. In real life orgies are great, on camera orgies are good if you've got people with synergy and a good cameraman. In comics they are incredible (or as good as the artist is anyway) but as written stories they tend to be clusterfucks.

The story honestly just shy of writes itself if you can get it started.

 

[SillyBilly1993]

How about a contest? You all can take my concept and make your own original story And I will judge which one is the best!

 

[Sean Renaud]

Yeah, don't get ahead of yourself sparky.

 

[DarkPleasures]

...his banana sack covered cock in each of the girls faces...

Banana sack covered cock?

 

[Sean Renaud]

I chose to ignore that part for the sake of my sanity.

 

[hornyrajni]

hmmmm

so wat hppns in the end???

 

[RicoLouis]

the guy cumming in their faces dosn't really fit if he is suppose to be the boy toy. Its more of a dominant act.

 

[VladHarkonnen]

the guy cumming in their faces dosn't really fit if he is suppose to be the boy toy. Its more of a dominant act.

Agreed. In fact, I would think that him cumming anywhere on their bodies...or any place other than he's told to, would be a punishable act.

I also agree with Sean Renaud that the guy shouldn't be a virgin. I don't know that he has to be the big man on campus though. I see him as experienced...but maybe the kind of good looking, quiet guy that outgoing women tend to approach.

Banana sack covered cock?

I took this to mean that his penis is intact...didn't much like the way it was worded but I suppose it's better than an anteater metaphor.

 

[SillyBilly1993]

That could work really well!

 

[Sean Renaud]

90% of porn, even written, ends in a facial. Sometimes I just go with the flow because there is a reason it's there. Kinda like if you need enough road to have a 100mph car chase in the middle of the afternoon don't worry, traffic will be sparse enough to accomodate you. (Not that I disagree with the sentiment of either person simply stating a fact)

If he's quiet and not the big man in need of putting him down you're gonna have to try a lot harder for the girls to come out as the good guys and not a bunch of bullies. Remember it's okay to bully a bully, or put a punk in his place but four girls tying down the quiet kid who never hurt anybody is really just a bunch of girls picking on a guy. My experience is that erotica frowns on this. We can debate WHY till we all die of boredom but there tend to be more female readers of females being taken advantage of than readers period about the opposite. And less hate mail to boot.

 

[MatthewVett]

Am I the only one wondering how these girls discovered that he had a giant cock? Shy boys don't typically whip it out and walk around campus with it bobbing along.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Am I the only one wondering how these girls discovered that he had a giant cock? Shy boys don't typically whip it out and walk around campus with it bobbing along.

I was wondering that, which is why I changed him from a shy kid to a big man at his High School and one who had dated one of these girls' sisters/friends. Because that's exactly the point a shy virgin isn't the kind of person that would have a known dick size.

 

[SillyBilly1993]

I get it! Forget about him being a shy virgin!

 

[MatthewVett]

I get it! Forget about him being a shy virgin!

We will when you stop making every single story idea about a shy virgin...

 

[RuzieD]

I'm kind of imagining the soroirty girls are playing a mutual dare game called "fuck the nerdy boy" or something.

He's got to be something out of the circles right? That might be fun.

 

[VladHarkonnen]

90% of porn, even written, ends in a facial. Sometimes I just go with the flow because there is a reason it's there. Kinda like if you need enough road to have a 100mph car chase in the middle of the afternoon don't worry, traffic will be sparse enough to accomodate you. (Not that I disagree with the sentiment of either person simply stating a fact)

If he's quiet and not the big man in need of putting him down you're gonna have to try a lot harder for the girls to come out as the good guys and not a bunch of bullies. Remember it's okay to bully a bully, or put a punk in his place but four girls tying down the quiet kid who never hurt anybody is really just a bunch of girls picking on a guy. My experience is that erotica frowns on this. We can debate WHY till we all die of boredom but there tend to be more female readers of females being taken advantage of than readers period about the opposite. And less hate mail to boot.

Believe me, being quiet and shy doesn't preclude a guy being a philanderer. It doesn't mean that he's a "nice" guy. And the fact that these women came to him instead of vice versa doesn't mean that they deserve the claw trap they stepped into.

As far as how these girls would know about the size of his dick...well...one of them might have stepped into that trap. Had wonderful sex with him but ended up getting hurt. Maybe more than one of them have some kind of grudge against him...

Here's how I see this character...

Maybe the guy, while being quiet and shy but good looking and good in bed is weak. He can't say "no" to a woman he finds attractive when she's offering. The attention he's getting from women is relatively new to him. He's something of a late bloomer. Sure, he may have dated some in high school. Again, he was a shy but pretty boy so some women approached him. But when he gets to college he fills out, looks more manly. More women become interested. But, while he can listen to women talk to him about themselves and appear interested and concerned, he doesn't really relate to women very well as people because to him they're still intimidating, beautiful sex goddesses (and objects) and the only thing that unlocks the mystery of a woman for him is to sleep with her. Only then can he truly relax with a woman and get past the soft, divine light he sees women under. Only he's too relaxed and disregards their feelings in pursuit of the next woman that comes along. This is where he builds that following of women that he's hurt...not intentionally. He isn't cruel or mean spirited. He doesn't hate women but he's self absorbed...disassociated. He doesn't fully appreciate the feelings of others. This makes him the dog controlled by his libido that he is. Eventually, he'll grow up...if left to his own devices and his own bumpy road to travel.

But he isn't left to his own devices. This group of women decide to treat him exactly like the dog he is and use him for the one part of a relationship he's truly good for. They invite him to their sorority party. He walks in and he finds that he's the only guy there...hot, degrading sexual bondage ensues.

 

[ClydeMacGregor]

A cute but shy and submissive 18-year-old boy with a extraordinary large penis meets three beautiful 20 something Sorority girls named Carly, Amber, & Jessica.

The 3 girls invite him to a private party at their sorority house To meet their headmaster Heather a 22 year old who's an expert on taking a young man's virginity.

By the end of the night before Sorority sisters make the 18-year-old their personal boy toy as the young man thrusts his banana sack covered cock in each of the girls faces, And each girl gets a huge shot of cum in their faces!

"Headmistress" applies to females. On what planet does a 22 year old female become a headmistress? Not on this one.

Streamline the plot like suggested by others, iron out the discrepancies and you might suspend disbelief.

 

[Sean Renaud]

While I disagree with my esteemed Colleague from the Hellsing Organization I won't argue because I think his story sounds interesting.

To the above poster it was clear that in this case Headmistress is the title of the leader of the Sorority. 22 is about right since she should be out of college before she's too much older than that.

 

[VladHarkonnen]

While I disagree with my esteemed Colleague from the Hellsing Organization...

Bah...busted.

 

[Sean Renaud]

There are certainly worse organizations to be long to friend.

 

[ClydeMacGregor]

While I disagree with my esteemed Colleague from the Hellsing Organization I won't argue because I think his story sounds interesting.

To the above poster it was clear that in this case Headmistress is the title of the leader of the Sorority. 22 is about right since she should be out of college before she's too much older than that.

Thanks for the clarification.