Sopping Pajamas

[sincerely_helene]

Ok, so, I just woke from the hottest, most mind blowing, wash-the-sheets twice, erotic dream. It is the first time I have felt inspired for quite some time, so I think I will take advantage of this high while it lasts.

My questions for all you authorly types:
What is the best way to go about this?

Should I write it in first person and explain that it is dream based in the beggining, or just write it as any other story?

Should I disclude the parts that don't make any sense or may not be percieved to the reader as erotic, even if I feel they are significant?

Has anyone else ever attempted this, and if so, could you paste URLs?

 

[logophile]

Ok, so, I just woke from the hottest, most mind blowing, wash-the-sheets twice, erotic dream. It is the first time I have felt inspired for quite some time, so I think I will take advantage of this high while it lasts.

My questions for all you authorly types:
What is the best way to go about this?

Should I write it in first person and explain that it is dream based in the beggining, or just write it as any other story?

Should I disclude the parts that don't make any sense or may not be percieved to the reader as erotic, even if I feel they are significant?

Has anyone else ever attempted this, and if so, could you paste URLs?

I've never written a real dream before, but I think you should include as much of it as you can, and then give a disclaimer at the beginning (or work it into the opening paragraph)...

Good luck and congrats on the great dream.

 

[cheerful_deviant]

Never tried it... never even thought of it actually.

I would put in the authors notes that this is, or was a real dream, then write it in the first person as it happened. Include everything you experienced, it is a dream after all, you should preserve the surreal qualtiy.

 

[sincerely_helene]

Never tried it... never even thought of it actually.

I would put in the authors notes that this is, or was a real dream, then write it in the first person as it happened. Include everything you experienced, it is a dream after all, you should preserve the surreal qualtiy.

Thanks, Logophile and CD. This is precisely how I was hoping to go about it, but wasn't sure. I know many are put off by first person, but this is the one time I think it is approp.

 

[cantdog]

I wrote a dream up for a German woman who asked for someone to do so. She posted on the Story Ideas board.

She loved the story, but the critics in the Story Discussion board panned it big time for the unexplained motivations.

I never did post the story. Therefore I don't know what the public would have made of it.

This is the story Andrea liked so well.

I know that isn't quite the same as my own dream. I handled it in third person.

My own dream is the "poem" in my sig.

 

[cheerful_deviant]

Thanks, Logophile and CD. This is precisely how I was hoping to go about it, but wasn't sure. I know many are put off by first person, but this is the one time I think it is approp.

Personally, I think I write best in first person. My first story was written that way and I plan on going back to it in my next.

 

[Bridget69]

I think you should write it as a dream format rather than coverting it to a regular story and include as much details as you remember. I really wish my dreams were that vivid and inspiring. LOL!

 

[impressive]

I wrote a dream up for a German woman who asked for someone to do so. She posted on the Story Ideas board.

She loved the story, but the critics in the Story Discussion board panned it big time for the unexplained motivations.

I never did post the story. Therefore I don't know what the public would have made of it.

This is the story Andrea liked so well.

I know that isn't quite the same as my own dream. I handled it in third person.

My own dream is the "poem" in my sig.

The poem is awesome, too!

 

[cantdog]

Thanks, imp. It was a real dream. The bird skulls surfaced in several dreams besides. It was a bleak period of my life. I felt especially alien to the rest of the species just then.

 

[destinie21]

Initially I had pm'd this story to SH just because I didn't want to post a long ass response in her thread, but then again if it can help anyone else then it should be here right? I actually wrote this story about a dream that woke me in the middle of the night. It was on a legal pad until it got transferred to the computer.

Dream 5/13/2004
They say dreams tell tale of subconscious desire. If that’s true well then my subconscious is already getting way ahead of itself. Then again I’m not much into fate and destiny and suchlike so for all intents and purposes it was just a wet dream. But god damn what a dream, she’s standing right in front of me like an apparition, my fear isn’t in spite of her presence it’s because of it. Her eyes set me ablaze and all at once I’m being baptized in fire. Burn baby burn is what I say, ashes to ashes and all that. I spread my arms wide and for the life of me I can’t remember if I spoke or if she just knew but a moment later she was in my arms and whispering the word yes against my lips. The way she drew out the s like a hiss made me wet my panties and her lips sent shocks through my body. I can feel the sweat beading on my skin and I’m burning up leaving the scent of me in the air like incense. The smell of us is thick in the suddenly hot air and even with the sweat rolling between my breasts I’m shivering. My teeth nibble across he bottom lip tugging, and my hand slips between our bodies under her shirt across the smooth plane of her belly my nails rake the skin lightly traveling languidly over her ribcage then cupping her breast. The weight of it in my hand is so familiar I feel like I’m holding a memory in my palm. I feel an electric tug in my belly when her nipple tightens in my palm. I’m feeling ferocious as I pull my lips from hers and my hand from her shirt. I push her back slightly to make a space between us. Without warning I rip open the shirt she’s wearing. She’s naked from the waist up looking like she can’t believe I tore her clothes off. I shake my head and shrug my shoulders in one fluid motion as if to say “Girl you knew I would.” I’m fumbling with her pants wondering why the hell they seemed to have so many buttons and zippers. Her abdomen tenses and I can tell when I look her in the eye that she’s laughing at me. I feel the catch on her pants release and slip my hand into her pants. She’s not laughing when I manage to push to fingers into her easily. The sound she makes, makes me moan and then chase the low deep sound with a laugh. I can feel her wetness sliding over my fingers she feels like a ripe sweet juicy fruit. I want to taste the wetness that I’m causing but I move slowly. My strokes are without measure, my aim to tease.

I pull my fingers out not done by a long shot, I only wanted to wipe that grin off her face. I work the jeans over her hips kneeling to do so. I look up again she’s smug my little blue eyed one. “That’s a perfect position for submission.” That’s what she tells me

I want to roll my eyes but I don’t, I don’t hold back the laugh in my throat either. “Submission is nothing more than covert control.” I tell her this and wonder if she knows that I’m saying that she was in control all those months. Tears are in my eyes and I push back the thoughts, remembering the business at hand. She’s standing there in black lycra bikini panties. I push my tongue out and run it over the fabric. I can’t see her wetness but I can taste her deep dark heat of the fabric. Just touching her is getting me so colose to the edge. I’m still fully dressed but dripping I can feel my own heat and slickness on my inner thighs and my muscles clench and bunch grabbing at nothing as butterflies flit through my stomach. I push her panties aside, noticing the contrast of her underwear on her creamy skin then noticing the contrast of my dark skin as my hands grip her thighs. I can’t or don’t notice anything else. My eyes are closed and she’s surrounding my lips and fingers. I’m pulling her clit between my lips sucking and pushing my fingers up and in.



She’s panting and her muscles grip my fingers as I push harder and faster. My name spills from her lips and that’s it for me I can feel a whole new thicker sweeter denser wetness spilling from me. Lights flash inside my head like flitting fire flies one after another. I want to concentrate but I can barely remember my own name. But she’s saying it for me over and over like a sweet reminder. I grip her thigh and I’m shaking all over, but my attention is back on her as these kick ass little after shocks tingle through me. I’m sweating and my hair is curling up with our humidity she’s screaming when I wake up. I’m tangled in my sweaty sheets dripping and in heat in my little slice of central air heaven. I’m shivering but I know damn well I’ve never been hotter.

 

[logophile]

Man Des, you really know how to write it! Thanks for that. Now I'm off to take the edge off the frustration that seems to be bubbling inside me...

 

[destinie21]

thank you

 

[logophile]

thank you

No, really, Thank You!

 

[cantdog]

Destinie is always vivid. Her strength is the vignette, with intensity and panache.

Thanks again, Destinie. You're the lesbian Dylan Thomas of porn; I tip the hat.

 

[sincerely_helene]

Cant: Terrific job on the imagery and construction of that poem! I'm still reading through the story, as it is a long one.

Destinie: I'm thrilled you had a change of heart about posting.

 

[rosco rathbone]

Just blurt it out.

 

[destinie21]

Destinie is always vivid. Her strength is the vignette, with intensity and panache.

Thanks again, Destinie. You're the lesbian Dylan Thomas of porn; I tip the hat.

Well that's the coolest thing any one has ever said about me it's going in my sig line.

 

[English Lady]

My first ever submission to lit was adream based story.I wrote it in first personand even did the whole "it was just a dream" bit at the end. It's not particularly pretty but I got some good feedback on it. I say write it as a dream and just go for it.

I edited my dream a bit to make it make a bit more sense and to give it a bit more form. In fact so far it's the only dream to inspire a storyof mine.

I'd provide a link but i'm to embarassed to do so*L* It's entitled "Spank!" if anyone is brave enough to look for it *L*

 

[Guest]

 

[sincerely_helene]

Great job, EL! Certainly nothing at all to be embarassed about. Thanks for sharing.

Rhino: You made me wait for Model Muse. Fair is fair.

 

[Guest]

 

[sincerely_helene]

Too bad you don't have more free time on your hands, Rhino. You might enjoy the challenge of illustrating this one.

 

[destinie21]

hmmm

Now I'm interested to know who else has erotic dreams
I had one hell of a dream last night, I hope I can remember all the details.

 

[Colleen Thomas]

Re: hmmm

Now I'm interested to know who else has erotic dreams
I had one hell of a dream last night, I hope I can remember all the details.

You INSPIRE erotic dreams

 

[destinie21]

Re: Re: hmmm

You INSPIRE erotic dreams

I wonder if SH will mind if we hijack her thread to post erotic dreams. Maybe I should start a sepreate thread.