Some Randoms

[ExistentialLuv]

Hello

I do not post here often but do like to share every once in a while.


These 2 are to a very good friend of mine on Lit

Bluereign

Sit down, your not all the rave
Put that bottle down
Before you fall in a ladies cave
Tremble inside, I think Not
You want to gong that, with a pop

Picking up that Lolli-Pop, You Scan thinking: "Fucking Wow"
They are cheering for me
What do I do now
I open my fly and Let Roy take a bow

Their mouths hang open to the ground
At the momouth creature before them now
The Porn Directors Pull out thier Cards
Offering him the stars

I am modest gentlmen
I do not want your cards
Stardom brings misery
That is why I will not go far



https://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=240479


Thanks Buddy

 

[ExistentialLuv]

Another for him as his eyes droop
Nodding off to slumber

The sand man calls
Go play with your balls
At the apoplexy
Pull up and choke
Then linger In
A kindom of
Eutopiated mortality


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[ExistentialLuv]

Not even the GB is as cliqued as everyone here is. How sad that you have to be part of this little group here to have any of your poetry even commented on( good or bad)
I have never felt so not welcome in a group, as I do yours.
So I will no longer share with you. Exit, Stage left, to the Kinder General Board.

 

[minsue]

You have a PM, EL.

 

[champagne1982]

There is nothing in your post asking for feedback or critique or even opinion that I can see. I have been bitten far too many times by offering comment on poems offered up in this forum. If you'd like feedback, ask for it in the future, please. There are lots of people who'd gladly set up a conversation with you.

What's wrong with you interacting? No one has said anything for or against you from what I can see, in fact no one has said anything and that's probably for the reasons outlined in my earlier comment.

If this sounds unwelcoming or unfriendly, I'm sorry. I don't really mean to be, but your attitude exasperates me. Send out feelers and tell us a bit about yourself. That simple introduction will likely get you more of a hello in return than posting some personal poems, written for a friend, ever could.

After all of that tirade, and if you're still reading this message, I'd like to say hello.

 

[Liar]

What Carrie said.

This is not the busiest of forums, and not by far the most populated. I had no idea you were looking for feedback on those.
Just stick around and liven things up, I'm sure nobobdy is trying to shut anybody out.

#L

 

[ExistentialLuv]

There is nothing in your post asking for feedback or critique or even opinion that I can see. I have been bitten far too many times by offering comment on poems offered up in this forum. If you'd like feedback, ask for it in the future, please. There are lots of people who'd gladly set up a conversation with you.

What's wrong with you interacting? No one has said anything for or against you from what I can see, in fact no one has said anything and that's probably for the reasons outlined in my earlier comment.

If this sounds unwelcoming or unfriendly, I'm sorry. I don't really mean to be, but your attitude exasperates me. Send out feelers and tell us a bit about yourself. That simple introduction will likely get you more of a hello in return than posting some personal poems, written for a friend, ever could.

After all of that tirade, and if you're still reading this message, I'd like to say hello.

Hello back.

I am in a pissy mood today, and it came out side ways. I was not really talking about this thread. Everyday I pop into the new poems thread, and everyday it seems to be the same people there, Giving eachother recognition. When I post there no one even notices (except Liar). This is why I felt unwelcome and that it is cliqued, not because of feedback on my poems. Guess I worded it wrong. I have been here a few times before and got the same brush off.

I do have submitted poems that ask for comments and votes and they have all been basically ignored. I am looking for constructive critism, not an attack. TY YDD for yours.


As far as feelers go today. I am emotional wreck. An intro to myself will have to wait, for I am way to critical about myself right now.

Thank You minsue, Liar, and champagne1982 for your welcome here

 

[Guest]

EL ~ I read your two poems for Blue and liked them but this thread had the feel of privacy about it so I jusy lurked. It was a misunderstanding on my part. We're really not clique-driven, don't give up on this forum.

 

[ExistentialLuv]

An apology

For my mis-directed temper yesterday
Was having a critical meltdown
Which has been neutrualized
Only to leave
Bloodshot cryed out eyes
Yet from the pain and misery
Flew words of imagry
For The wonderful members
Of Literotica to read
About Suffering

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I meant this thread for all to post some randoms or comment. I should have stated that instead of getting ass hurt over nothing. At times my emotional state runs a little extreme and I express it the wrong way. My apologies to all that took offense to my words or any hurt I may have caused others. That was wrong of me to inflict misery upon all of you in rash, and not thought out words.

 

[minsue]

Poetry is nothing without passion, no?

 

[Linbido]

hey, a word, a hand, a care
clean water and a blanket
gentle words to listen, share
sweet savings from that banquet

where the others laugh and dance
in glitter limelight beaming
living large but with no chance
for quiet sleep and dreaming

so you suffer and you weep
but you don't need that river
only blood can run so deep
and warm the limbs that shiver

hey, an ear to hear you speak
a song for you to follow
for what it's worth, a dryer cheek
a heart that is not hollow

 

[ExistentialLuv]

Ty Linbido. How Beuatiful

Yes minsue. Possibly this little Rant of mine might have stirred some feelings to write a few words.


This is what I was Feeling at the time.



Scary alone Helpless Dreams
Haunt as Shadows
Existing with no Feelings

Schism upon life’s jagged paths
Branch’s rip at your back
Hatred only guides the way

Yearning to hear at the end of the day
Calling of illicit Banshee dreams
Diminished Hard Oak Root optimism

Cruel suffering spills innocent blood
Black Hole Hollowed Dusk
Spirit severed from irreversible pain

Parallel continuance begins again
Pessimistic already about
Reaching the end




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