Some Feedback please?

[percepshun]

Hi,

Just posted my first story and though it's getting some votes, I'm really interested in some feedback. Any thoughts, ideas, criticism would be appreciated.

Thanks

oh, by the way, the story is "the beginning" in the BDSM section.

Thanks again.

P

 

[cymbidia]

You'd probably get more response if you posted this in the Story & Poetry Feedback forum. It's located here: http://www.literotica.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?forumid=1