Slow Cellar Door Winner

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All three finalists are killer poems, aren't they? Congrats to all of you and again to all participants. :)

I am happy to announce that the winner of this challenge is the marvelous

Tristesse

Slow
by Tristesse

In summers’ torrid heat, sinuous and slow,
reaching for uncertain future far below
the mountain cascade feeding gnawing need
is just a distant memory of greed
tranquility conceals the winter race
that tore at banks and washed without a trace
last summers detritus in chaotic chase.

but now at ease and lazy 'neath shading trees
the weeping willow boughs that dip and tease
catching boaters passing by them unawares
and pristine swans with wings that whisper prayers
I have let her hold me in her cool embrace
and teach me to live life at a slower pace
I’ve found her secrets and her hidden face

the summer river dawdles to the sea
reaching at last her constant destiny
a brackish welcome is her final prize
as swirling seagulls greet with raucous cries
she feels once more the parting salmons’ fins
while miles away a mountain spring begins
the race to lowlands no one ever wins

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Cellar Door
by Champagne1982

I looked down into that hole
where dust motes roll
by in the air. That place
where fuel once filled
the ancient black-stained
bin of oak and coal dust
roiled through the space.
The hist'ry's enough
to make you choke
on a Cape Bretoner's grief.
Relief comes with death
when the miner's drawn
his shaky last breath
and the company store
sends his new widow
and orphans
a sympathy card.

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Slow Cellar Door
by Lauren Hynde

To hold your gaze, I drink from the chalice
of dormant tears.

The salt.

That is why I built a shelf in the unknown cellar.
I uncover its silence every time I am there.
It is an empty cellar, with an ebony shelf.
Without furniture, or memories, and, because I leave the doors open
the air goes on in its journey without obstacles.

The shelf is of ebony.

When I go there during the day, I take a suede cloth
and a box of wood polish.

The air goes on in its journey but does not stop by the shelf,
it passes by with a slight whisper. It is what I feel
every time I am standing at the back.
I slowly chew on exotic candy that I unwrap
in a timid silence, not to awake the mosquitoes and wood fretters.

I gaze at the shelf for hours.

And every day when I am there, I take from my pocket, with extreme care,
another bottle. Minuscule.

They are bought on a store in Paris,
at the top of Rue Lepic.
The shop girl has Amelie's eyes,
and even after three months she always recognises me
and folds the meticulous package, without anyone noticing.

I do not spend money on anything else.
I stopped going to cafés or the movies, buying newspapers or fashion magazines.
I only borrow money from friends without explanations.
After three months, I check in and enter a plane,
calmly have lunch and order a coffee
and a port.

The sun.

The shelf in the unknown cellar expands noticeably
and invades every alcove.

The air goes through its journey without obstacles.

Yesterday, I counted thirteen bottles.

It is my domain.

I have no books, no paintings, no posters, no mirrors.

When on that distant Thursday I first saw you
I breathed in so deeply that the corners of my lips felt torn.

My design is to cause suffering, as if it were meaningless
an act.
That happens every time you shrug off your blouse
and it is with immense care that I let the liquid pool
by the corners of your lips.

The shelf is of ebony.
The bottles are white and minuscule.

In sepia, in lime tree.

Rue Lepic leaves me at the top of Montmartre
and I look at Paris through the half-light and the fog.

[Tears run down my face. Sweet, acidic.]

To hold your gaze, I drink from the chalice
of dormant tears.

In truth, my domain consists
of minuscule empty bottles
set along a shelf of ebony
that fills the unknown cellar
and the air that goes on through its journey without obstacles.

The rictus, the door.

The key.
 
Congrats Tristesse! I really enjoyed your slow and quiet movement through this poem.

Lauren, ask me how amazed I was to find myself in your company. This is such a rich and image-dense poem that I knew it had to be authored by you.

As to the other writers in the challenge, I would like to take this opportunity to say how wonderfully you rose in answer.

Wonderful poetry everyone. Thankyou.
 
Thank you, Carrie, but I truly don't think I deserve to win. Both your poem and Laurens are so much better and true to the challenge theme - this is not false modesty.

My congratulations to you both and to all the contestants who took part.
 
three wonderful poems, ladies.

congratulations to all,

and to tristesse especially.

:rose:
 
Well done Tess!

Everyone did very well, the three finalists for sure. Tess this journey
you took us on was lovely, just like those wonderful legs in your AV. :rose:
 
Well...

Well, for what its worth I say the best poem won. Though all three poems are excellent and deserve to be in the final, the winning poem had that little bit extra, that certain indefinable `something`, that just edges it forward into a well deserved first place!

Well done Tristesse! :D
 
Wonderful poems you three poets. Congratulations Tristesse. Great work Carrie and Lauren.

*hugs*
 
Congratulations, Tess! And great work, Carrie. It was an honour to have my poem selected together with yours. :rose::rose:

And thanks to every one who participated, read, and voted. :D
 
Congratulations to you Tess. :) :kiss:

And thats a bushel of beautiful poetry-

kudos to all.

:rose:
 
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