Should I do a 2nd story

[CarnalDavid]

Ok, so this is pretty blatant attention seeking. I've only ever done one story: https://www.literotica.com/s/beautiful-violation
I'm not on the site much, and haven't been in it for years. Was surprised to see how long it is since I wrote that story. Anyhow, am thinking about writing another story. Not sure the genre, but don't think it would be a follow up to my first one.

Would anyone care to offer some constructive advice to ensure thst my next one is an improvement?

 

[NotWise]

Ok, so this is pretty blatant attention seeking. I've only ever done one story: https://www.literotica.com/s/beautiful-violation
I'm not on the site much, and haven't been in it for years. Was surprised to see how long it is since I wrote that story. Anyhow, am thinking about writing another story. Not sure the genre, but don't think it would be a follow up to my first one.

Would anyone care to offer some constructive advice to ensure thst my next one is an improvement?

Time flies, doesn't it?

The comments on your story already provide one suggestion that should be an improvement. Use dialogue to tell the story and build your characters.

You're paragraphs are quite long. You can improve the readability of your next story simply by breaking it into shorter paragraphs.

Readers tend to award higher scores to longer stories. Your existing story is less than a full Lit page, which is short. If you have a longer story in mind, then it may get a higher rating.

As to the question in the thread title. You should write a second story, a third story, or more if you get something out of it. Most of us here write for our own purposes.

 

[SimonDoom]

I read your story and have a few thoughts that I hope are helpful for your next one.

You have the ability to write. Your prose and vocabulary are fine. So you shouldn't hesitate to go forward and write another story if you want to. You definitely have the ability.

I strongly recommend a few changes for your next story, however:

1. Delve more deeply into the characters' motivations. The narrator is a straight married guy, and at the end of a short story of only about 2000 words he says he'll never fuck his wife again. Huh? That's a drastic change, and I think it needs more treatment of the change in his emotions. So for your next story think more about this. I recommend trying to write a story of at least 7000 words or more, with more buildup.

2. The oddest and most off-putting thing about your story is the lack of dialogue. You narrate the dialogue, which I don't understand. Readers will be far more drawn to your story if it has real dialogue mixed up with the narrative. They will feel like your characters are real characters. Don't skimp on this. A story is much more pleasurable and easy to read when it mixes dialogue with narrative.

3. There are some typos and proof reading errors, so make sure you do a thorough proofread of your next story before submitting it.

Good luck with your next story.

 

[CarnalDavid]

Thanks for taking the time to reply, read the story, and for the constructive feedback.

I had read the reviews, and am definitely taking on board the consistency in the feedback related to the importance of narrative.

For contwxt: I think I wrote the story in one sitting, when very horny, so probably was keen to get to the ending. Pun intended! So I'm hoping I can improve on it.

 

[GroverLang]

Would anyone care to offer some constructive advice to ensure thst my next one is an improvement?

My advice is firstly to take heed of what NotWise and SimonDoom have said and secondly write for yourself and hope others like reading it as much as you did writing it.