Short story, hoping for someone to look it over

[Daelienda]

I have a 2.5k word story that should take 5 minutes to read, I was hoping someone could look at it for me, see if it needs anything and if the grammar is OK. It's my first story on here, and I'd really appreciate it! Thanks. It is in BDSM category, but pretty mild stuff imo.

 

[CiaoSteve]

Happy to take a glance if you are still looking. Might ask you to co the same on my latest chapter, also mild BDSM.