Sex Scene Dialogue

[Rumple Foreskin]

Greetings,

Just a few writer-type questions prompted by some of the comments I've recently read on Sirhugs' "Who Do You Wanna Fuck?" thread over on the Story Ideas forum.

Other than the French, can anyone film a sex scene containing dialogue that actually enhances the eroticism? Any good examples? Most of the ones I've seen/heard, whether porn or "legit" either stick to grunting and groaning or go for laughs.

When writing a sex scene, do you ever use dialogue, other than the aforementioned G & G? Any theories on using dialogue to actually make a sex scene more, well, stimulating? Any good examples?

Rummple Foreskin

 

[impressive]

Greetings,

Just a few writer-type questions prompted by some of the comments I've recently read on Sirhugs' "Who Do You Wanna Fuck?" thread over on the Story Ideas forum.

Other than the French, can anyone film a sex scene containing dialogue that actually enhances the eroticism? Any good examples? Most of the ones I've seen/heard, whether porn or "legit" either stick to grunting and groaning or go for laughs.

When writing a sex scene, do you ever use dialogue, other than the aforementioned G & G? Any theories on using dialogue to actually make a sex scene more, well, stimulating? Any good examples?

Rummple Foreskin

I wrote several comprised entirely of dialog -- as if someone was listening just outside the door. No grunting. Some say they're hot, others humorous.

Don't watch film, so can't comment there.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

I wrote several comprised entirely of dialog -- as if someone was listening just outside the door. No grunting. Some say they're hot, others humorous.

Don't watch film, so can't comment there.

Come on, Ye AH Anthology Editor/Publisher Extraordinaire, cough up a couple titles. And do you have any 'How-To" suggestions on the writing?

Rumple Foreskin

 

[impressive]

Come on, Ye AH Anthology Editor/Publisher Extraordinaire, cough up a couple titles. And do you have any 'How-To" suggestions on the writing?

Rumple Foreskin

ROFL.

The titles are: A-Musement, Be-Musing, and Muse-ical Chair
LOTS of fill-in-the-blanks imagination required for those.

Also used dialog heavily in "It's Just Sex" ... that was a fun one, too.

Tips? Read it aloud.

 

[OhMissScarlett]

I absolutely depend upon dialogue during sex scenes to spice things up. There are times when the actual humping can get played out, the mechanics of it. Chemistry between characters is always going to be different, as well as their personalities, so the dialogue between them is key.

In real life, I'm sure everyone's sex talk is a lot more diverse than porn's usual take on it of "Fuck me! Oh! Oh! Oh!"

People say strange shit in bed just like in every other situation in life. IMO, having your characters blurt things out is a great way to illustrate how carried away they are. As long as it's not too disconcerting or something like "Oh, Grandpa!"(Unless it's incest, which is completely appropriate.)

Some people aren't into dirty talk, but I say bring it on, bitch.

 

[rgraham666]

How can you talk when your mouth's full?

Myself, I find my dialog degrading as the scene goes on. My preferred experience means that there is less talking as the protagonists get more excited.

I don't know about you, but when locked together with some lovely lady at the moment of climax, I'm not going to be spouting dialog of Shakespearean quality.

Spouting something else, perhaps, but no words.

 

[OhMissScarlett]

How can you talk when your mouth's full?

Myself, I find my dialog degrading as the scene goes on. My preferred experience means that there is less talking as the protagonists get more excited.

I don't know about you, but when locked together with some lovely lady at the moment of climax, I'm not going to be spouting dialog of Shakespearean quality.

Spouting something else, perhaps, but no words.

some of us never shut up, lol.

 

[impressive]

How can you talk when your mouth's full?

Oh, some of us haven't read Emily Post's rules for oral sex.

 

[rgraham666]

some of us never shut up, lol.

As I said, how are you going to talk with your mouth full?

 

[OhMissScarlett]

As I said, how are you going to talk with your mouth full?

maybe it's the silence my SO enjoys so much about blowjobs.

 

[LadyJeanne]

Last night, or should I say this morning, our building was treated (??) with the sex dialogue of the neighbors next door. It consisted solely of her, "Ugh, ugh, ugh, fuck me baby, ugh, ugh, ugh, ugh, ugh, ugh, fuck me baby, ugh, ugh, ugh..." and finally, "YES! Oh, oh, oh, oh."

Interspersed were the shouts from my downstairs neighbors to "Shut the window! It's 2am!"

 

[Penelope Street]

Sex, to me anyway, being a mechamism by which to communicate my affections, I don't see any reason not to communicate in other ways as well. Thus I like dialogue during sex, but hopefully not to the point where it becomes sex during dialogue.

An example:

I felt a strange sensation begin to build within me, inviting in its promise, alluring in its mystery, alarming in its intensity.

"Stop," I heard myself beg.

Sherry's fingers did not alter their motion. She leaned, then slid off my form to lie beside me, bringing her mouth to my ear. "Let it happen," she whispered. Then she began suckling my lobe.

I closed my eyes. I didn't know what to do, but my body seemed to, and I let it.

Another:

A peaceful smile at once graced Madeline's face. "Warmer. Oh, God, yes; warmer!"

Bryan continued to explore, trying to find the worm-like projection he had read so much about. Before long, his tongue discovered a hard knot instead.

"Yes, yes!" cried Madeline. "Right there! Lick me there!"

Bryan pulled away. "Excuse me?"

Madeline slammed her palms down upon the mattress and cycled a huge breath. "Warmer! Dammit! Warmer, warmer, warmer."

"That's what I thought," Bryan said, returning to his task.

Conversations can make sex more erotic, if it increases the exchange between the characters. That's what sex is really about, isn't it, the exchange?

Take Care,
Penny

 

[Virtual_Burlesque]

The closest I've ever come to employing dialogue DURING sex is:




"Umur-hurrh!" Suzie agreed, Jack's dick already in her mouth. from Suggestible Suzie.

 

[rgraham666]

maybe it's the silence my SO enjoys so much about blowjobs.

That's a distinct possibility.

 

[AppleBiter]

In real life, I'm sure everyone's sex talk is a lot more diverse than porn's usual take on it of "Fuck me! Oh! Oh! Oh!"

It is? Nobody told me!

 

[dr_mabeuse]

I dont quite understand. I think talk during sex is wildly erotic, even if it's no more than a "Yes!" or a "Fuck me!" or "Faster! Harder!" Why wouldn't you want to use it?

Maybe it's my Mediterranean temperament, but I like all that extreme stuff: screaming, moaning, gasping, talking, swearing, name-calling, slapping and biting, the whole ball of wax. I think it's there is just about all my stories.

I suppose it would sound silly out of context, but in the scene the sound of a woman begging for her man to fuck her harder and fill her up, or of a man telling his partner that he's going to lose it in her body is just delicious.

There's nothing worse to my mind than two people going at it with their lips sealed like a couple of Baptists. How bloodless and dull is that?

 

[Sassy Grrl]

I dont quite understand. I think talk during sex is wildly erotic, even if it's no more than a "Yes!" or a "Fuck me!" or "Faster! Harder!" Why wouldn't you want to use it?

Maybe it's my Mediterranean temperament, but I like all that extreme stuff: screaming, moaning, gasping, talking, swearing, name-calling, slapping and biting, the whole ball of wax. I think it's there is just about all my stories.

I suppose it would sound silly out of context, but in the scene the sound of a woman begging for her man to fuck her harder and fill her up, or of a man telling his partner that he's going to lose it in her body is just delicious.

There's nothing worse to my mind than two people going at it with their lips sealed like a couple of Baptists. How bloodless and dull is that?

I think I love you, DrMabeuse.

 

[silverwhisper]

i think penelope demonstrates the point quite ably.

ed

 

[English Lady]

I dont quite understand. I think talk during sex is wildly erotic, even if it's no more than a "Yes!" or a "Fuck me!" or "Faster! Harder!" Why wouldn't you want to use it?

Maybe it's my Mediterranean temperament, but I like all that extreme stuff: screaming, moaning, gasping, talking, swearing, name-calling, slapping and biting, the whole ball of wax. I think it's there is just about all my stories.

I suppose it would sound silly out of context, but in the scene the sound of a woman begging for her man to fuck her harder and fill her up, or of a man telling his partner that he's going to lose it in her body is just delicious.

There's nothing worse to my mind than two people going at it with their lips sealed like a couple of Baptists. How bloodless and dull is that?

I totally agree love!

I think dialogue plays a part in just about all my sexs cenes too, at least a little bit, an odd sentance or two and sometimes alot more than that. Personally I love it, and I kno hubby and I are rarely totally quiet when we fuck, we talk alot *wg*

 

[Lovepotion69]

There's nothing worse to my mind than two people going at it with their lips sealed like a couple of Baptists. How bloodless and dull is that?

Darn, there goes my hopes of trying to get you into bed...





I used to be that sliggtly Baptist person. Apart from the heavy breathing, that is. Then I got braver. I'm afraid I'm not the type to be hanging off chandeliers, screaming loudly, calling names or swearing, but I'll do the rest.

Not much for talking though during sex myself, apart from the occasional stuff, but I usually try to get my characters to talk a bit during the act. Otherwise it seems a bit dull when I read it. But, I guess I don't let them talk too much either as I feel weird writing "Ooooh's" and "Aaaaah's".

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

There's nothing worse to my mind than two people going at it with their lips sealed like a couple of Baptists. How bloodless and dull is that?

Doc, it all depends on what they happen to be sealed around. Trust me.
--

Since I kicked this thread off, I’ve discovered, oh deep chagrin, there's very little dialogue in my sex scenes. It seems I rely almost exclusively on narrative and internal monologue. Only two of my stories had sex scenes with any dialogue. In a Romance, I used it to create a brief change of pace, while the other was in my Earth Day entry and done strictly for humor.

--

from “Loving on the Levee” Romance

“Please, Mike,” was all she could say while reaching down for him. He nodded and let her guide him into position between her long, outstretched legs.

“Lady, I do love the way you lend a helping hand. And I know this is our first time. But I bet if we practice a whole lot, someday I may be able to get there all by myself.”

Debbie laughed. “You idiot. Damn, but I love you so much. Now please, let’s start practicing.”

--

from WC 102: “Outdoor Angie” Humor

Thanks to her remarkable ability to coax men, she soon had everything she wanted. In a way, Angie was like Will Rogers except she never met a sexual position she didn’t like. But this one was special. It generated a wave of warm, tender emotions she felt compelled to share with her lover.

“Oh, fucking yes! It’s just so fan-fucking-tastic, like to the fucking max. I mean, feeling every sweet fucking inch of your big fucking beautiful cock rooting around inside me, it’s just, you know, like so in-fucking-credible.”

Words failed her before she could make any specific comments regarding the exquisite pressure Ernie’s erection was creating inside her body or how being able to look around at all the beauties of nature was adding to her pleasure. But he seemed to understand.

--

Hey, I didn’t say the dialogue in my sex scenes was any good, just rare. I’ll probably continue to use narrative and internal monologue most of the time, but also start trying to slip in a little more, and better, dialogue.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[AppleBiter]

Sometimes, it's hard to add dialogue to a sex scene, in my experience, without it sounding cheezy. I mean, I have plenty of dialogue in my own sexual encounters, but writing dialogue into a story during sex always sounds so corny. Then again, maybe I'm just not being imaginative enough.

 

[cantdog]

Dialogue is essential, but variable. My characters are different from one another. The protag in "Fire Pole" has an inner monologue, because sex is a technical thing, and because he has a goal, to change her mind about this being a one-shot.

Chapter 3 of The Sculptor has two major scenes, both with explicit spoken dialogue and also interior monologue. Just as an example. Dialogue is one of my strengths, though.

Fred

 

[impressive]

Dialogue is one of my strengths, though.

I agree.

 

[OhMissScarlett]

I’ll probably continue to use narrative and internal monologue most of the time, but also start trying to slip in a little more, and better, dialogue.

Rumple Foreskin

Oh yeah, baby, slip it in!