Sentence help!!!

[Dar~]

My friend is a mystery writer, and needs help, this sentence is weird. Can you help us fix it.

Now, the one time it really would have been in her best interest to shy away from a favor, it was the one time she felt she really had no choice but to help.

 

[yui]

My friend is a mystery writer, and needs help, this sentence is weird. Can you help us fix it.

Now, the one time it really would have been in her best interest to shy away from a favor, it was the one time she felt she really had no choice but to help.

The one time it really would have been in her best interest to shy away from a favor was the one time she had no choice but to help.

I hate it when people re-write my stuff, but you asked.

 

[Edward Teach]

I agree with Yui.

those Dook grads know their stuff


Eddie The Editor

 

[Dar~]

That is a good one, but she is wanting it to be more of a choice she can't back down from . .now. I know this is an odd question, thank you for your patience.

 

[cantdog]

The one time it really would have been in her best interest to shy away from a favor was the one time she had no choice but to help.

I hate it when people re-write my stuff, but you asked.

The girl is on the money, as usual. I don't like the whole sentence, but there we are.

So many times she'd been eager to be helpful! This time she knew it was the wrong thing to do, and this time she could not refuse to help. She felt trapped by her own good nature.

 

[Huckleman2000]

My friend is a mystery writer, and needs help, this sentence is weird. Can you help us fix it.

Now, the one time it really would have been in her best interest to shy away from a favor, it was the one time she felt she really had no choice but to help.

minimal edits:
Now, the one time she really should have shied away from a favor, was the one time she felt she really had no choice but to help.

 

[Dar~]

thanks, I think she figured it out, she just left, so I am assuming she did*shrug* y'all's wunderful

 

[Subo97]

I really think there are too many reallys

 

[Dar~]

I felt that way too, too bad this thread is done huh?

 

[Virtual_Burlesque]

I felt that way too, too bad this thread is done huh?

I am beginning to believe that that is my opinion, too.