Seeking feedback on my first submission

[Guest]

I have finally submitted my first story. I say ‘finally’ because it has been a marathon with numerous edits and rewrites over the past year. Submitting it was like letting go of my kids; both seem to be a never ending work in progress. I even was editing it some during the long eight days it took for it to be accepted.

This being my first, I’m looking for constructive feedback. I know it’s long, and it certainly didn’t start that way. As I read the good, bad and the ugly stories posted here, I kept revising it. You can primarily blame or thank—depending on your viewpoint— the writers resources and editors for the length. From this input, I realized the need to go slower and show rather than tell, which of course makes for a longer story. I will wait for the judgment of others as to whether the merits of the story warrant its length.

This is an incest story, so please don’t bother wasting our time with a post that says, “I’m not into incest”—we really don’t care! If you feel this way, I’d be happy to debate why many find the fantasy of consensual adult incest the ultimate turn on, rather than hear your feedback.

For the rest who share my perversion, I would very much appreciate your time and patience in reading the following story and providing feedback.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=75949

Steve

 

[ladynlace]

Well, I'm no literary critic, but thought it flowed well. The images and dialogue really were a real turn on and certainly had me going. It did start out a little slow but then loved the teasing resistance and build up. I tend to prefer the father-daughter fantasy and from how it ended, assume we'll see that in part 2.

Kathy

 

[skyewriter]

Hey! Good story!

I tend to like longer stories, and that story really had a build up to it...I really liked that! Wow...great story, really...the mother/son thing was really good...I also liked the teacher theme about Lisa and the mother...I can't wait for part 2......hope it takes less than a year, I'll be looking for it!

 

[Guest]

Thanks for the positive feedback. I really have been debating about pursuing part two after posting this request and getting no response for two weeks. Was hoping to hear from others here, but maybe just too long. The email feedback has been overwhelmingly positive. But not all, and it's those negatives that tend to stick with you, especially as a first time writer. To give balance and possibly get further feedback I've copied the three negative comments below.

Fuck that "It takes time" bullshit. Maybe if Literotica posted this long stories as one download, I MIGHT have been downloaded it, but I'm not wasting my time, even with broadband, with 10 sections.

You are not John Updike; don't flatter yourself or your abilities.

I'm not sure he actually read it.

too long and too stupid. keep your day job.

And,

You talk to much every one grows up faster then this. Tell it for shit sake!!!!!!!!!!!

I is amazing how rude people are when they are anonymous. Just curious whether others choose to accept or refuse anonymous feedback.

Steve