Seeking Feedback on Ch 1 of "Last Exit" my new LW/BDSM/Slow Burn Series:

[HannahBaird]

Hello! I just finished my first series, "All She Ever Wanted". My new series "Last Exit" is under way. It's set firmly in the LW category, is a slow burn that is dark, grounded, with a narrative where every action yields consequences. As per my usual standard I try to subvert each standard trope where I can, while embracing others.

The story is about a former high school bully named Sophia Cooper, her fall from grace, ending up a bartender at "Last Exit" a divebar in her small hometown. After being married, she meets a man who she formerly, bullied, and the results are both erotic and terrifying.

https://www.literotica.com/s/last-exit-ch-01

As always, I would love and appreciate any feedback! Thank you so much! <3

 

[ChastityPerdu]

Hannah,

Your first series was fantastic. Your writing is unique and engaging. Rather than simple stroke fuel, your story is erotic and thought provoking. Character development is such that we feel what the character feels, and we anticipate eagerly the next development.

I look forward to a lot more from you, to see where you go, not only in your stories and themes, but in your continued growth as a writer. Thanks for what you do!

Chastity

 

[HannahBaird]

Hannah,

Your first series was fantastic. Your writing is unique and engaging. Rather than simple stroke fuel, your story is erotic and thought provoking. Character development is such that we feel what the character feels, and we anticipate eagerly the next development.

I look forward to a lot more from you, to see where you go, not only in your stories and themes, but in your continued growth as a writer. Thanks for what you do!

Chastity

Thank you so soooo much for the kind, and encouraging feedback! I will continue to write and keep trying to stay true to my vision, and embrace growth. :3

 

[Craighalbert]

I think this was a wonderful beginning, with some really great character work. I came to really feel for and care about Sophia, which is probably a bad thing because I suspect she's in for a pretty rough time.

 

[HannahBaird]

I think this was a wonderful beginning, with some really great character work. I came to really feel for and care about Sophia, which is probably a bad thing because I suspect she's in for a pretty rough time.

Thank you so much! <3
Chapter 2 is almost done, and making readers care about my characters, is like my number one goal. I truly hope you enjoy the rest.