Seeking Editor ~ Revisiting Past Submission

[Unsung Muse]

Hello...
I'm looking for an editor to help me revisit my first ever LIT story submission:
"Fissure In The Ice"

I feel/hope I've learned much since writing this piece and now really want to improve on it... finetune & polish it, as (although very 'green') I still feel it "has legs".

A fresh pair of eyes would help so much

 

[Toa_lin]

as always, I'm willing to give it a look over similar to what I did your last one

 

[Unsung Muse]

as always, I'm willing to give it a look over similar to what I did your last one

That would be wonderful, thank you! Please don't go
quite so easy on me this time ...do your worst!!