Seeking Editor for Femdom

[Dearelliot]

I'd add incest, but it's a scene where a mature mid 40s nephew has sex with his older widowed aunt, not a blood relative...so it isn't really incest.
The pain part is where a masochist wants the sweet lady to whip him.
12000 words. Femdom, pain. I'm not so much interested in someone to check my grammar and punctuation.

I want an opinion on how I handled the shifting of time, back and forth, the dialogue, and story tempo.
Someone to read and tell me where it needs work and if can I submit it for publishing.

I am looking for someone who has the time to read it, maybe 15 minutes, and give me their opinion.
Naturally, if any punctuation or grammar errors are obvious, please don't hesitate to tell me.

 

[Kumquatqueen]

PMing you.

 

[Dearelliot]

Thank you for your help I appreciated it...Great!