seeking an audience

[britannicus]

So not sure whether to post here or author s forum. http://www.literotica.com/s/meeting-anita


just wrote a bdsm story a few days back, got it up, but hasn't even had a view yet.

would love to know what you think, Id understand if people hate it, but no one has taken a look yet, com on help me out an d tell me what you think

thanks in advance

B

 

[monoblanco]

You need to get yourself an editor.

You've got some spelling and usage issues going on, 2 in the first paragraph alone...

Example:

Early on, she's commanded to "Turnaround". That's a noun, not a verb. What you need is two words, not one, "Turn around."

Hope it helps.

Otherwise, I did enjoy the story. Kudos.

 

[IrisAlthea]

So not sure whether to post here or author s forum. http://www.literotica.com/s/meeting-anita


just wrote a bdsm story a few days back, got it up, but hasn't even had a view yet.

would love to know what you think, Id understand if people hate it, but no one has taken a look yet, com on help me out an d tell me what you think

thanks in advance

B

I'd suggest the Story Feedback Forum or the Story Discussion Circle.
Help to choose:
http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=643578