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[jon.hayworth]

right this a hijacked thread by hitchhiker
after deep discusion with our jon.hayworth we two porno authors were wondering.


First in realality which do women realy do scream, sigh or moan.

Secondly which do the they prefer to read.

eg/ "Yes Yes fuck me harder pleeeeeeease"

OR


"oh, Jon that was amazing!!"

 

[wildsweetone]

is this allowed? a two-some thread? somebody should report you guys

from my own personal experience (drum roll please) i have to own up to doing all three at one time or another


if you're talking sex dears,
the sigh happens when that oh so perfect spot has been touched softly.
the moan happens when it feels so damn good just moments before he finishes.
the scream happens on those rare occasions when the kids are away for the night.


if you're not talking sex,
the sigh happens when i've slowly licked my 50c McDonalds ice cream and made it last the whole 25 minute drive home.
the moan happens when the kids have been baking in the kitchen and left the mess for me.
the scream happens when i'm at my wits end and have a pillow handy that'll take it.


as for the 'fuck me harder' or 'jon that was amazing'... which do i prefer to read. for me, i can read both with ease. neither grates on my nervendings, though i don't like the words 'cunt' or 'slut' i tend to avoid reading that particular level of porn.

if you're meaning which story ie. 'fuck me' being a jack/jill-off or 'that was amazing' being a romantic viewpoint, then it depends entirely on my reading mood of the moment.

i bet this didn't help you guys one iota. rofl

ps... i don't doubt for a second that jon is amazing



i've discovered i kinda like a little bit of dirty talk.

 

[jon.hayworth]

Wildsweetone,

A prize to you for being the first woman to reply, and a great big thank you for such an entertaining post.

lol
jon

Your prize

ps Iam pretty amazing
luv ya fer sayin' it kind lady

 

[wildsweetone]

you're most welcome dear

*sigh* i am such a pushover for flowers.

 

[Suzi]

Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.....

In my opinion, when one writes a fantasy from the first person, one must consider how they may respond in reality. I for one have done the moan and the sigh starting out....then as things heated up and intensified, got louder and my language uuummm more profane. Meaning in the intense moments of passion, I am usually saying "Oh baby you fuck me sooooo good..." or "oh yes, baby, drive it in me harder...take that pussy, it's yours...aaaaaahhhhhh"...and who can forget "Don't stop....oh god...ooooohhh yeeeeeesssss....aah...aaahhh...AAAAAAAHHHHHH!" ...?

*wicked evil grin*

Suzi

 

[Quint]

Sorry, the soapbox called. I'm so susceptible.

When I am reading erotica, dialogue (and I use the term loosely) that goes, "OOOOOH, yes, FUCK ME HARRRRDER, ARGGGG I'M CUMMMMMING!!!!" turns me off instantly.

1.) Your reader knows what moans and screams sound like (unless they are 10 and sneaking onto their parent's computer late at night, in which case I have absolutely nothing to say). Saying that your character is doing one/the other/both is one thing, perfectly acceptable. Describing in onomatopoeia how exactly they are moaning is quite ridiculous.

2.) Overuse of caps! Way junior-high! Emphasize the important bits by making them important. The reader is an intelligent creature. The reader will find the sexiest part of the sentence and give it mental emphasis. You don't have to do it for them.

I have given this in feedback numerous times. I was answered once by a girl who said that she writes how she'd talk; she writes to turn people on, and comma-usage and above point don't really matter to her. I suppose I'm that rare creature that IS ultimately turned off by total lack of commas. This does it for me a lot faster, though. Any agreement?

Oh, and Jon? I do all three. Screaming is a rarity, especially in the dorms, but it happens occasionally. And aural description is, for me, the most erotic. One of my absolute favorite verbs is "whimper." So many delightful mental pictures.

 

[Suzi]

Uuuuuuuuuuuuummmmmmmmm.....

Quint---All I can say is this: You must be a Virgo. Only Virgo seems to be that critical about something that is really individual...Ok...so YOU may not think it is necessary to put in the sound effects. I have read fantasy/erotica, been drawn into it...and the effects just enhanced it...I feel like I am there. As for commas, onomatapoeia and all that---I thought this was a site for publishing/exhibiting erotica, not English class!

Suzi

 

[Axeltheswede]

Sounds

That soapbox thing can get contageous.

A little language stretching sound illustration can be fun. Like most everything, there is a time and a place. I'm not in favor of using Mmmmmm every time instead of saying a character moaned. But, it can be done in moderation to enhance a hot scene.

 

[Quint]

KillerMuffin has said

You can't control very much of what a reader will do with your story, but you can even the odds by showing that you respect them with the proper mechanics.

Good grammar, good spelling, and good punctuation is nothing more than showing your reader that you respect them enough to make sure the read is as easy as possible. Some people call flaunting the conventional rules in favor of a non-conformists creative drive making works of art. That's a load of horsehockey. You cannot transcend that which you do not know.

If I am reading a story devoid of proper english skills, I will come to the conclusion that the author was writing strictly for his/herself, not for the reader. I, as the neglected reader, will rate that story very low.

We are authors. I give that term weight out of reverence for those who have borne the title well. I would not give that title to anyone who can put a sentence together, as you wouldn't call a child playing with Legos an engineer. I take myself terribly seriously, and therefore everything I do is of equal importance to me. It bothers me when people care so little about the products of their hands that they don't care to make it as good as possible. How difficult is it to a.) read carefully and catch as many basic mistakes as you can, and/or b.) send the product to people who will do the same? Hey, I'm doing it right now. Must not be too hard.

Whose opinion am I to offer, if not my personal, individual one? I rate stories based on my opinion of them. I write my own the same way. I don't consider "Hmm, what was the consensus on that one thread?" That's why stories get mixed ratings; these things are not nearly as offensive to everyone as they are to me. Likewise, excellently-crafted, plot-driven stories with minimal sex will get top ratings from me but lower ones from others.

I concede that sparse usage of "sound effects," such as what Axel described, aren't always offensive and are occasionally sexy. That's also taken on an individual basis. Incidentally, I'm a Cancer, as non-perfectionistic and non-technical as they come.

 

[Guest]

Women actually scream?

Drat I have never heard that yet.

My wife just lies there and enjoys herself. All I get out of her is some moans during the last few seconds when she cums and then insists she can't take anymore.

As for the manner of text. I have noticed that no one is the same.
I try to write the way I would say it, if I was to say it to you in person.

It's about all a person can ask of you.

If your text sounds like you, and you routinely turn your target audience on, then odds are your style is ok.

 

[Hitchhiker]

back on track

Hang on wait a tick, this is not English usage thread.

Please read the quesion and then create an answer.

Even so I do agree with the points raised by quint, most elequint .

To write a story and submit without editing is; yes, an insult to the reader. To work hard correcting and trying to get the ,,,,....(())!!;;;:::~----__ and all in the right order and the right place , is for me the most difficult. Writing a decriptive and highly visual story is easier.

I enjoy finding the words and phrases in that large viod between my ears; And with more practise, I dare say I will be able to awaken, my dormant genius genes from my long dead extremely famouse ancestor. The poet Byron.

Today I live only a few miles from Six Mile Bottom, where his half sister Augusta lived. But we shall not awaken that monster yet shall we? Remember what friend Mary Shelley did with her monster.

Quint try this then "Oh, oh," she whimpered so solemley. The pleasure of the moment wended its way through her , under and over pink flushed, flesh.

 

[Suzi]

Ah! the TACTFUL voice of reason!

P...

Thank you for at least agreeing with that very small snide comment I made about the English usage....thing. As for editing...I DO edit. I freely admit I have an obsesson with using
.......in my works. Those periods can make everything look like a run-on sentence. I apologize, Quint, for misspelling ONOMATOPOEIA (not even sure if I spelled it correctly THIS time!)

I use to take myself VERY seriously...now I just take myself somewhat seriously, as a mother and head of household. In the area of relationships, I take myself too seriously. As a writer/authoress, I go with the flow. I write what comes to mind, then edit afterward. I am negligent about the length of my paragraphs---they are TOO long.

As for my error in Quint's sunsign...you may not be a Virgo, but you are a feminine duality. No clue what I mean? Look it up! This is not an astrology thread!

Suzi

 

[wildsweetone]

yes, but...

they want to know

DO YOU SCREAM, SIGH OR MOAN?

not how to flipping well spell it.
*down wild*

 

[cherrylips_au]

Hitchhiker and Jon,
good questions as a women I do all, scream, sigh and moan.
I think it depends on the state of arousal to which is used and I have to agree with Wildsweetone as screaming when the kids aren't around or hopefully in a deep sleep.

As to which I prefer to read, both are fine as long as they flow in the story. I'm personally not in to lots of dialogue in a sex scence as I don't think that reflects reality for me.

Hope that helped a little.

 

[DVS]

Well, as for me

I don't usually scream, but I sometimes moan and sometimes sigh. I also have been heard to gasp, when touched in the right places, but that wasn't one of the options. But a woman with me can be heard screaming, moaning, sighing, whimpering, and even gasping!

...waiting for the laughter to die down...

As for a perference with wording in a story, I don't mind any style as long as it is done tastefully. I can take pretty base talk because I have experienced it in real life. You live in the gutter, you tend to speak gutter.

I actually have seen a story posted on this site with nearly all punctuation lacking. Periods were there, but not much else. Talk about run-on sentences! I feel that is much worse than mentioning "oh, baby" and "oh, yes, harder...harder" or even "Gwad, do me now, I beg you. Give it to me good. PLEASE, FUCK ME!!

Isn't the first rule of writing to get the attention of your audience? And, isn't the second rule to KEEP their attention?

Like someone else has already said...if you have an audience you write for, and you tend to turn them on with your writing style, then right or wrong, everything is probably OK.

 

[Route66Girl]

I have never screamed. I've moaned, groaned, whimpered, squeaked, gasped, and even cried out. But as for letting out a true scream... nope! I don't know why. I make my fair share of noise, but have never felt the urge to scream.

And which do I prefer to read? Well, it depends on the content of the story. If you're going for intimacy, "Jon, that was amazing" would fit the mood. If you're going for lust-driven rutting, "Fuck me harder!" is going to work much better.

 

[jon.hayworth]

Ladies,

What can I say, except thank you for revealing your bedroom secrets.

You all deserve a bunch of

I hope your messages will improve the quality of my writing. Thank you everyone who has contributed and anyone else who does contribute.

Love you all.

jon

 

[Hitchhiker]

what do we prefer?

Sod starting a new one I'm lazy any way

What do us guys prefer our ladies to do at the point of fulfilment?

Personnaly I prefer long drawn whimpers and moans, with a huge convulsive shudder at the end. Helps get things in just that little deeper

As for screaming well it does exercise her lungs.

But joking apart , keep the comments coming they most helpful.

In the porn industry I have noticed that the main dialogue is "Yes, yes oh yes oh yes, yes fuck me harder" and dont' forget the crap music

any one got an avatar I could steal? cant get one bloddy small enough, from my PC

 

[DVS]

try

Try this.

Take your pics into an image editor and make sure the resolution is no more than 72 ppi. And, try to keep the image around 150 pix wide and around 150 pix on the height. Anything within this ballpark should work.
If you don't have an image editor to suffice, email me the pic, and I will see what I can do. Of course, all of this is up to you.

I am still a posting virgin and can't yet have an avatar!

 

[jon.hayworth]

Hitchhiker

Congratulations on the AV. But read the question on his thread - You should have gone to the How To Forum

jon

 

[Suzi]

Hehehehehheheh

Make me scream

Make me bleed

Kinky sex

Is all I need!


Suzi