Schoolgirl rain neighbour

[Sarahxx69]

How about this.. Schoolgirl, White blouse, bra, black skirt(short) socks shoes and a bag.. Left for school on a sunny day.., but a storm brews.. On the way home there's a thunder storm, she gets soaked through!!! Nipples on show, the works!!! Gets home,, shit no keys' and mom ain't home for hours!!! Will have to chap the door of the creep next door... Maybe he ll let me dry off and wait, maybe shower or feed me?? ......xx

 

[RawHumor]

That could be fun... maybe he'd make her stay there in the rain while he talked with her, enjoying the view of her tits showing through her wet blouse and of her shivering, getting more and more desperate to get in out of the rain before he relents and lets her in.

Or maybe he negotiates with her before he lets her in, and that's why it takes so long.

"You can come in, sweetie, but I don't want you making a wet trail all through my living room. I'll go fetch you a towel, but you've got to get out of those soaking wet clothes..." as she is just inside his front door.

 

[madelinegirl]

How about this.. Schoolgirl, White blouse, bra, black skirt(short) socks shoes and a bag.. Left for school on a sunny day.., but a storm brews.. On the way home there's a thunder storm, she gets soaked through!!! Nipples on show, the works!!! Gets home,, shit no keys' and mom ain't home for hours!!! Will have to chap the door of the creep next door... Maybe he ll let me dry off and wait, maybe shower or feed me?? ......xx

I LOVE this idea it is awesome! Maybe the old guy could kind of already have a thing for her (which is where she got the idea to come over). I think she should stay in her soaked clothes for a while, that's an awesome part of the story!

 

[stuffedbear]

omg love this idea. really gets the thought juices flowing.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Challenge Complete!

 

[deniebrown]

Sean, do you mean you wrote it?

 

[Sean Renaud]

Yes. I'm having some difficulty editting and I really wanted to pull a sequel out of it but that doesn't seem to be happening. However the story is as they say signed, sealed and ready for delivery.

 

[deniebrown]

Cool. I might be able to help with editing maybe.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Chapter 2 is slowly slogging forward and is roughly half finished. I could probably get away with it roughly as is if I wasn't in the Survivor Contest so my choices are get it up to 3k words or change around enough of the details that it's not considered a sequel anymore.

 

[itscalledhazing]

i think the idea has something to it, i usually take some time writing my stories so my version of this one will probably be up in a month or so. The creepy, perving neighbour is always a good 'hero' for a story. now the only thing is to decide whether you use gabby or create a new female lead

 

[DarkPleasures]

I'm not sure why it is, but this snippet of an idea intrigues me. I keep coming back to this thread, peeking to see what's new here and if the OP comes back to add more, and read it over and over again. I do think I will have to try my hand at it, too.

 

[Sean Renaud]

I'm normally the first person to berate posters for not giving enough information but I think we got exactly what we needed. The only way I would post much more than what I have is if I needed help with a potential third chapter. But other than coming up a bit shy word wise and wishing I had some idea what comic characters the OP likes I've got plenty.

 

[karamorfun2]

I'm normally the first person to berate posters for not giving enough information but I think we got exactly what we needed. The only way I would post much more than what I have is if I needed help with a potential third chapter. But other than coming up a bit shy word wise and wishing I had some idea what comic characters the OP likes I've got plenty.

I find the idea of the young wet girl ok..but what is she like? a tease? experimental? open to any and ALL things?

 

[Sean Renaud]

Kind of all of the above. Unless you're volunteering to edit you get to wait just like everybody else while I slog through it and I admit I suck at editting and oftten eventually throw my hands up and say I don't care.

 

[Sarahxx69]

Oh my god! You have wrote this!! Please let me read! X

 

[VioletKitten]

I find the idea of the young wet girl ok..but what is she like? a tease? experimental? open to any and ALL things?

I think she should be reluctant but curious.

 

[cf23430]

I think she should be reluctant but curious.

Yes indeed!

 

[Sean Renaud]

Well thus far she isn't, she's fairly slutty.

 

[Sean Renaud]

School Girl Rayne Is officially up, don't forget to leave your comments and ratings!

 

[TheLordWinter]

Great story idea and great work by the author!

 

[Sean Renaud]

Chapter 2 is up.

Three aught to be up by the od the week but the plot kinda starts wandering a bit by that point.

 

[Tmmldr]

Chapter 2 is up.

Three aught to be up by the od the week but the plot kinda starts wandering a bit by that point.

Seriously. I had an accident, rear ended a car once in a torrential downpower and wound up talking in heavy rain with this hot chic in a white blouse. She was drenched, her tits shined right through and her nipples were clearly visible.

It was cold, and we were both nearly shivering. She was angry, and that made it even hotter.

Worth writing up. Sort of an 'unintentional total slutty'....

 

[Sean Renaud]

Not sure why you quoted me for that but that's interesting. If I do anything farther than the written 4 chapters I might do that. I actually need a 5 chapter just so the story has a proper end.

 

[sirhugs]

Chapter 2 is up.

Three aught to be up by the od the week but the plot kinda starts wandering a bit by that point.

plot? there's a PLOT?? what next???? SEX!?

 

[Sean Renaud]

Okay, plot might be a bit of an exaggeration. Character motivations?