Response to feedback

[Latinababe]

This is for the one who sent me feedback and you know who u are. I know how to speak english and I am not a immigrant I was born and raised here in the united states and if u have something rude to say keep it to yourself cause personally I don't need to read what you wrote.

To everyone else thank you very much for the nice emails and support u all have giving me. huggsss and kisses to you all!!!

 

[71bruce8]

latinababe

Sorry about the rude reply, I'm sure it is not the rule here. How be you post you stoy here or give us writer/title/section and see if you can pick up some constructive response? Thanks.

 

[Debbie]

Here is a link to latinababe's member page

http://literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=74137

Excerpt from First Orgasm by Latinababe


"I looked around his house. He took his coat off and he grabs me and pulled me closer. He looked deep in my eyes and said "Are u ready for me" as I tried to speak he came down and kissed me hard. Ok I was almost on the floor with his kiss. I was feeling all shaky and so weak at his kiss. I could feel him lifting my shirt off my hands reaching up in the air. He slipped it off. I then began to help him out of his shirt. As he undone my bra. My nipples were fully erect. His hand started to caress them as he kissed me. He then picked me up and led me to the bedroom. He put me down and started to take his jeans off. I slipped out of my skirt. He said, "Wait" I want to take your panties off. I looked at him and said; "Ok" I saw his hard cock come out of his jeans. I started getting excited. I started breath heavier."


I liked this story but was distracted by a few things. Speech being separated makes it easier to read and follow the story.
Also some of the grammer let the story down a little. All things that are easily learnt and put into practise. Something that has helped me improve my writing a lot.

eg, I looked around his house, he took his coat off. Grabbing me and pulling me closer to him. He looked deep in my eyes and said,
"Are you ready for me?"
As I tried to speak he covered my mouth with his lips and kissed me hard.


another eg,
"Wait," He said. "I want to take your panties off."

"Ok."I looked at him and said.

As he took his hard cock out of his jeans, I become very excited; my breathing heavier, more rapid and slightly breathless.



Hope this helps.

 

[CND]

Thoughts about your stories

I'll first begin with saying welcome Latinababe.

We all get strange feedback from time to time, and I "think" that women get more than men. My suggestion is that you think little of them. If someone writes you a feedback which has a negative tone yet provides no creative critism, then just ignore them.

I've read some of your stories and I have enjoyed them. They show that you have a creative mind and a naughty imagination, both qualities which works well at Literotica. I enjoy how you describe the emotions, thoughts and actions of "you" (the woman) but at the same time the men become a bit plain and almost without feelings.

In the story First Orgasm the story ends with oralsex where the man appears to be totally untouched by the fact that he had released himself down her throat. No shivers in his legs? No calling out her name? No crack in his well polished facade?

The story takes place in many different locations, and something that made me wonder is: what happened while they drove to his place? For some reason I got the impression that it had to be some distance, a time spent in silence?

I liked the story even if I would have enjoyed to see her interacting with a more living person, and I'm looking forward to reading more of your stories as you continue posting them.

We all learn something new everyday, so don't let a my thoughts put you down, instead prove me wrong in your next story.

 

[Dewy Pointe]

Hi Latinababe,

That old line about 'sticks and stones' isn't true. Words hurt. The flaming feedback is an unpleasant but, unfortunately, unavoidable bump on the writing path. Sure, it's easy to say 'that's what the delete button is for,' but that doesn't make recipients feel a lot better. If the story is sexy and interesting then grammar and spelling errors don't stop me from reading! There are no perfect grammarians. (Okay, I made that up but it sounds true.) Generally speaking, I don't think there are many editors proofing stories before posting. So keep writing, practicing and learning! The learning is never done.

Dewy