Rape fantasy

[n43210]

DXFVDG

 

[n43210]

so does every1 think the story is a lil wierd?

 

[handlebars69]

I'd read it if it was put together better

 

[n43210]

i think its an exciting read. and i agree someone that can write should write it up. my .02 cents. hope someone else can chime in.

 

[n43210]

100 views and only 1 person has chimned in. Does anyone think its at all exciting or interesting?

 

[Breath of Air]

I think people are reluctant to read that. I personally don't. It's unfriendly. Take it apart some, make smaller paragraphs.

 

[snooper]

How to ...

... make this into a story; take the text you have.

Make each sentence (you know, the letters before the little dot thingie) into a separate paragraph with plenty of space between them.

Write each sentence up into small section (they should average about 100 words) describing the content of the sentence in more detail. IF a section turns out to be longer that is fine.

Add a lead-in describing the narrator.

Turn the whole thing into past tense and "fly on the wall" third party POV.

BINGO!