Quick question on punc.

[geronimo_appleby]

i'm having a brain fart regarding quotation within direct speech.

i've looked at the myriad suggestion on the interwebz, but am still baffled.

where do i place the quotation marks in the following?

“If that isn’t an affair, what is, huh? Would you be cool if you watched some guy fucking my breasts? Would you say, ‘Oh yeah, no problem, dude. Come on my wife’s tits.’? No, you fucking well wouldn’t be happy at all, would you?”

the area in red is where i'm struggling.

HELP!

 

[DesEsseintes]

i'm having a brain fart regarding quotation within direct speech.

i've looked at the myriad suggestion on the interwebz, but am still baffled.

where do i place the quotation marks in the following?

“If that isn’t an affair, what is, huh? Would you be cool if you watched some guy fucking my breasts? Would you say, ‘Oh yeah, no problem, dude. Come on my wife’s tits.’? No, you fucking well wouldn’t be happy at all, would you?”

the area in red is where i'm struggling.

HELP!

Punctuation relating directly to the speech remains within the speechmarks, so what you have there is technically correct (though I might have used an exclamation mark, but that is stylistic, not accuracy), since the question begins outside the internal speechmarks and must therefore end outside them. I agree, though, that it looks clumsy. Since the whole passage is spoken, why not have the imaginary dialogue as reported rather than direct speech? Just a thought.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

Punctuation relating directly to the speech remains within the speechmarks, so what you have there is technically correct (though I might have used an exclamation mark, but that is stylistic, not accuracy), since the question begins outside the internal speechmarks and must therefore end outside them. I agree, though, that it looks clumsy. Since the whole passage is spoken, why not have the imaginary dialogue as reported rather than direct speech? Just a thought.

i'll give that a whirl. thanks.

 

[Hypoxia]

“If that isn’t an affair, what is, huh? Would you be cool if you watched some guy fucking my breasts? Would you say, ‘Oh yeah, no problem, dude. Come on my wife’s tits.’? No, you fucking well wouldn’t be happy at all, would you?”

Yup, speech within speech is an orthographic problem that can be approached various ways. Your text is *correct* but less that easy to read. I might change the font style:

“If that isn’t an affair, what is, huh? Would you be cool if you watched some guy fucking my breasts? Would you say, ‘Oh yeah, no problem, dude. Come on my wife’s tits.’? No, you fucking well wouldn’t be happy at all, would you?”​

 

[NOIRTRASH]

i'm having a brain fart regarding quotation within direct speech.

i've looked at the myriad suggestion on the interwebz, but am still baffled.

where do i place the quotation marks in the following?

“If that isn’t an affair, what is, huh? Would you be cool if you watched some guy fucking my breasts? Would you say, ‘Oh yeah, no problem, dude. Come on my wife’s tits.’? No, you fucking well wouldn’t be happy at all, would you?”

the area in red is where i'm struggling.

HELP!

I'd see how George V. Higgins handled such quotes. Higgins was the master of dialog.

 

[NOIRTRASH]

“ ‘Johnny’ around here,” Amato said, “you can call me ‘Johnny’ here."

Higgins, George V. (2011-11-01). Cogan's Trade (Vintage Crime/Black Lizard) (p. 3). Knopf Doubleday Publishing Group. Kindle Edition.

 

[sr71plt]

“ ‘Johnny’ around here,” Amato said, “you can call me ‘Johnny’ here."

Higgins, George V. (2011-11-01). Cogan's Trade (Vintage Crime/Black Lizard) (p. 3). Knopf Doubleday Publishing Group. Kindle Edition.

Which doesn't respond to the question that was asked. You don't have to live through the exampled writings of others (after they were edited by someone else), as you do. You can learn grammar yourself, just like George Higgins' editor did.

 

[NOIRTRASH]

Which doesn't respond to the question that was asked. You don't have to live through the exampled writings of others (after they were edited by someone else), as you do. You can learn grammar yourself, just like George Higgins' editor did.

I love how it pisses you off when I'm right.

 

[sr71plt]

I love how it pisses you off when I'm right.

Right about what? That you live through other writers/editors (since it's just as likely that the punctuation of Higgins' books comes from an editor, not him)--that you aren't confident enough in your writing to stand on your own? Certainly not that what you posted was relevant to the question that was asked--because it wasn't.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

aw, FFS. i've got it covered now, thanks.

...but if youz want to carry on throwing shit...

fill your boots.

 

[NOIRTRASH]

aw, FFS. i've got it covered now, thanks.

...but if youz want to carry on throwing shit...

fill your boots.

STFU cunt faggot

 

[NOIRTRASH]

Right about what? That you live through other writers/editors (since it's just as likely that the punctuation of Higgins' books comes from an editor, not him)--that you aren't confident enough in your writing to stand on your own? Certainly not that what you posted was relevant to the question that was asked--because it wasn't.

Youre struggling for justification to be pissed.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

STFU cunt faggot

now-now, JBJ... that's not nice.

 

[sr71plt]

Youre struggling for justification to be pissed.

Yeah, as I sit on my suite balcony overlooking the water between the cruise boat and the Greek isle of Santorini and sip my wine while thinking of you in your trailer in the Tampa red-neck slums, I'll admit I'd really have to struggle for justification to feel pissed about anything connected with you.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

Yeah, as I sit on my suite balcony overlooking the water between the cruise boat and the Greek isle of Santorini and sip my wine while thinking of you in your trailer in the Tampa red-neck slums, I'll admit I'd really have to struggle for justification to feel pissed about anything connected with you.

pop into the Tango Bar and say hello from me.

 

[sr71plt]

pop into the Tango Bar and say hello from me.

I took one look at the line for the cable car and stayed on board to write my story about the "Men of Mykonos."

 

[NOIRTRASH]

Yeah, as I sit on my suite balcony overlooking the water between the cruise boat and the Greek isle of Santorini and sip my wine while thinking of you in your trailer in the Tampa red-neck slums, I'll admit I'd really have to struggle for justification to feel pissed about anything connected with you.

Greece? hahahahahahaha How appropriate!

 

[TxRad]

Youre struggling for justification to be pissed.

Sorry JBJ but you're the pissed one. What you posted for an example has nothing to do with GA's question and you were called on it.

People, please quit feeding this troll. He's way over weight, grumpy, and keeps forgetting what the problems are.

 

[NOIRTRASH]

Sorry JBJ but you're the pissed one. What you posted for an example has nothing to do with GA's question and you were called on it.

People, please quit feeding this troll. He's way over weight, grumpy, and keeps forgetting what the problems are.

Put me back on iggy whineosoreass-tex

 

[TxRad]

Put me back on iggy whineosoreass-tex

I've never had you on ignore. You say too many stupid and or wrong things to just let you roam free without supervision.

 

[Athalia]

i'm having a brain fart regarding quotation within direct speech.

i've looked at the myriad suggestion on the interwebz, but am still baffled.

where do i place the quotation marks in the following?

“If that isn’t an affair, what is, huh? Would you be cool if you watched some guy fucking my breasts? Would you say, ‘Oh yeah, no problem, dude. Come on my wife’s tits.’? No, you fucking well wouldn’t be happy at all, would you?”

the area in red is where i'm struggling.

HELP!

To return this thread to some civil level of discourse, may I suggest that you simply recast the paragraph slightly:

“If that isn’t an affair, what is, huh? Would you be cool if you watched some guy fucking my breasts? ‘Oh yeah, no problem, dude. Come on my wife’s tits!" Is that what you're saying? No, you fucking well wouldn’t be happy at all, would you?”

At least, it avoids the confusion about what is a question and what isn't.

 

[sr71plt]

Put me back on iggy whineosoreass-tex

But . . . but, you went to such pains to change account names several times so that those who had you on ignore had to keep pushing the ignore button on you.

 

[sr71plt]

To return this thread to some civil level of discourse, may I suggest that you simply recast the paragraph slightly:

“If that isn’t an affair, what is, huh? Would you be cool if you watched some guy fucking my breasts? ‘Oh yeah, no problem, dude. Come on my wife’s tits!" Is that what you're saying? No, you fucking well wouldn’t be happy at all, would you?”

At least, it avoids the confusion about what is a question and what isn't.

I think the paragraph is far better the way he wrote it. It's no big deal to get it punctuated correctly.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

To return this thread to some civil level of discourse, may I suggest that you simply recast the paragraph slightly:

“If that isn’t an affair, what is, huh? Would you be cool if you watched some guy fucking my breasts? ‘Oh yeah, no problem, dude. Come on my wife’s tits!" Is that what you're saying? No, you fucking well wouldn’t be happy at all, would you?”

At least, it avoids the confusion about what is a question and what isn't.

nice job. thanks.

 

[NOIRTRASH]

I've never had you on ignore. You say too many stupid and or wrong things to just let you roam free without supervision.

Youre more of a mother than a daddy.