Question about the word 'Sag'

[Trionyx]

I had an interesting comment about my use of the word 'sag.' The one time it was used in the story was describing the breasts on a widow who had had two children and was in her thirties. The statement read: He saw two beautiful breasts, full with a slight sag.

The comment read: Sweet story. Lose the word "sag". It is rude and insulting.

My questions are whether the word is considered 'rude and insulting' by anyone else? I wanted to convey she's not a young woman with firm breasts but has a bit of maturity brought about by childbirth and age. If not sag, what other words might be appropriate? Droop?

 

[SimonDoom]

I think it's descriptive rather than rude or insulting. The fact is that breasts DO tend to sag over the years.

But readers of erotic stories often react this way, and it's just part of the deal. Don't overthink it. I've had readers react to verbs and adjectives I've used in exactly the same way. There's no point in trying to make everyone happy with your word choices. Stick to your own aesthetic sensibility. Write for yourself. If you do that, you're most likely to attract the maximum number of happy readers even though some won't like it.

 

[NotWise]

I've been known to describe such breasts as teardrops, or shaped like a teardrop.

 

[Voboy]

I've lost count of the number of times that my stories trigger diametrically opposed comments.

Comment 1: "I tried to get into this, because I like your other work, but it seemed far too cold and mechanistic. The main character, in particular, was extremely unlikeable."
Comment 2: "It's so rare to see a story so well-written and so fully-realized, with a main character that reads like a real person. Kudos! I cried!"

Along those lines. Same story.

You're simply not going to please everyone. Sag happens. It's a noun. It's not insulting.

 

[Smuttyandfun]

I don't think there's anything wrong with using the word sag. And I don't think it's insulting. Another way to go might have been: They were still fairly perky, considering she'd had two children. Although, I too, would probably have used sag. It's a perfect way to describe breasts that a little more mature. It's not like you said they were hanging down to her knees!

 

[Voboy]

I might use a word like "voluptuous" and NOT use a word like "firm." But I often avoid being too descriptive. If you make it clear that she's older, and a mom, the reader will usually draw the right conclusion I bet.

 

[Kumquatqueen]

I wouldn't go as far as rude or insulting, but it's not an attractive way to put it. Worn-out chairs sag. Tired people who aren't interested in sex sag.

No longer fully inflated, maybe? Past the total tautness of youth? Had the softer, squishier texture that comes with middle age?

 

[TheRedChamber]

'Sag' is a fact of life, but probably not a word you'd want to use to describe someone's breast to their face. It's okay in a story, but given the the sag is only slight and the overall point is their beautiful, I'd probably just lose the 'sag'

 

[XerXesXu]

I had an interesting comment about my use of the word 'sag.' The one time it was used in the story was describing the breasts on a widow who had had two children and was in her thirties. The statement read: He saw two beautiful breasts, full with a slight sag.

The comment read: Sweet story. Lose the word "sag". It is rude and insulting.

My questions are whether the word is considered 'rude and insulting' by anyone else? I wanted to convey she's not a young woman with firm breasts but has a bit of maturity brought about by childbirth and age. If not sag, what other words might be appropriate? Droop?

They don't sag, they become more attractive, even to gravity.

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Sweet story. Lose the word "sag". It is rude and insulting.

Someone's just being twatty. Don't worry about it.

 

[TxRad]

They don't sag, they become more attractive, even to gravity.

The thought gravitational attracted crossed my mind.

 

[Lifestyle66]

Try posting a story to the Loving Wives category about an "extra-marital fun, sharing" couple (as described in the category definition and see what you get from comments!

Readers are who they are. Enjoy.

 

[KeithD]

The comment read: Sweet story. Lose the word "sag". It is rude and insulting.

Screw them.

Some folks, no matter their physical age, aren't mature enough to be reading on an erotica story site.

 

[SamScribble]

Screw them.

Some folks, no matter their physical age, aren't mature enough to be reading on an erotica story site.

Sometimes, Keith, I wonder if it should be a requirement that would-be readers bring a note from their parents. But I don't suppose that would work either, would it?

 

[Smuttyandfun]

The parents are probably getting off on reading the same stuff. So no, I don't think it would work.

 

[DouglasFinney]

I don’t think that sag is a particularly mellifluous word, but it’s certainly not pejorative.

 

[stickygirl]

At least you didn't mention she was tucking them into her belt - that never goes down well. Maybe something like 'He saw her breasts, rich with life' . Breasts often come in two's so there may be no point mentioning it unless it's sci-fi.

 

[Zeb_Carter]

I've used the word sag a lot, never got a comment like that.

 

[KeithD]

At least you didn't mention she was tucking them into her belt - that never goes down well. Maybe something like 'He saw her breasts, rich with life' . Breasts often come in two's so there may be no point mentioning it unless it's sci-fi.

Maybe something like what was originally written and a reader who wants to quibble over it should go read a kindergarten book (except in Florida, where they are being banned).

 

[J0line]

"Sag..." It's a harbor and eponymous town in Maine.

 

[stickygirl]

"Sag..." It's a harbor and eponymous town in Maine.

Also an Indian vegetable dish, though there may be a 'h' in there somewhere.

 

[J0line]

Also an Indian vegetable dish, though there may be a 'h' in there somewhere.

Oh, there is a Hare Krishna restaurant just off campus. Delicious, but I'll pass on the free haircuts.

 

[Voboy]

Also an Indian vegetable dish, though there may be a 'h' in there somewhere.

...no, "shag" means something quite different.

 

[Kumquatqueen]

Sag or saag, usually. Means spinach.

Sag aloo is with potatoes, saag paneer is with cheese. Mm, may make Indian tomorrow.

 

[Handley_Page]

I had an interesting comment about my use of the word 'sag.' The one time it was used in the story was describing the breasts on a widow who had had two children and was in her thirties. The statement read: He saw two beautiful breasts, full with a slight sag.

The comment read: Sweet story. Lose the word "sag". It is rude and insulting.

No it ain't; you got it right, IMO