Hello Everyone!
I just spent a lot of time over the last eight weeks, tearing down and re-reworking the opening chapters of my first novel, that I began writing a little over thirteen years ago.
The three huge books have already been posted elsewhere, and have been enjoyed by readers for more than a few years. But the first book of the trilogy has always bothered me. The recent pandemic has suddenly given me my first real break in thirty-one years! To keep myself busy, I have finally decided to try and fix the first novel, and make it feel more like the two follow up books.
I'm looking for a few pre-readers to look over the latest PDF of the proposed new opening chapter for the Literotica Novel section. Basically it contains the main character's introduction, the first supporting members of the cast taking the stage, and the first sex scene.
By necessity, it is NOT a quick read, a barn burner, or a stroker.
As novels go, all three books eventually contain just about every sort of sex allowable to be posted here. From mild to wild. Fetish to Farce. From masturbation, threesomes, to group sex. With every combination of partners possible.
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Specifically, the PDF will be about 14 Literotica pages long.
It contains: Heterosexual Sex, Lesbianism, Voyeurism, Exhibitionism, Public Lewd Dancing, First Time Sexual Discoveries, Verbal Control and Submission, Sex at Work, and the Public Risk of Discovery.
Mainly it is MF, Mf, MFf, FMf, Fmf, FFMf, FF, Ff, with a little Bi and MM done as a remembered flashback.
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It's written in a world-building kind of style, with very intense plot twists, and fully realized characters growing and learning from their mistakes. There are no true heroes, and no true villains. Lots of ordinary and extraordinary people, just struggling to get on with their lives, and heal from old and fresh wounds.
Some, more literally than others.
The basic original novel was told in twenty long and short chapters, and clocked in at about 250,000 words.
Now I am planning on adding back in all the missing characters, and their important plot lines, that were intended to make the first book feel like the other two novels.
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All I expect from anyone getting the PDF is to read it, think about it, and send me a few words about what they thought about it. No editing is needed at this point. If you do see some consistent mistakes, that distracted you from your enjoyment, I would like to hear about those in general.
My next four chapters have already been written, and delve into much more serious submission, blindfolds, handcuffs, public sex, betrayal, and all of the consequences those sorts of things cause when they get way out of control.
I think that it is very important for anyone planning on reading the PDF to know this:
The main focus of all of the novels is, what do you do when everything has already gone so wrong? How do you pick up the pieces of your life, move on, and build up the courage to try again with someone new?
The sex that happens is always based on purely what each of the characters are into, at the moment, and where you happen to find them along their journey.
The Main, Supporting, and Minor characters all take turns moving the plot along. No one is on stage by accident, though it might take you some time to find out why.
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If you would like to read the PDF, and have time to read fourteen Lit pages over the next week to ten days, please send me a PM. I will reply with my author's email address, and send you the PDF.
If you find that even giving it a chance, it is just not for you, please reply with a simple "No thanks."
However, if you do like the characters, the style, or the promise of what is to come later, please let me know that! As little or as in-depth as you'd like! If you really are a glutton for punishment, I'll even tell you where to find the original three books!
But what I really need right now, is true honest and unbiased second opinions from people who like longer erotica stories, fully realized characters, and plots that actual are going somewhere special.
Some kind encouragement, and an occasional kick in the pants to keep me on track, will be accepted, too
I want to thank everyone on the forums that has helped me over the last few weeks, and for all of their experiences and insights that they have so graciously passed along.
Hopefully I will hear from a few of you soon!
Thanks!
I just spent a lot of time over the last eight weeks, tearing down and re-reworking the opening chapters of my first novel, that I began writing a little over thirteen years ago.
The three huge books have already been posted elsewhere, and have been enjoyed by readers for more than a few years. But the first book of the trilogy has always bothered me. The recent pandemic has suddenly given me my first real break in thirty-one years! To keep myself busy, I have finally decided to try and fix the first novel, and make it feel more like the two follow up books.
I'm looking for a few pre-readers to look over the latest PDF of the proposed new opening chapter for the Literotica Novel section. Basically it contains the main character's introduction, the first supporting members of the cast taking the stage, and the first sex scene.
By necessity, it is NOT a quick read, a barn burner, or a stroker.
As novels go, all three books eventually contain just about every sort of sex allowable to be posted here. From mild to wild. Fetish to Farce. From masturbation, threesomes, to group sex. With every combination of partners possible.
< < < < > > > >
Specifically, the PDF will be about 14 Literotica pages long.
It contains: Heterosexual Sex, Lesbianism, Voyeurism, Exhibitionism, Public Lewd Dancing, First Time Sexual Discoveries, Verbal Control and Submission, Sex at Work, and the Public Risk of Discovery.
Mainly it is MF, Mf, MFf, FMf, Fmf, FFMf, FF, Ff, with a little Bi and MM done as a remembered flashback.
< < < < > > > >
It's written in a world-building kind of style, with very intense plot twists, and fully realized characters growing and learning from their mistakes. There are no true heroes, and no true villains. Lots of ordinary and extraordinary people, just struggling to get on with their lives, and heal from old and fresh wounds.
Some, more literally than others.
The basic original novel was told in twenty long and short chapters, and clocked in at about 250,000 words.
Now I am planning on adding back in all the missing characters, and their important plot lines, that were intended to make the first book feel like the other two novels.
< < < < > > > >
All I expect from anyone getting the PDF is to read it, think about it, and send me a few words about what they thought about it. No editing is needed at this point. If you do see some consistent mistakes, that distracted you from your enjoyment, I would like to hear about those in general.
My next four chapters have already been written, and delve into much more serious submission, blindfolds, handcuffs, public sex, betrayal, and all of the consequences those sorts of things cause when they get way out of control.
I think that it is very important for anyone planning on reading the PDF to know this:
The main focus of all of the novels is, what do you do when everything has already gone so wrong? How do you pick up the pieces of your life, move on, and build up the courage to try again with someone new?
The sex that happens is always based on purely what each of the characters are into, at the moment, and where you happen to find them along their journey.
The Main, Supporting, and Minor characters all take turns moving the plot along. No one is on stage by accident, though it might take you some time to find out why.
< < < < > > > >
If you would like to read the PDF, and have time to read fourteen Lit pages over the next week to ten days, please send me a PM. I will reply with my author's email address, and send you the PDF.
If you find that even giving it a chance, it is just not for you, please reply with a simple "No thanks."
However, if you do like the characters, the style, or the promise of what is to come later, please let me know that! As little or as in-depth as you'd like! If you really are a glutton for punishment, I'll even tell you where to find the original three books!
But what I really need right now, is true honest and unbiased second opinions from people who like longer erotica stories, fully realized characters, and plots that actual are going somewhere special.
Some kind encouragement, and an occasional kick in the pants to keep me on track, will be accepted, too
I want to thank everyone on the forums that has helped me over the last few weeks, and for all of their experiences and insights that they have so graciously passed along.
Hopefully I will hear from a few of you soon!
Thanks!
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