Poetry Contest Semi-Finalists

[Angeline]

Congrats to all the contest entrants and thank you for making the contest a success.

1 WilliamButlerYeats wrote 'I am the sole heir...'
2 kitten1964 wrote The Summer Ocean
3 bogusagain wrote Retro
4 Tristesse2 wrote Siesta and Storm

5 HarryHill wrote The Deflowering of Lilly Phelps
6 Greenmountaineer wrote Coney Island
7 IanMoone wrote Take Me
8 UnderYourSpell wrote Summer seduction

9 Desejo wrote Burst
10 sexnovella wrote Where the Wings Carries
11 Cndrlla69 wrote Summer Dream
12 Rain_Lover wrote Untitled

13 pinkcherry wrote Summer Fun in the Sun
14 The_Rook wrote ODE TO MY LOVE
15 spankingtheater wrote The Waterwheel
16 butters wrote Behind the Girl in the Straw Hat

17 inquisitivepuppy wrote cave lovin
18 Remec wrote 5th & Atlantic
19 justine_1962 wrote Summer
20 niceroticlit wrote Summer Submission: A Sestina

 

[UnderYourSpell]

May I now name mine an Acrostina? An Acrostic/Tritina Hybrid

 

[butters]

May I now name mine an Acrostina? An Acrostic/Tritina Hybrid

does it require cracking it over the head with a bottle of champers, or something a little less formal? can you post the rules for its composition, please, annie? there was one phrase that really stood out for me, and that was 'a haiku of sensation'. says so much!

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Firstly you decide the word or words that will give you the letters to start the lines,in this case Erotic Summer which is what we were given as the subject. That's the Acrostic bit

Easy on my eye you bend in for a kiss
Relying on the merest subtle touch
Over my skin, a haiku of sensation

Trickling across vellum, a sure sensation
Increased by every fervent melting kiss
Covering my nakedness, I yearn a touch.

Special in every way each newest touch,
Unerringly reaching for a final sensation,
Master of seduction from that first kiss.

Melding as if as one and joined to kiss
Elusive longings disappear, sensation
Revealed before your insistent touch.

A kiss a sensual touch, devoured by sensation.

Now the Tritina usually has three tercets (three line stanzas) but that wouldn't give me enough room for all the letters in the Acrostic so as it's a hybrid I took the liberty of adding another tercet. The end words are repeated in a set order ABC CAB BCA to which I added ACB then all of the end words appear in the final line

 

[butters]

Firstly you decide the word or words that will give you the letters to start the lines,in this case Erotic Summer which is what we were given as the subject. That's the Acrostic bit

Easy on my eye you bend in for a kiss
Relying on the merest subtle touch
Over my skin, a haiku of sensation

Trickling across vellum, a sure sensation
Increased by every fervent melting kiss
Covering my nakedness, I yearn a touch.

Special in every way each newest touch,
Unerringly reaching for a final sensation,
Master of seduction from that first kiss.

Melding as if as one and joined to kiss
Elusive longings disappear, sensation
Revealed before your insistent touch.

A kiss a sensual touch, devoured by sensation.

Now the Tritina usually has three tercets (three line stanzas) but that wouldn't give me enough room for all the letters in the Acrostic so as it's a hybrid I took the liberty of adding another tercet. The end words are repeated in a set order ABC CAB BCA to which I added ACB then all of the end words appear in the final line

aha, ok, got it. the hardest part has to be making it stay interesting enough to catch the imagination as well as the eye/ear. neat job, annie! this kind of stuff is like a word-puzzle game, isn't it? fitting everything into a certain framework - it grows past the game, though, with making it into something like decent poetry at the same time!

 

[Angeline]

Firstly you decide the word or words that will give you the letters to start the lines,in this case Erotic Summer which is what we were given as the subject. That's the Acrostic bit

Easy on my eye you bend in for a kiss
Relying on the merest subtle touch
Over my skin, a haiku of sensation

Trickling across vellum, a sure sensation
Increased by every fervent melting kiss
Covering my nakedness, I yearn a touch.

Special in every way each newest touch,
Unerringly reaching for a final sensation,
Master of seduction from that first kiss.

Melding as if as one and joined to kiss
Elusive longings disappear, sensation
Revealed before your insistent touch.

A kiss a sensual touch, devoured by sensation.

Now the Tritina usually has three tercets (three line stanzas) but that wouldn't give me enough room for all the letters in the Acrostic so as it's a hybrid I took the liberty of adding another tercet. The end words are repeated in a set order ABC CAB BCA to which I added ACB then all of the end words appear in the final line

When I first read it I saw the acrostic and I know what a tercet is, but was wondering if it was a form I did not recognize. Guess it was lol. I like that you explain how you take liberties with it to make it work the way you want. To me, that's a valuable thing to know one can do with these forms.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

aha, ok, got it. the hardest part has to be making it stay interesting enough to catch the imagination as well as the eye/ear. neat job, annie! this kind of stuff is like a word-puzzle game, isn't it? fitting everything into a certain framework - it grows past the game, though, with making it into something like decent poetry at the same time!

When I first read it I saw the acrostic and I know what a tercet is, but was wondering if it was a form I did not recognize. Guess it was lol. I like that you explain how you take liberties with it to make it work the way you want. To me, that's a valuable thing to know one can do with these forms.

If you don't like it or it doesn't fit with what you want fiddle with it!

 

[Angeline]

If you don't like it or it doesn't fit with what you want fiddle with it!

Annie the first sonnet I ever wrote was all about how you need to break out from the form and find your own voice. Well it was my first so I didn't follow my own advice...didn't understand it well enough at the time. But now I always think if it's a contest between the rule and the poem, well that's no contest. Screw the rule and write the better poem if that's what you need to do. I suspect that most people who write a lot of form poems realize this.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

What gets me is people who say Form poems are too restrictive but they don't have to be, you can have a lot of fun whilst giving the brain cells a work out especially if you have an aversion to rhymes because there are plenty that don't rhyme at all

 

[Angeline]

What gets me is people who say Form poems are too restrictive but they don't have to be, you can have a lot of fun whilst giving the brain cells a work out especially if you have an aversion to rhymes because there are plenty that don't rhyme at all

Yeah well you're preaching to the choir but I hear you!

I would like to have someone do a teach-in on pantoums and/or ghazals. Those are two forms I love but feel I've never really grasped.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Yeah well you're preaching to the choir but I hear you!

I would like to have someone do a teach-in on pantoums and/or ghazals. Those are two forms I love but feel I've never really grasped.

Oh the Pantoum is a goodie once you've got a lot of the lines in place it's another like the Triolet that writes itself

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

I would like to have someone do a teach-in on pantoums and/or ghazals. Those are two forms I love but feel I've never really grasped.

I second that proposal. I was happy with my efforts in Lauren's challenge for both of those forms but never attempted them again figurong they were flukes (flooks? flewks?).