Please read "Notes To The Past: Thomas"

[LaJovena]

I wrote a little something on the spur of the moment. It's different from my previously posted material and considerably closer to my heart. It's short, about 1000 words, so please take a look and vote/leave comments. Here's the link:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=366580

(And thank you, Halliday, for your quick response! You'd commented on it before I knew it was even posted!)

Thanks,

LaJovena

 

[Anna_Malia75]

I thought it was very well done. You did a good job conveying a range of the emotions that she felt, including both her feeling of betrayal and her nagging, continuing love. There were a few sentences early on that bothered me, including the second. "I have contented myself through the years with my dreamless sleep" uses the wrong verb in "contented", imho, and the wrong preposition in "through." I would have thought something like, "I resigned myself over the years to dreamless sleep." And "Such as, I remember our first date." I think you could have done without the "Such as."

But these are small criticisms. This was a lovely piece in a difficult category, written with skill in such few words. Good job, LaJovena!

 

[Guest]

I wrote a little something on the spur of the moment. It's different from my previously posted material and considerably closer to my heart. It's short, about 1000 words, so please take a look and vote/leave comments. Here's the link:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=366580

(And thank you, Halliday, for your quick response! You'd commented on it before I knew it was even posted!)

Thanks,

LaJovena

Bittersweet and beautiful.

Well-written.

Excellent job.

 

[The_Fractal_King]

I wrote a little something on the spur of the moment. It's different from my previously posted material and considerably closer to my heart. It's short, about 1000 words, so please take a look and vote/leave comments. Here's the link:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=366580

(And thank you, Halliday, for your quick response! You'd commented on it before I knew it was even posted!)

Thanks,

LaJovena

Touching and very well written.

 

[Guest]

I went, I voted, I commented.

Superb job.

 

[Bluegray]

I loved the simplicity.

I am a terrible proofreader, so don't take my comments as those of an editor. I truly enjoyed this story, simple, short, and touching, what more can I ask?
Thanks.