Please check out my 2nd story

[Richardls]

Please check out my 2nd story. The Size Formula v2. I'm a new writer and would welcome feedback.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=119033

 

[Singularity]

A Bit on the Dry Side

I can't say that this story did a lot for me. The words I would use to describe it would be "dry" and "clinical". I don't sense any emotion or any of the visceral sexual and sensual dimensions to a really great fuck here. I don't sense any passion or any real emotional connection between the two characters.

The entire concept is based on the size of your cock, and not on anything else.

I confess I did not read chapter 1, so if there is something significant I am missing, that might be the reason.

I think you need to work on more dialog and more emotional content, to bring it more alive.


Singularity