Pick Me Up!

BB69D

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I submitted this story on Literotica a couple of weeks ago, but it never showed up, so I thought I'd post it here.

This story is true up to the part where he fingerfucks me, after that, it's fantasy! (Please leave a comment!)


Pick Me Up!
by BB69D

I like to lay on the beach and let guys pick me up. I wear a small thong bikini and I coat my bubble but with suntan oil. Then I lay on my stomach, poking my shiny wet ass up in the air. Almost any guy who talks to me ends up getting his cock sucked, and most of the time they assfuck me too!

Recently, I was laying in the sun, and I saw an older man walking down the beach. I could tell he was interested in me from a long way off, because he didn't take his eyes off of me the whole time as he walked closer. He laid his towel not too far from mine, took off his shorts, and began nude suntanning. He kept looking over at me and smiling.

After a few minutes, I got up and walked a few steps to a secluded clearing in some woods near where I was laying on the beach, took off my thong, and began rubbing more suntan oil all over my round tight butt and long tanned legs. I was rubbing oil between my smooth ass cheeks, massaging my douched wet anus when I heard him walking between the trees and I saw him coming out of the corner of my eye. I pretended I didn't know he was there and I bent over, spread my butt cheeks wide and fingered my ass and moaned with pleasure as I slid two oiled fingers in and out of my smooth hole. "I would have bet you didn't have any tan lines at all!" He said with a broad smile, looking at my thongtanned ass. I jumped at the sound of his voice, acting surprised, then I said "Well, I do have some tanlines!" After a purposefully awkward moment, I asked him, "would you mind putting some oil on my back?" I handed him my bottle of suntan oil and he squirted a generous amount in his hand and rubbed oil down my back, straight down between my buns and began massaging my ass, cock and balls from behind with his oily hand. I spread my legs more and leaned over and put both hands on a palm tree. "You can put your fingers inside me if you like, I'm very clean there".

He reached around in front of me with his left arm and began roughly stroking my cock and squeezing my balls. At the same time, he was still rubbing between my asscheeks with his right hand. He stuck first one finger, then two, deep in my douched ass. I arched my back and moaned with pleasure as his fingers probed my hot wet opening. I could feel precum starting to ooze from my cocktip as he fingered my hole. He fingerfucked me for a while, eventually sticking three fingers up my ass as he brought me to my first orgasm.

I looked behind me at his crotch and saw a pleasingly large bulge in his shorts (apparently he put them back on before he followed me from the beach). I reached back and felt his cock, it was big and growing hard! Turning around, sadly feeling his wonderful fingers slide away from my hungry ass, I knelt on the sandy ground, pulled his swimsuit down to his knees, and out popped his semi hard cock. It was nice looking, and except for his gray bushy untrimmed pubes, you couldn't tell it belonged to an old man at all. It was larger (and harder) than I expected. He was circumcised, and his cock was about 7 inches long and nice and straight and symmetrical. I took it in my hand, and closing my fist around the shaft, slowly gave him several strokes, taking in the look and feel of his beautiful cock.

His cock got fully hard from my stroking and after a while of jacking him off, I saw the first drop of precum appear at his slit. Not wanting to wait any longer, I leaned forward and licked the shiny jewel off of his cockslit with the tip of my tongue. It tasted salty and sweet, and I knew this man would deliver a delicious big load from his huge hard cock.

Holding his thick shaft with one hand, and massaging his balls with the other, I put the head of his cock on my tongue and caressed the underside while looking up into his face. He sighed and put his hands on the back of my head and pushed his cock into my mouth. I sucked the head of his cock, swirling the tip with my tongue while I rapidly stroked his hard straight shaft with my thumb underneath and three fingers on top for a few minutes. Then, leaning my head forward and opening my mouth wide, I slid his shaft all the way down my throat. (I love to deepthroat and practice with a big dildo when I don't have a cock to suck). Saliva was dripping from my chin to my chest as I bobbed my head up and down on his cock, first deepthroating to the hilt and holding it in for a second, then sliding it almost all the way out, so just the tip was in my mouth. I had one of his asscheeks in each hand as I fucked his cock with my mouth.

After a while, I took his cock out of my mouth licked his balls while I stroked his hard shaft. I was kissing and licking his thick bumpy shaft and purple smooth cockhead when he said he wanted to fuck me in my ass.

Obediently, I turned around on my knees, got down on my hands and presented myself to him doggy style. He stepped out of his shorts, got down on his knees behind me, grabbed my hips, took aim, and plunged his entire shaft up my ass all at once. "Oh!" I moaned. He started fucking me, slowly at first, then increasing speed until he was reaming my ass hard and fast. I felt my precum flowing as he hammered my ass furiously with his incredible cock! I could feel his hard shaft sliding in and out of me. The hot smooth gliding feeling of a nice hard cock in me makes me feel like my insides are opening, allowing limitless amounts of cum to come flowing out of me. I couldn't believe this old guy was fucking me so well!

When I get assfucked, my cock usually stays soft and my cum flows slowly and continuously instead of suddenly spurting. My anally induced orgasms last an incredibly long time! Also, for some reason, being assfucked makes my mouth water, and all I can think about when there's a cock in my ass is that I'd like a cock in my mouth too!

Slowly, as he reamed my ass, I was forced forward and down until I found myself laying on my chest, with him laying on top of me. I had my bottom raised to accommodate his fucking. His weight on me, along with the sand on my knees, elbows and chest was getting more and more uncomfortable with his driving pounding. "Hold on a second. . . . Wait a minute! - STOP!!!" I finally yelled. He
stopped fucking me and got off. I felt his long wet cock slide out of me. I got up and turned around. His cock looked bigger coming out than it did when it did going in! It was hugely erect, thickly veined and pointing up at the sky! "Wait right here, don't move, I'll be back in a second" I said and I ran out to the edge of the trees and looked both ways. The coast was clear, except for one person, walking down the beach, pretty far away.

Naked, I ran across the beach and jumped in the sea. In the cool water, I rubbed my hands all over my body, rubbing the sand off as well as I could. The suntan oil made sand stick to my body everywhere. I reached between my legs and rubbed my fingers across my ass. My anus was loose and open, and felt very lubricated, soft and creamy. I love being assfucked! I looked both ways up and down the beach again. That guy I saw earlier (he was looking good in a yellow Speedo!) was closer but still far enough away (or so I thought!) I ran out of the water and back to the clearing in the woods, pausing to grab my towel along the way.

Back in the clearing, the old man was there, stroking his rock-hard erection. "I don't even know your name." I asked him. "Phil" he answered. "Probably you got that name from the way you 'Phil' my ass and mouth with cock!" I joked. He laughed as I spread my towel on the ground and laid down, on my back this time, spreading my legs. Phil knelt between my legs and lifted my ankles, then shifted his hands to the back of my knees, pushing my legs back over my head, causing my ass to raise up in the air. With very little effort, he slid his cock into my slippery ass. He began fucking me again.

His cock felt incredibly good, as hard as iron sliding in and out of my ass. My knees were touching the ground by my ears, Phil had most of his weight on the back of my calves. His cock was going as deep as it could go with every thrust. He was hammering my ass, ramming his cock in to the hilt with every stroke. I was amazed by the fucking this guy was giving me! It was incredible! I was moaning with pleasure, having continuous anal orgasms and my belly was slick with suntan oil, sweat, and my cum that a good fucking makes flow from my small cock. I was in cock-lovers heaven!

We were both startled by a voice! "Hello! I'm Jason! Hope I'm not intruding, but I'd like to join you!" It was the guy with the yellow Speedos who I saw walking down the beach.

Jason was Greek looking, tall and thin, with thick black wavy hair, broad shoulders and a narrow face with nice suntan. He looked good in his high leg Speedo swimsuit. "I saw you running in and out of the sea naked and I could guess what you were doing back here!" Phil didn't miss a beat as the newcomer took off his swimsuit and revealed a long, uncut swaying soft cock. It was about eight inches long, slender and soft, hanging straight down in front of a pair of very large swaying balls.

I was moaning with pleasure as Jason knelt on my towel over my mouth. He knew I wanted to suck him. He lowered his long limp cock into my open mouth. I began sucking the foreskin covered cockhead, trying to suck more and more into my mouth, like slurping a piece of pasta. As he became aroused, I saw his cockhead emerge from its sheath. It was pointy and pink, and felt smooth and creamy on my tongue and lips. As his cock began to get harder and stand up, it became more and more difficult to keep it in my mouth, I licked his shaft, then his big balls as his growing hard-on moved his cock away from my mouth. Seeing our dilemma, Phil released one of my legs, and I lowered it while raising the other to place it on his shoulder, letting me roll over on my side. Phil was holding my leg, still ramming his cock into my ass, while Jason held my head and put his cock in my mouth and mouthfucked me with his now very hard, very long and thin cock. My nose was pressing into his black curly pubes with every stroke as he thrust his cock deep in my mouth, past my throat muscles. I couldn't help making gagging sounds as the slender cock was forced all the way down my throat. His cock was wet and shiny from my saliva, lubricating his fucking of my mouth. I could feel his cockhead sliding in and out of its foreskin as he mouthfucked me. He was quite lanky and muscular, and I could see his abs tightening as he thrust into my mouth. I enjoyed seeing the white triangle of untanned skin in contrast with his tan thighs, stomach and legs.

Phil was moaning a little now, and his cock felt harder and bigger and had more friction. I could tell he was going to cum soon. I wanted to taste his cum so I took Jason's cock out of my mouth and told the guys to switch places. Phil pulled his hard cock out of my ass and I scrambled around back to the doggy style position and eagerly took Phil's wet hard cock in my mouth. I heard Jason sigh with pleasure as he slid his rock-hard cock in my ass. His cock was longer but thinner than Phil's. It felt good, probing deeply in and out of my already stretched ass.

Phil was ready, he had a hand on each side of my head and was pumping my mouth furiously. His cockhead was smooth, hot and it felt like it filled my whole mouth, his shaft felt bumpy and so big around it stretched my lips! Suddenly, I could feel his cock swell even more and then I tasted the wonderful explosion of hot cum in my mouth! He let out a cry as he pumped jet after jet of his delicious creamy jism down my eager throat. I swallowed as fast as I could but I couldn't swallow fast enough and a little of his tasty seed escaped from one corner of my mouth. I squeezed his shaft, pumping and milking every drop of cum from his cocktip into my mouth. His cock was wet, shiny red and HOT! I was loving the taste and feel of his cock and cum in my mouth! I swallowed every drop, massaged his balls and squeezed his shaft for more. He moaned with pleasure as I put his cockhead in my mouth and sucked like drinking from a straw.

Jason was still behind me plunging his long cock in and out of of my ass. His cock was going deeper than Phil's and felt wonderful probing my inner depths. I was in ecstasy from all the cock I was receiving, my cum was flowing from my cock and I was moaning with pleasure from having continuous orgasms. I could tell Jason wasn't going to last as long before cumming. I felt his grip on my hips tighten and he paused his pumping, pulling me back and impaling me on his cock while he pushed as deep as he could. I felt his cock twitching as he pumped his load deep in my ass and moaned "I'm cumming! I'm cumming Ohhhhhh!" After he came, he began slowly pumping my ass again, I could feel the hot creamy wetness of his cum deep in my ass. As he continued thrusting, I could feel his cock getting soft inside me. After a while, I stopped licking and sucking Phil's softening thick cock and crawled forward, off Jason's cock, turned around on my hands and knees, lifted Jason's wet cummy cock to my mouth and licked him clean. I held the shaft, and pulled back the foreskin to unwrap his cockhead. I put my lips on the tip of his pointy cock qnd sucked the head into my mouth, flicking my tongue underneath. His cock was so sensitive from cumming, he was jumping and squirming as I sucked his fully exposed cockhead and milked his now completely soft cock dry.
Phil was sitting on the edge of my towel, catching his breath, I was hot and wet, covered in suntan oil, sweat and my own cum.

I wiped Phil's cum from my face, licked it off my fingers then reached out and took a cock in each hand, stroking softly. "Oh guys, that was great" I said. "I loved having both your cocks at once, you really made me happy and it felt sooo good!" Jason and Phil echoed that they enjoyed it too. We got up, got our swimsuits on (after I wetly kissed their cocks good-bye!) and walked out of the woods onto the beach. We made plans to meet here again sometime, but we didn't exchange numbers or anything. In fact, neither of them even asked my name.

Jason went walking off down the beach in the direction he came from, and Phil walked down the beach the other way.

I rinsed off in the sea, spread my towel on the sand, coated my body with a generous amount of suntan oil so I was nice and shiny and wet looking, then I laid down in the hot topical sun, waiting for the next guy(s) to come and 'Pick Me Up'!


The end, hope you like it and leave a comment!
 
I joined a couple of years ago with a different username and submitted another story that never got posted either.
I never received a reason why or an answer to my queries then, so I didn't make any this time.
 
I joined a couple of years ago with a different username and submitted another story that never got posted either.
I never received a reason why or an answer to my queries then, so I didn't make any this time.

According to your profile, you joined Lit. on December 18th, so you could not have submitted this story under this account "a couple of weeks ago." Do you know that your submissions page will tell you that your story is either approved, pending (which is well may be--it's taking quite some time for stories to post at the moment), or rejected? And, if rejected, it will give you some idea why. It's not unusual that your attempts to communicate with the site go unanswered--I've never gotten a direct response on such an attempt either.

So, did you really submit the story here a couple of weeks ago or are you just trying to circumvent the submissions process by posting it here? In a scan, I've seen no reason why it would be rejected from Lit., so my guess (if you indeed submitted it) is that it will show up in the collection in a day or two.

If the story really was being rejected by the site owners for some reason of theirs, they wouldn't appreciate having it posted on the forum either. It's just as published here as it would be in the story collection.
 
I submitted the story the day I joined. I see new stories on the new stories list with dates newer than the date I submitted it.
 
I submitted the story the day I joined. I see new stories on the new stories list with dates newer than the date I submitted it.


Those are the dates the story posted; not the dates the story was submitted. There's no listing available to anyone, including the author as far as I can tell, giving the date of actual submission for a story. As I noted, I see nothing in your story that would cause it to be rejected. So, either it will show up in the collection one of these days, or there was a problem in how you submitted it. Does it say "pending" on the story on your submission page? If not, you probably didn't get it submitted. You give no indication on whether or not you know how to read your submissions page--or what it indicates about the status of your story.

If you think the story has fallen in the cracks of submission, you can always resubmit it--but be aware that it starts all the way back at the beginning in the submissions queue if you do.
 
I joined a couple of years ago with a different username and submitted another story that never got posted either.
I never received a reason why or an answer to my queries then, so I didn't make any this time.

They've always answered my PMs. Emails are tough, because they are flooded with so many, but PMs generally get through.

This is truly strange, though. I've heard of stories being rejected for a myriad of reasons but not this.

Can you access your submissions page? The one that tells you if your story is pending or approved?
 
And stories take up to two weeks to go through.

eta: Particularly now - people writing for the Survivor contest are getting preference until the end of the year, so they can get maximum points for their work.
 
Your story.

You need to clue me in. What the hell is the point of this "story"? There is not character development, the barest shred of plot and certainly no motivation on the part of any of the charaters unless you want us to believe that your sluttness is motive.

Quite frankly, this isn't much more than a poor shot fuck scene from a really bad porno. There just isn't anything much to lot my interest from the point you wrote:
This story is true up to the part where ...[/qutoe]
That line is a total turn-off and not much more than proof positive that you have a goodly ways to go before you can write short stories with any meat in them.

I cannot count the number of times I have said this - A story has a beginning where the reader is introduced to the characters and plot. The characters are made believable and real. The plot mades some sinse within the confines of your story.

Then comes the middle where the setting and actions carries out the plot. I got fucked by two guys on the beach is not a middle. It's one line from a much longer series of paraagraphs that detail the journy toward a conclusion.

Finally, a conclusion. He came in my mouth is not a conclusion. I want to know how the journey affected the characters. Are the beet or worse off? Did they learn anything? Did they find the treasure? What the hell happened?

Now go back and try again with these ideas in mind.

There's a lot more I could tell you, but I think I'll wait until you write a real story.
 
I cannot count the number of times I have said this - A story has a beginning where the reader is introduced to the characters and plot. The characters are made believable and real. The plot mades some sinse within the confines of your story.

Then comes the middle where the setting and actions carries out the plot. I got fucked by two guys on the beach is not a middle. It's one line from a much longer series of paraagraphs that detail the journy toward a conclusion.

Finally, a conclusion. He came in my mouth is not a conclusion. I want to know how the journey affected the characters. Are the beet or worse off? Did they learn anything? Did they find the treasure? What the hell happened?


Actually, you've said it a bit too often. ALL stories don't have to follow a set formula. There are lots of ways to skin the short story mode; if there were only one, what a dull literary form it would be. Technically (in what is being taught in creative writing programs today), all a short story need have is a dilemma and some form of change--but the pro writers even mess around with that idea in search of fresh approaches to the medium. (And no, the characters don't have to have names for the story to succeed, either.)
 
Still nothing on my submissions page. Still no emails, no replies or signs of life from Literotica (except here)
At least one person read my story though.
 
Still nothing on my submissions page. Still no emails, no replies or signs of life from Literotica (except here)
At least one person read my story though.

I would have to say you probably submitted it improperly then.

Fill out the top of the submission form, copy the entire text into the story text window, scroll down and click preview.

Review the story, make sure it's formatted properly.

If you have to make a change, use the "Make Changes" button, then click preview again. When you have it the way you want it, click submit at the bottom. Then go to your submission page and make sure it's there with the status, "Pending." If not, you did something wrong.

MJL
 
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