Part 3 Written : Need Editor

[LPCream]

Hey all, so I've just finished Part 3 of my series. Obviously, it follows part 1 and 2, so if it's your thing and you have time and don't mind helping out with Part 3. Please come at me.

It's in a Google Doc so I'll send a direct link. Fingers crossed someone wants in, as I've loved writing it .

Thank you in advance.

 

[LPCream]

What am I doing wrong in here?

In the editors forum and 25 people read it but no one wants to help?

Someone tell me what I'm doing wrong please. I thought that listing the original stories was a good idea. Maybe I'm just being an impatient prick?

I wanna share and people appeared to like the first two .