Opinions and Feedback wanted.

[Eutopia]

I recently published my third bit of writing to this site, it's a simple Human Girl x Android Male, aka a Companion bot.
Originally I had set this to be a simple one-shot, but as I came to the closing of the story, I had the urge to write more.
So, I thought I would see the reaction of the readers before I write anymore.
(I'd probably write it anyway, but simply not publish it. I adore writing, but I like to please the people reading my story. If I thought no one would enjoy it, it would simply be for personal reading.)
I'd love to hear your thoughts on the story, if this could be something you see other Literotica readers enjoying.

My second ask of you is to give me your opinion on how I should go about my second story. I am juggling between the idea of turning it into a multi-chapter story with a plot, or simply keep it a series of inter-connected one-shot. Right now I am certainly leaning towards a more of a inter-connected one-shot idea. I'm less likely to get bored with the story and ditch it that way, and I can assure readers it's going to smutty-smut-smut in every submission.

So, what say ye' browsers of Literotica forums?

This is the link to the story, here: http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=508870

 

[OnnaDare]

I enjoyed your story! (even though I don't read alot of Sci-Fi / Fantasy)

One little nitpick, though, you needn't have to put in //flashback// as your story seems to unfold chronologically in order, i.e....backstory, ordering, unpacking, setting up, relationship unfolds, etc. It isn't like it jumps around through time alot. We can tell it's told in past tense.

Also, since it's "Sci-Fi," and set in a future world where technology is very advanced, you could have some inventive fun with her personal electronics. It's 2100, who uses a mouse anymore? Or a USB cord? It could be all voice-interactive or touch-screen, or memory-intuitive linked or such.

And if your heroine is such a homebody - why not get her more Bots to play with?
Keep writing! Have fun and wow us!

 

[kromen]

I agree with Onna. It was a good read, but the //flashbacks// kept stopping the flow of the tale, like a faulty transmission. Try to leave them out next time.