One Pony Show

[Dilbo]

Ms. Jones has been married for 25 years and has two children...a boy and a girl in their early 20's. Very early in the marriage, the couple go with their neighbors, the Smiths, to a seaside resort for a holiday weekend. After much wine, the four of them remove all of their clothing on a dare and spend two more days fucking and sucking each other feverishly. For the next several years, in their homes, they continue the relationships happily. The wives each give birth eventually to a total of four children. By the Jones' tenth anniversary, Mr. Jones, a very well-endowed fellow, has lost interest in fucking his wife, and their neighbors have moved away.
In order to satisfy her lustful cravings, Ms. Jones discovers the joys of using sex toys to satisfy
herself. Time goes by, and Ms. Jones confesses, by email, the use of her toys to her father's best friend. Stimulated by her confession, her dad's friend proposes an email relationship in which each of them help each other to achieve orgasm by the use of words and their own hands and in her case, her devices. She is turned on especially by his skill in describing his imaginary penetration of her asshole and in enjoying the taste of his cum, and he is turned on by her florid descriptions of messaging his cum into every crevasse in her, and into her young daughter's, willing body.

 

[sirhugs]

there's a lot going on here, and I'm not seeing yet how its all necessarily connected.

How do the toys relate to the swapping?

How or why does the cyber relationship fit?

To work, this needs to be novel length so everything connects up.

I did have an idea about the swapping - they only do it once a year...but some or all of the ids are born almost exactly nine months later. No one wants to test for fatherhood, they each raise the kids as if the husbands are definitely the fathers...

but then two of the kids start to date...

 

[Dilbo]

Good questions, Sirhugs. Not sure I have all the answers, but whatever comes of this, it shouldn't be of novel length...at least for me to try undertaking it.
The swapping happens first in the chronology of the tale, establishing the sexuality of Ms. Jones, her hubby and their neighbors. Once the original relationships have been consummated, it'd be unlikely that they would only recur on anniversary occasions, since they are all next door neighbors back home. Maybe the neighbors move away after the initial orgy, and that sets up a celebratory anniversary situation. I like the idea that the wives become pregnant at least twice soon after the Joneses and the Smiths have spent time fucking each other.
The use of the toys come in after well-hung hubby loses interest, and the neighbor couple HAS moved away, depriving Ms. Jones of the use of both of the Smith's anatomy. Again, it's a matter of chronology.
After years of self-satisfaction with her toys, she discovers that her dad's best friend has been an amateur pornographer and sex nut for several years and that she can use his invited erotic emails to her to supplement the pleasure she has gotten from her toy stash. THEN, at about this very same time, her daughter finds her toy stash and asks her mom to use them on her as well as to let her in on the cybersex communication (a sidebar subplot). At the same time as well, she learns that her son and daughter have been fucking each other for several years, and her daughter tells her that her brother's cock is more like that of former neighbor, Mr. Smith, than it is of her fathers.
Is this now going anywhere in terms of a plot?

 

[sirhugs]

its filling out nicely.

do you need the daughter/son action AND the photographer, or does that add an extra layer of complexity unnecessarily?

I think you could have them as still neighbours but they agree NOT to swap except when on vacation - after all, the kids are around the rest of the year, right?

 

[Dilbo]

No photographer need be involved. Her dad's friend is a pornographer, not a photographer. The daughter/son twist is in, however. The tease is, "how would the daughter know how her brother's cock compared in resemblance to the father next door's erect cock rather than to her own father's big member?' Has she also seen and enjoyed both, as well as her brother's??

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

I think th is guys needs to go back to his sand box and play, DG

 

[Dilbo]

That's where he'll be for the rest of the afternoon. How did you know?

 

[Fantasies_only]

Do you need the daughter/son action?

I agree, I don't think this is necessary as you have too much in it already (can be executed better).

If you do add this, you must establish their ages as both in their late 20s/early 30s (make the mother a young, hot step mom, not a biological one).
To say the kids have been "fucking for years" sounds like they have started before 18.
Even if you don't mean that, the reader can interpret it that way and complain, and the story would be deleted.