Olympic Dreams

[Netherlands]

The winning poem from the Netherlands is up.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=39866

Be well.



The Netherlands

 

[Guest]

Judge #4 here.

STYLE (6.0)
--Saw no disparity between the poets' styles, yet the style I perceived was somewhat pedestrian.

FORM (5.0)
--Unlike Myanmar's poem, I could clearly see the rhyming pattern.

--The rhythm chosen felt like a military march to me, which contradicts the idea of figure skating, in which the skaters are fluid and their movements change according to the music.

IMAGERY (3.5)
--I adore figure skating. That graceful yet powerful sport is rife with imagery that could have been tapped. I didn't see or feel much of anything in this poem. Like the poets were afraid to really go for the gusto with words and emotion.

--Seemed to me that the point of the poem was to contrast their days of work/performances with their passionate nights. This was done over and over unnecessarily.

Obviously the other judges found this poem more to their own tastes, and I am in the minority which is fine. This is a subjective thing we've attempted to do. So take heart in what they have to say.