Oh - for FUCK's sake!!!

[Guest]

I've had this story rejected three times because Lit doesn't allow "Underage roleplay (blah blah blah), please make clear that participants are above the age of 18"

Come on - how much clearer do I have to make this??? Anyone have ay suggestions?


***warning*** Daddy/daughter roleplay in FPP - not to everyone's taste. *shrugs*

Submitted:


<I><center>***Author’s Note:

This is a work of fiction depicting a role-play between consenting adults over the age of 18.***</center></I>

I prepare carefully for our game. My long blonde hair is in a ponytail, my nails polished in barely there pink. White bra and panties, plain, just the way you like them, Daddy. Long white socks, short school skirt and plain white shirt complete the ensemble. Only minimal makeup - a little mascara and a touch of pink lip-gloss to brighten.

On my way to your office I remember your words – “Only a mature woman can truly appreciate the subtleties of this game, Baby. Your experience and talent only make the play that much sweeter.”

A long overcoat covers my costume. To anyone seeing me I am an average thirty-five year old businesswoman on her way to an appointment. Only I know that under my coat a Lolita is hidden, waiting for release.

 

[cloudy]

I would suggest PM'ing Laurel, and explaining that it has been rejected and why, and that possibly it was rejected incorrectly. Include the title info, etc.

Be polite and be succinct, and don't expect a reply right away - its a big site. I've always gotten help from her in situations similar to this, although mine was rejected for spelling because it didn't like the creole I used in one story.

Most stories aren't read by people, just by bots, so enlist her help.

 

[Guest]

I would suggest PM'ing Laurel, and explaining that it has been rejected and why, and that possibly it was rejected incorrectly. Include the title info, etc.

Be polite and be succinct, and don't expect a reply right away - its a big site. I've always gotten help from her in situations similar to this, although mine was rejected for spelling because it didn't like the creole I used in one story.

Most stories aren't read by people, just by bots, so enlist her help.

Ahh - really? I didn't know about the 'bots. That explains things. Thanks much, Cloudy.

Of course, polite. I can vent here. *grin*

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

I would suggest PM'ing Laurel, and explaining that it has been rejected and why, and that possibly it was rejected incorrectly. Include the title info, etc.

Be polite and be succinct, and don't expect a reply right away - its a big site. I've always gotten help from her in situations similar to this, although mine was rejected for spelling because it didn't like the creole I used in one story.

Most stories aren't read by people, just by bots, so enlist her help.

Yeah... or rewrite the backstory to put the setting in a retirement home.

 

[gauchecritic]

Despite the warnings etc the actual text does read like a young girl playing grown-up rather than the other way round.

Only a mature woman can truly appreciate the subtleties of this game, Baby. Your experience and talent only make the play that much sweeter.”

This reads as 'You are older than your years and your youthful experience and talent make it sweeter'

To anyone seeing me I am an average thirty-five year old businesswoman on her way to an appointment. Only I know that under my coat a Lolita is hidden, waiting for release.

This reads as ' I am the opposite of what I appear (35 years old) and when I take off my coat (clothes) you will see why'

That's how it read to me. I can see why it might be rejected,

 

[mikey2much]

you might try this

Hi,
you might want to post the story just the way it is over at this site.
www.storiesonline.net

I have changed some of my stories too get posted and now I always post the ones I might have trouble with there first so I have a chance to see how the readers will react.
just a thought.
mike

 

[Darkniciad]

If you fully immerse in the persona of a young girl after the introduction, it walks the line. The one role-playing scene I have in mine makes enough references to the "game" in her thoughts that you simply can't read even a small part of it without knowing the participants are over 18.

It may be a matter of degrees. If someone could read the bulk of the sex-scene out of context with the rest of the story and see a child, it will probably get rejected.

I know that when I posted that chapter ( and later posted an edit to same ) I noted in the moderator section that the chapter contained a role-playing scene so it wouldn't get a knee-jerk rejection.