Newest Transsexual/crossdresser Story

[the_apocalypse]

My newest story about the slow change in one man's life has just been approved.

Would love to hear what everyone thinks please.

http://www.literotica.com/s/from-martin-to-martina-ch-01

It is in the transsexual/crossdresser category.

CHAPTER 4 APPROVED AND AVAILABLE TO READ

 

[hottchic]

My newest story about the slow change in one man's life has just been approved.

Would love to hear what everyone thinks please.

http://www.literotica.com/s/from-martin-to-martina-ch-01

It is in the transsexual/crossdresser category.

I read your story, and gave it 5*, I believe it has potential for the start of a series.

You have built up the anticipation, but in the next chapter you will need to deliver. Transgender erotica starts to become really interesting when the secret gets shared with another person, either female or male.

There are many ways you can go with this story PM me if you are interested in my ideas.

 

[the_apocalypse]

I read your story, and gave it 5*, I believe it has potential for the start of a series.

You have built up the anticipation, but in the next chapter you will need to deliver. Transgender erotica starts to become really interesting when the secret gets shared with another person, either female or male.

There are many ways you can go with this story PM me if you are interested in my ideas.

Thank you for reading and commenting on my story, I really appreciate it. So far I have chapter 2 submitted and chapter 3 just finished but not submitted. I thank you for your offer of help and advice and will definitely take you up on it as the story develops.

 

[Experiencedguy]

Hi Apocalypse. Always enjoy all of your TS/TG/CD stories.

Same critical comments as before, followed by the same conclusion: Your stories are so good, it is easy for me to overlook the technical faults.

Just keep up the good work, enjoying yourself, and entertaining all of us who enjoy this genre. I look forward to the rest.

 

[the_apocalypse]

Hi Apocalypse. Always enjoy all of your TS/TG/CD stories.

Same critical comments as before, followed by the same conclusion: Your stories are so good, it is easy for me to overlook the technical faults.

Just keep up the good work, enjoying yourself, and entertaining all of us who enjoy this genre. I look forward to the rest.

Hi Experienced and thank you for reading my newest story and I am glad you are still enjoying my writing.

 

[dewanand]

I find your story nice and it reminds me of my own fantasies. I have different theorems on these things and next year I want to publish a book about it. I will try to write some stories also about the dream to be a real girl, with everything on it.

dewanand

 

[Grimfalcon]

I’m not into this particular thing, so the sexual excitement was missing on my end. I did find it very believable though, as your character started to come to grips with his self-exploration, and the story flowed smoothly for the most part. Overall a decent read.

As mentioned above, there were numerous grammar and sentence structure issues. (I’m by no means perfect or innocent of many of them myself.) One of which, that happens to be a pet peeve of mine though, is you seemed to have a habit of writing in the passive voice a lot; nothing wrong with it if done correctly and in moderation.
An example that sticks out to me-

“As I walked in I called out her name and waited for a response that never came.”

Why not say: “I walked in, calling out her name, waiting for a response that never came.” Active voice sounds better in a situation like this, in my opinion.

Another is your character stammers or stutters on numerous occasions. You spell it out, then put a tag at the end as well. I would do one or the other; using both seems kind of redundant to me, overstating the obvious. Once again, just my preference in writing style.

Thanks for posting. It was actually the first crossdressing story I’ve read.

 

[the_apocalypse]

I’m not into this particular thing, so the sexual excitement was missing on my end. I did find it very believable though, as your character started to come to grips with his self-exploration, and the story flowed smoothly for the most part. Overall a decent read.

As mentioned above, there were numerous grammar and sentence structure issues. (I’m by no means perfect or innocent of many of them myself.) One of which, that happens to be a pet peeve of mine though, is you seemed to have a habit of writing in the passive voice a lot; nothing wrong with it if done correctly and in moderation.
An example that sticks out to me-

“As I walked in I called out her name and waited for a response that never came.”

Why not say: “I walked in, calling out her name, waiting for a response that never came.” Active voice sounds better in a situation like this, in my opinion.

Another is your character stammers or stutters on numerous occasions. You spell it out, then put a tag at the end as well. I would do one or the other; using both seems kind of redundant to me, overstating the obvious. Once again, just my preference in writing style.

Thanks for posting. It was actually the first crossdressing story I’ve read.

Hi and thank you for your feedback. I shall take what you said on board and try to use those ideas in the future

 

[ireadit]

I agree about the grammar and the redundancy. All of that can easily be cleaned up, so long as you have not taught your spelling and grammar checker to check incorrectly. You have a good line and a good flow. When is chapter 4 going to appear?

 

[the_apocalypse]

I agree about the grammar and the redundancy. All of that can easily be cleaned up, so long as you have not taught your spelling and grammar checker to check incorrectly. You have a good line and a good flow. When is chapter 4 going to appear?

thanks for your comment. chapter 4 has already been submitted just waiting approval

 

[Tyro999]

I agree about the grammar and the redundancy. All of that can easily be cleaned up, so long as you have not taught your spelling and grammar checker to check incorrectly.

A spell-checker is not much use with homonyms. The single most annoying ones I run across here on Lit are peeked/peaked/piqued and the use of cloths when the writer obviously means clothes. [She shivered in anticipation as Jim began to remove her cloths, slowly and sensually. I have run across several Literotica authors who apparently think "cloths" is correct, and use it throughout their stories instead of clothes. I have taken to abandoning a story the third time that happens.

 

[the_apocalypse]

Chapter 4 Approved And Available To Read

 

[the_apocalypse]

Chapter 5 Approved And Available To Read