New writer seeks feedback

[Storyguy]

I just posted a sequel to my first story. The story is located at
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=11765

I just wanted some feedback. Let me know what you think of the story.

If there is anything that you would like to see happen in the next installment, let me know.

Thanks for your help and I appreciate your constructive criticisms.

Storyguy

 

[gedda98]

Feedback to Story Guy

Hey, I just read your story. Not bad, not bad at all. I was a little unsure whether it was a dream or actually happening, until the last few lines. I like the way you record in detail the way you would have explored your partner. Subtle detail is important in a good erotic story. I will be interested to see the next chapter - when you get to the Hotel. Your attention to her sweet arse was also similar to my tastes (literally and literaturally). I know how important it is to get feed back. I have been waiting for feedback for a couple of my stories (see bulletin board below "Meeting in Oz". Could you read it and get back to me? Also I have just sent in a story called "Her Gift - the dress" - I think you will like it as it is a similar style to yours. Keep the notices (and stories) coming.
Gedda

 

[gedda98]

Correction

Sorry - the title of the story you should read is "Her Special Gift - the dress" . Let me know what you think. I appreciate your feedback.