New Writer Looking for Feedback

[NaughtyGeminiGirl96]

Hi I posted my story but didn't get much feedback I would love to hear peoples honest opinions on the story, don't worry about hurting my feelings. I really want to get better at my writing I need to hear what the readers actually think.
If you comment of give feedback THANK YOU SO MUUCH!!!!

The story is about a sub who gets punished throughout the day by her Dom with a toy.

https://literotica.com/s/a-day-of-denial

 

[KeithD]

I don't read in your genre, but, with just one story, you have a phenomenal score, over 10,000 views, several followers, and a very nice comment. Most stories here don't get even one comment, followers, or a 4.86 score--certainly first posted stories. I'm not sure what more validation you think you need. Rather than dwelling on your first story, which has done just fine, suggest you write more and build up more followers--and worry less about the lack of comments here. In most categories they're pretty rare.

 

[shawnavinyltv]

Welcome and nice work

Hello, first congrats. I remember posting my first story and it was a little scary, but also very exciting. So, congrats and welcome!

I'd agree wholeheartedly with KeithD, posts on the actual stories are pretty few and far between, and there's an audience that's always looking for something. Overall, I thought the story was good, not my genre, but I enjoyed the action and the dynamic between the two characters.

For suggestions, especially with BDSM stories, I love the mental aspects. So, I'm always interested in what motivates them. For instance what are their rules? What does it mean when she loses 'Daddy' privileges? Is it just to call him that, or is there more? How did they meet? Things like that interest me. Perhaps that would be good fodder for a part 2? Also, keep in mind, that's my mindset, not everyone is looking for the same thing, so do what works best for you.